myfuturecsi
Corpse
Makes sense.:thumbsup:
I'm glad I'm done mine. I just hope everyone likes it.
Nick Song Fic Ch #8 - "Angel"- Now up!
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Makes sense.:thumbsup:
I'm glad I'm done mine. I just hope everyone likes it.
americanstalker
Witness
Are there any more stories coming in?
We should have them posted sometime tomorrow evening.
Yay!!!! :bolian:
Re: Nick Fic Song Ch #7 - "It Was An Accident"- Now up!
Ladies and gentlemen, presenting the eighth round of the Nick Fic Song Challenge! Thanks to everyone who participated! The stories are up for you to read on our beautiful site created for us by Egeria, complete with a homepage and links to individual challenge pages! Great job! Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!
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Nick Fic Song Challenge
Round Eight
Round Eight
Ladies and gentlemen, presenting the eighth round of the Nick Fic Song Challenge! Thanks to everyone who participated!
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myfuturecsi
Corpse
Re: Nick Fic Song Ch #7 - "It Was An Accident"- Now up!
Okay I'll start:
Escaping One Last Time:
You've mastered a heavy topic-suicide. It was well-written and covered the sadness and despair a suicide causes loved ones left behind. My only critique is a. to try and move from tell to show in your writing and b. my feeling about Nick and suicide is this-Nick is a very principled character on the show and I would say he would be more angry that saddened by a suicide of a friend. That's just my opinion. The story was very heart-breaking and compassionate. Great work!
Angels Around Us:
Holy cow that was intense. You described Nick's ordeal in vivid detail. I felt like I was lost in the show. And I have to say your choice of 'angel' for Nicky was perfect. I enjoyed this and the ending was very endearing. Great job!
This One Moment:
Oh wow! Ellie's back. I like her character a lot. She's very screwed up but very interesting. A really great story touching on Brass's shooting. I loved it!
Peace:
Wow. Great story and interesting that someone from Nick's past would bring him such interesting news. I'm surprised Nick wasn't angry either, but I guess given the circumstances he chose to take the high road. Well written and interesting.
One More Case:
I could see Nick going to the edge to rescue a baby. That's our Nicky. I thought it was interesting how you brought April in, gives the story a present day feel. Yep. I see Nicky doing that.
I'll finish the rest of the reviews in another day.
Okay I'll start:
Escaping One Last Time:
You've mastered a heavy topic-suicide. It was well-written and covered the sadness and despair a suicide causes loved ones left behind. My only critique is a. to try and move from tell to show in your writing and b. my feeling about Nick and suicide is this-Nick is a very principled character on the show and I would say he would be more angry that saddened by a suicide of a friend. That's just my opinion. The story was very heart-breaking and compassionate. Great work!
Angels Around Us:
Holy cow that was intense. You described Nick's ordeal in vivid detail. I felt like I was lost in the show. And I have to say your choice of 'angel' for Nicky was perfect. I enjoyed this and the ending was very endearing. Great job!
This One Moment:
Oh wow! Ellie's back. I like her character a lot. She's very screwed up but very interesting. A really great story touching on Brass's shooting. I loved it!
Peace:
Wow. Great story and interesting that someone from Nick's past would bring him such interesting news. I'm surprised Nick wasn't angry either, but I guess given the circumstances he chose to take the high road. Well written and interesting.
One More Case:
I could see Nick going to the edge to rescue a baby. That's our Nicky. I thought it was interesting how you brought April in, gives the story a present day feel. Yep. I see Nicky doing that.
I'll finish the rest of the reviews in another day.
Escaping One Last Time- That was so sad. Poor Nicky to lose a friend that way and feeling like he should have been able to do something to change things. Grissom was right though... very rarely can you talk someone out of something like that.
Angels Around Us- Wow. I'm speechless. That was unexpected. It made me tear up. Love the choice of angel. That last line was beautiful.
This One Moment- Didn't expect Ellie to make an appearance. Nice choice. Loved how Nick kept telling her that Brass wanted to see her. Nice touch making the small mention of the Kristy thing.
Peace- Wow! That must have been quite a shocker for Nick learning those two pieces of information within those few minutes. Normally he probably would have been angry, but given the situation, he didn't express any. Nicely done.
One More Case- Definitely something Nick would do. Liked Cath's joke at the end.
The Anniversary- That was beautiful. It would be great to see something like this on the show. Loved how Nick said he goes to see Eli often and why. And the end was priceless.
Wooden Angel- I like the line about the doctor who was a Langston with a French accent. I was really nervous for Nick in this one. Never expected Grissom to show up. Loved the ending.
Everyone did a great job!
Angels Around Us- Wow. I'm speechless. That was unexpected. It made me tear up. Love the choice of angel.
That last line was beautiful. This One Moment- Didn't expect Ellie to make an appearance. Nice choice. Loved how Nick kept telling her that Brass wanted to see her. Nice touch making the small mention of the Kristy thing.
Peace- Wow! That must have been quite a shocker for Nick learning those two pieces of information within those few minutes. Normally he probably would have been angry, but given the situation, he didn't express any. Nicely done.
One More Case- Definitely something Nick would do. Liked Cath's joke at the end.
The Anniversary- That was beautiful. It would be great to see something like this on the show. Loved how Nick said he goes to see Eli often and why. And the end was priceless.
Wooden Angel- I like the line about the doctor who was a Langston with a French accent. I was really nervous for Nick in this one. Never expected Grissom to show up. Loved the ending.
Everyone did a great job!
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PrincessJ88
Coroner
Escaping One Last Time - Well done story. It's nice seeing a story that reflects back on Nick's younger years. We know Nick was in a frat so clearly he had friends in college. And it makes total sense knowing what we know about Nick that he'd drop everything and go and that even though he ended up on a case that so resembled his friend's suicide he still pushed through his feelings and did his job. I really liked that Nick was concerned about his friend's kids but knew that they'd talk when they were ready. You captured Nick perfectly.
Angels Around Us - Just another day at the job until some nut job shoots you....I liked seeing Nick choosing not to pass judgment on Beaufort until the evidence was in. I liked the line about how Brass didn't want to be in the hood without Nick and Catherine...very Brass.
This One Moment - Nick and Ellie....very interesting. You captured the behavior of an addict very well i thought. Ellie's need for that drug induced release was nicely described. I would have liked to have seen something like this happen on the show....especially Nick having to stop her advances.
Peace - I really liked that Nick wasn't angry at Beth and that he turned to Catherine for advice. The ending was a little abrupt I felt. It could have been wrapped up better. But overall not bad.
One More Case - Always the hero....Catherine's probably right about heroes finding death. I liked that you touched on Brass's shooting and how he almost didn't make it. The description of the fire and the aftermath was well done.
The Anniversary - For a moment there I though they were going to kiss or end up in a drunken one night stand....anyway....I really liked how you captured the relationship they do have. Nick deciding to give Catherine the roses instead was sweet and pouring out the beer like he was in a hip hop video was different.
Wooden Angel - Nick the UN guy is an interesting twist. This read like a movie and it's one I wouldn't mind seeing. Ishmael was right, he did need that angel. Having Grissom show up was a shock.....I liked the "I thought you were retired" line.
I don't know who wrote what so i guess I'll be surprised.
Angels Around Us - Just another day at the job until some nut job shoots you....I liked seeing Nick choosing not to pass judgment on Beaufort until the evidence was in. I liked the line about how Brass didn't want to be in the hood without Nick and Catherine...very Brass.
This One Moment - Nick and Ellie....very interesting. You captured the behavior of an addict very well i thought. Ellie's need for that drug induced release was nicely described. I would have liked to have seen something like this happen on the show....especially Nick having to stop her advances.
Peace - I really liked that Nick wasn't angry at Beth and that he turned to Catherine for advice. The ending was a little abrupt I felt. It could have been wrapped up better. But overall not bad.
One More Case - Always the hero....Catherine's probably right about heroes finding death. I liked that you touched on Brass's shooting and how he almost didn't make it. The description of the fire and the aftermath was well done.
The Anniversary - For a moment there I though they were going to kiss or end up in a drunken one night stand....anyway....I really liked how you captured the relationship they do have. Nick deciding to give Catherine the roses instead was sweet and pouring out the beer like he was in a hip hop video was different.
Wooden Angel - Nick the UN guy is an interesting twist. This read like a movie and it's one I wouldn't mind seeing. Ishmael was right, he did need that angel. Having Grissom show up was a shock.....I liked the "I thought you were retired" line.
I don't know who wrote what so i guess I'll be surprised.
First and foremost, great job everyone. :thumbsup: I enjoyed each story for different reasons, and can't wait to read more in the next challenge. It's amazing how everyone came up with such different stories. Again, great work, and thank you for writing.
“Escaping One Last Time” This story was a thoughtful insight into how suicide effects those who are left behind. Nick questioning why and if he could have done something to stop it, was true to what most feel in situations such as this. Todd may have found peace, but his selfish act left behind a wife, children, family and friends questioning why? Good job with this story and the subject matter.
“Angels Around Us” Wow Nick seems to find trouble everywhere he goes. The part about Nick being angry with the dark angel fit well with everything that's happened to him. Of course he'd be ticked off. The next part I liked was Warrick bringing the angels to Nick, and the angels flying them away from there. The ending was sweet and something I'd like to see on the show. All-in-all a good effort, and nice use of the song lyrics within the dialog.
“This One Moment” Wouldn't have thought to use Ellie for this challenge, excellent choice. You captured her character perfectly. You captured the true image of an addict, how they they live life by their rules, and to hell with anyone else. She has that one moment of regret, but then the call of the drug pulls her back into oblivion, and thoughtlessness. Great job, excellent story.
“Peace” Wow what a shocker for Nick. I liked how he handled the situation, how he accepted his responsibilities. I also thought the way Catherine told him to go to her, give her some peace was true to the character. This was a very tender story, sad, but sweet. Nice job.
“One More Case” The descriptivness of this story was well done. As the reader, you felt as if you were watching the scene unfold. Brass' thoughts while watching Nick struggle to stay alive were gut wrenching. Then the part at the end with Catherine's thoughts (Nick was a hero, and heroes always had a way of finding death.) well that just sent chills down me spine because it's true. Excellent story, well written.
“The Anniversary” Oh, how I wish the writers on the show would use your idea, and include a scene like this on CSI. The dialog between Nick and Catherine was true to the characters and absolutely believable. The ending with Nick switching the flowers for a beer was brilliant and sweet. I enjoyed this story, the shared friendship, and Nick and Catherine's angel following them. Great story, well done.
“Wooden Angel” This story read like a movie script, a good movie script. The angst and action had me on the edge of my seat. I thought for sure Nick was a dead man. How in the world did you come up with such an idea? Amazing and believable. Grissom showing up just in time was a brilliant twist, and their dialog was right on the mark. Excellent story, well written, and quite the adventure.
Take care all,
Kelli
“Escaping One Last Time” This story was a thoughtful insight into how suicide effects those who are left behind. Nick questioning why and if he could have done something to stop it, was true to what most feel in situations such as this. Todd may have found peace, but his selfish act left behind a wife, children, family and friends questioning why? Good job with this story and the subject matter.
“Angels Around Us” Wow Nick seems to find trouble everywhere he goes. The part about Nick being angry with the dark angel fit well with everything that's happened to him. Of course he'd be ticked off. The next part I liked was Warrick bringing the angels to Nick, and the angels flying them away from there. The ending was sweet and something I'd like to see on the show. All-in-all a good effort, and nice use of the song lyrics within the dialog.
“This One Moment” Wouldn't have thought to use Ellie for this challenge, excellent choice. You captured her character perfectly. You captured the true image of an addict, how they they live life by their rules, and to hell with anyone else. She has that one moment of regret, but then the call of the drug pulls her back into oblivion, and thoughtlessness. Great job, excellent story.
“Peace” Wow what a shocker for Nick. I liked how he handled the situation, how he accepted his responsibilities. I also thought the way Catherine told him to go to her, give her some peace was true to the character. This was a very tender story, sad, but sweet. Nice job.
“One More Case” The descriptivness of this story was well done. As the reader, you felt as if you were watching the scene unfold. Brass' thoughts while watching Nick struggle to stay alive were gut wrenching. Then the part at the end with Catherine's thoughts (Nick was a hero, and heroes always had a way of finding death.) well that just sent chills down me spine because it's true. Excellent story, well written.
“The Anniversary” Oh, how I wish the writers on the show would use your idea, and include a scene like this on CSI. The dialog between Nick and Catherine was true to the characters and absolutely believable. The ending with Nick switching the flowers for a beer was brilliant and sweet. I enjoyed this story, the shared friendship, and Nick and Catherine's angel following them. Great story, well done.
“Wooden Angel” This story read like a movie script, a good movie script. The angst and action had me on the edge of my seat. I thought for sure Nick was a dead man. How in the world did you come up with such an idea? Amazing and believable. Grissom showing up just in time was a brilliant twist, and their dialog was right on the mark. Excellent story, well written, and quite the adventure.
Take care all,
Kelli
Hey ladies
I just wanted to let you know that I published my story for this challenge round here, since it was too long to be part of the original challenge I would like to hear what you think about it anyway though...
If you don't have an account on FF.net, you can also write me a pm. Since this is the hardest fic I ever wrote, I really would like to get reviews on it
I'll start reviewing tomorrow But I can say one thing for sure... great work, you all :thumbsup:
I just wanted to let you know that I published my story for this challenge round here, since it was too long to be part of the original challenge
I would like to hear what you think about it anyway though...If you don't have an account on FF.net, you can also write me a pm. Since this is the hardest fic I ever wrote, I really would like to get reviews on it
I'll start reviewing tomorrow
But I can say one thing for sure... great work, you all :thumbsup:
Another excellent turnout! Thanks for playing, everyone!
Escaping One Last Time - Good insight into how suicide affects the lives of so many. We never really know how many people we have touched with our lives, sometimes not until it's too late. It's clear that Nick wishes he could have done something to help his friend...a hard thing to live with. Nice story!
Angels Around Us - Great writing and concept! I most especially love the epilogue...you've captured the friendship among the three there so beautifully! I think maybe the song lyrics could have been inserted within the text without them being actual words spoken by characters tho. I think you write dialogue so well and could have written even better words for them.
This One Moment - I really love this one! I don't think I ever would have thought to put Nick and Ellie in a fic. Ellie's dialogue is so very realistic. I can hear it in my head, especially when she's talking to Nick. And I think how it turned out is very realistic too...just how they would handle it on the show. It's like when Brass reached out to her so many times and she backed off...your story stays true to her character in that way.
Peace - Interesting...so strange to think of Nick as a father to a teenage girl! I like that he's not angry...that he's stepping up and going to take care of her. Maybe his (and her) feelings could have been fleshed out a little more so we know how they really feel, but it's a nice start. Maybe a sequel so we see how he's handling it?
One More Case - Very exciting! I like Nick, the hero. Your description of Catherine sleeping in the hospital... :lol: But what I REALLY love are Brass' thoughts here:
The Anniversary - A really nice followup for Nick and Catherine both about how they're dealing with Warrick's death. Very true to both characters. "Warrick like beer; you like roses." Love it!
Wooden Angel - Adventuresome and angsty! It seems exactly like something Nick would do...and exactly like the kind of a mess he would get into too! :lol: You are a very descriptive writer and give a lot of details so the reader knows exactly what is going on. I like how it ended with the sponsorship. Nice job!
Escaping One Last Time - Good insight into how suicide affects the lives of so many. We never really know how many people we have touched with our lives, sometimes not until it's too late. It's clear that Nick wishes he could have done something to help his friend...a hard thing to live with. Nice story!
Angels Around Us - Great writing and concept! I most especially love the epilogue...you've captured the friendship among the three there so beautifully! I think maybe the song lyrics could have been inserted within the text without them being actual words spoken by characters tho. I think you write dialogue so well and could have written even better words for them.
This One Moment - I really love this one! I don't think I ever would have thought to put Nick and Ellie in a fic. Ellie's dialogue is so very realistic. I can hear it in my head, especially when she's talking to Nick. And I think how it turned out is very realistic too...just how they would handle it on the show. It's like when Brass reached out to her so many times and she backed off...your story stays true to her character in that way.
Peace - Interesting...so strange to think of Nick as a father to a teenage girl!
I like that he's not angry...that he's stepping up and going to take care of her. Maybe his (and her) feelings could have been fleshed out a little more so we know how they really feel, but it's a nice start. Maybe a sequel so we see how he's handling it? One More Case - Very exciting! I like Nick, the hero.
Your description of Catherine sleeping in the hospital... :lol: But what I REALLY love are Brass' thoughts here:Awesome!! And this from Nick:
Beautiful!! "Sweet madness, glorious sadness"...I love that!
The Anniversary - A really nice followup for Nick and Catherine both about how they're dealing with Warrick's death. Very true to both characters. "Warrick like beer; you like roses." Love it!
Wooden Angel - Adventuresome and angsty!
It seems exactly like something Nick would do...and exactly like the kind of a mess he would get into too! :lol: You are a very descriptive writer and give a lot of details so the reader knows exactly what is going on. I like how it ended with the sponsorship. Nice job!Like promised... here are my reviews
Escaping One Last Time
Well this was a good story to start a challenge I like the idea of this story very much. It sounds like something Nick would do.
I know who wrote this one Your writing style is pretty new to me, so it wasn’t too hard to guess.
You tried to write very detailed and your story was well thought trough. The reader could see it happen like that
I had always a hard time to see the facts that make people commit suicide… I mean he had a wife and two children. No matter how bad life treats you, isn’t a family worth to live for? It’s sad that for some people it isn’t… just two weeks ago our German national soccer goalkeeper committed suicide and everyone was asking why he left his wife and two year old daughter grieving… the answer is depressions. He kept them quiet because if he had told, society would have seen him as weak. Only his family knew. He was that scared to fail that he finally couldn’t take it anymore. He didn’t want to be a burden for his family and so he decided it would be better to go than stay.
That was a good read and I can’t wait to see what you can come up with next.
Angels Around Us
I really like this one And somehow I thought you would come up with something like that Do you want to know what gave you away??? It was the characters you used for your story… you can write them all well… but you can three of them the best I can tell because I read a lot from you with those three characters in it
I like how you brought the Nick/Warrick friendship into your story. It had something mystic on it and gave your story a very unique touch. I like that you interpret their friendship as endless… they’re still looking out for each other, even one of them is dead.
I also like the twist with Nick seeing a ‘real’ angel. That was really cool. I do believe that there is someone looking out for us and why shouldn’t Warrick be the person looking out for Nick?
The way you included Cath and Jim in your story was good too. What would Catherine do without her Nicky??? She has been through so much with loosing the two man she really cared about. I think loosing Nick would be the final straw for her.
Did I ever tell you how much I like how you’re able to use the song lyrics in your stories? If I haven’t I’ll do it now… I really like that It fits perfectly.
The atmosphere you created in your story was amazing… I can swear the sun came out from behind the clouds here as I read it, really!!! I swear That was a great story and I expected nothing less from you
This One Moment
Whoa that was a surprise… that was a story I really didn’t expect to be written for this challenge but nonetheless it was a great read and you gave us a good insight why you wrote THIS story for THIS challenge
I also didn’t expect to find a story including Ellie here… that was really interesting. That you wrote the story out of her point of view was great. I was always wondering what was going on in her head, after all she’s been through.
Now I understand why you needed to re-watch an episode in order to write this fic
I never really got Ellie and I need to say that I don’t even understand her now… she’ll always be a mystery for me… I don’t know if it will help her to swim in her pool of self pity
Another thing I liked was the fact that you let no real person being THE angel in your story. That was another interesting twist. But I’m not sure if an angel would be able to help Ellie out of her mess… I think it took a lot of guts to write out of Ellie’s point of view, like you did. She sees herself as ugly and not worth of being cared about…
You captured the tragedy of her character very well and let your readers feel her pain, great job :thumbsup:
Peace
Whoa that were news for our Nick…out of the blue he gets the information that he’s got a daughter. But therefore he handled it all perfectly
I’m glad you let her tell him about Emily before she passed away. It gave the story the peace it needed. It must have been a huge weight lifted from her shoulders as she told him, I mean she kept the secret for nearly 15 years…
I like that Nick is there for them at the end, so she at least doesn’t have to worry about her little girl.
I enjoyed this story a lot
One More Case
Awww I really like this one It captures Nick so perfectly He as the hero… great
I knew immediately who wrote this one and the more I read of your stories the more I’m sad that you don’t write Nick fics anymore, besides for this challenge. Even though it’s better than no Nick fics from you at all, it’s still sad
You know we all make progress while writing fics for this challenge but I need to say that I can’t see at as clearly in other writer’s stories like in yours. For example the way you formed sentences changed and I can say that this is really impressive
I do like seeing Nick with children :adore: I think you made us all very happy with letting nick save the baby
I liked how you changed the POV’s during your story… first Nick, then Brass and at the end Catherine. I like those three
The picture of Nick you gave us with your story is very believable and absolutely true. He really IS a hero and you wrote this so well in your story. Great story :thumbsup:
The Anniversary
This one was…well… different And I like that a lot… it’s not the typical grieving about the loss of Warrick stuff so many other writers used for their stories… this is different and has somehow something light in it. It’s amazing how you managed to write a nearly completely light hearted story to a songfic theme this dark and angsty… that really deserves respect :thumbsup:
As I read the first five lines of your story it was clear for me that this would be a post Warrick’s death story. I just wasn’t sure where they were :lol:
That was a great way to let Nick and Catherine talk to each other about Warrick, about Eli and about what they went through after their friend’s death.
I like the flower and beer bottle thing… that was really clever It made your story lighthearted but not too funny… just like it should be.
Nick and Catherine drinking beer in that alley… I could really imagine that happen that way And of course Catherine liked the flowers…it was clear from the beginning
That you let Nick empty the beer bottle where his best friend died made me smile a little… it shows that they both realized that life goes on and that one can take the time to grieve but also need to go back on track and continue living, just like before.
I really like your story
Wooden Angel
Wow… I always ask myself where you get your story ideas from That was just amazing…
I had some French in school till more than five years ago and I understood it all, even though I thought I had forgotten about all of it
You could write tones of stories because of your ideas. This one is one of my favorites of yours, since it is different from your other Nick fics
I liked the wooden angel thing as a motive for your story. That was really cool and something I could really imagine Nick doing. Yes, he would show the children there how to carve. He’s just the person for that.
And how you involved the whole problem with the child soldiers, fabulous :thumbsup:
I always enjoy how well everything fits together in your stories, how you include past memories at exactly the best moment and how you save Nick at the end.
Good work, you all And big thank you again to Egeria for the site I simply love it, even my story isn’t on it this time
Escaping One Last Time
Well this was a good story to start a challenge
I like the idea of this story very much. It sounds like something Nick would do. I know who wrote this one
Your writing style is pretty new to me, so it wasn’t too hard to guess.You tried to write very detailed and your story was well thought trough. The reader could see it happen like that
I had always a hard time to see the facts that make people commit suicide… I mean he had a wife and two children. No matter how bad life treats you, isn’t a family worth to live for? It’s sad that for some people it isn’t… just two weeks ago our German national soccer goalkeeper committed suicide and everyone was asking why he left his wife and two year old daughter grieving… the answer is depressions. He kept them quiet because if he had told, society would have seen him as weak. Only his family knew. He was that scared to fail that he finally couldn’t take it anymore. He didn’t want to be a burden for his family and so he decided it would be better to go than stay.
That was a good read and I can’t wait to see what you can come up with next.
Angels Around Us
I really like this one
And somehow I thought you would come up with something like that Do you want to know what gave you away??? It was the characters you used for your story… you can write them all well… but you can three of them the best I can tell because I read a lot from you with those three characters in it I like how you brought the Nick/Warrick friendship into your story. It had something mystic on it and gave your story a very unique touch. I like that you interpret their friendship as endless… they’re still looking out for each other, even one of them is dead.
I also like the twist with Nick seeing a ‘real’ angel. That was really cool. I do believe that there is someone looking out for us and why shouldn’t Warrick be the person looking out for Nick?
The way you included Cath and Jim in your story was good too. What would Catherine do without her Nicky??? She has been through so much with loosing the two man she really cared about. I think loosing Nick would be the final straw for her.
Did I ever tell you how much I like how you’re able to use the song lyrics in your stories? If I haven’t I’ll do it now… I really like that
It fits perfectly.The atmosphere you created in your story was amazing… I can swear the sun came out from behind the clouds here as I read it, really!!! I swear
That was a great story and I expected nothing less from you This One Moment
Whoa that was a surprise… that was a story I really didn’t expect to be written for this challenge but nonetheless it was a great read and you gave us a good insight why you wrote THIS story for THIS challenge
I also didn’t expect to find a story including Ellie here… that was really interesting. That you wrote the story out of her point of view was great. I was always wondering what was going on in her head, after all she’s been through.
Now I understand why you needed to re-watch an episode in order to write this fic
I never really got Ellie and I need to say that I don’t even understand her now… she’ll always be a mystery for me… I don’t know if it will help her to swim in her pool of self pity
Another thing I liked was the fact that you let no real person being THE angel in your story. That was another interesting twist. But I’m not sure if an angel would be able to help Ellie out of her mess… I think it took a lot of guts to write out of Ellie’s point of view, like you did. She sees herself as ugly and not worth of being cared about…
You captured the tragedy of her character very well and let your readers feel her pain, great job :thumbsup:
Peace
Whoa that were news for our Nick…out of the blue he gets the information that he’s got a daughter. But therefore he handled it all perfectly
I’m glad you let her tell him about Emily before she passed away. It gave the story the peace it needed. It must have been a huge weight lifted from her shoulders as she told him, I mean she kept the secret for nearly 15 years…
I like that Nick is there for them at the end, so she at least doesn’t have to worry about her little girl.
I enjoyed this story a lot
One More Case
Awww I really like this one
It captures Nick so perfectly He as the hero… great I knew immediately who wrote this one and the more I read of your stories the more I’m sad that you don’t write Nick fics anymore, besides for this challenge. Even though it’s better than no Nick fics from you at all, it’s still sad
You know we all make progress while writing fics for this challenge but I need to say that I can’t see at as clearly in other writer’s stories like in yours. For example the way you formed sentences changed and I can say that this is really impressive
I do like seeing Nick with children :adore: I think you made us all very happy with letting nick save the baby
I liked how you changed the POV’s during your story… first Nick, then Brass and at the end Catherine. I like those three
The picture of Nick you gave us with your story is very believable and absolutely true. He really IS a hero and you wrote this so well in your story. Great story :thumbsup:
The Anniversary
This one was…well… different
And I like that a lot… it’s not the typical grieving about the loss of Warrick stuff so many other writers used for their stories… this is different and has somehow something light in it. It’s amazing how you managed to write a nearly completely light hearted story to a songfic theme this dark and angsty… that really deserves respect :thumbsup:As I read the first five lines of your story it was clear for me that this would be a post Warrick’s death story. I just wasn’t sure where they were :lol:
That was a great way to let Nick and Catherine talk to each other about Warrick, about Eli and about what they went through after their friend’s death.
I like the flower and beer bottle thing… that was really clever
It made your story lighthearted but not too funny… just like it should be. Nick and Catherine drinking beer in that alley… I could really imagine that happen that way
And of course Catherine liked the flowers…it was clear from the beginning That you let Nick empty the beer bottle where his best friend died made me smile a little… it shows that they both realized that life goes on and that one can take the time to grieve but also need to go back on track and continue living, just like before.
I really like your story
Wooden Angel
Wow… I always ask myself where you get your story ideas from
That was just amazing…I had some French in school till more than five years ago and I understood it all, even though I thought I had forgotten about all of it
You could write tones of stories because of your ideas. This one is one of my favorites of yours, since it is different from your other Nick fics
I liked the wooden angel thing as a motive for your story. That was really cool and something I could really imagine Nick doing. Yes, he would show the children there how to carve. He’s just the person for that.
And how you involved the whole problem with the child soldiers, fabulous :thumbsup:
I always enjoy how well everything fits together in your stories, how you include past memories at exactly the best moment and how you save Nick at the end.
Good work, you all
And big thank you again to Egeria for the site I simply love it, even my story isn’t on it this time
"Sweet madness, glorious sadness"...I love that!
Just realized that's actually part of the lyrics, so by all rights I really shouldn't give credit to the fic author. :lol: BUT...everything else about the fic, very beautifully written!
Nicksfriend
Police Officer
Smokey...I am working like a trojan at the hospital and I won't get to review for at least a couple of days...but I have read them and I was impressed.....and Nickyfan I am so looking forward to reading yours this weekend....Thanks !!!!!
Nicksfriend
Police Officer
I will at least get one review in before I go to church and I always like to start with the last one first..... so Wooden Angel might be last on the list..but it is first with me.
Wooden Angel...I was taken to another place with this story...one filled with hopelessness and sadness and by the end of story you gave us hope for a little boy named Ishmael. I like this concept....I really liked this story
First, Dr Benoit did remind me of Ray...too bad he had to die at the end. That was sad. The use of the French language made me get more involved by encouraging me to use Goggle translate....I love a story that gets me involved..yours did, good job!
Second, I am a Nick angster so I did like it that you had our Nick ill, and that you allowed Daddy Grissom to find him and to get him to a hospital. I could see this happening on the show...wish they would take a wee bit of direction from such a story as yours....it would work!
Now for the writer of this fic...you did an excellent job with description and bringing us to the point of caring for a character, Ishmael. Your writing is smooth and flowing...it takes us to a place where we can enjoy, painting a picture with words is so important in a fic and You did an excellent job!
If I could offer you any advise...it would be to continue what you are doing as a writer. As a reader I found your story refreshing and exciting! Keep up the good work!
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The Anniversary..Well, as a lover of the friendship of the boys, one which I will never forget..I do love this story!
Catherine and Nick sitting in the dark alley, the one where their friend had died, painted a picture of healing wounds, of remaining sadness and one of moving forward. Yes, they miss Warrick, and Yes Grissom would have said that it was time to move forward and not look back but he never was very good a close friendships.
This poignant moment was important for this reader, a reminder of what was lost when Warrick died ...when Gary Dourdan left the show...and it left me sad. The team was broken that day, a piece of Nick was forever fractured and the way he saw the world died with his friend. I do miss the Nick of the past, glass half full, I want to change the world Texan but as we see, he has not forgotten his friend.
I could picture them sitting there, talking, having that moment together, they both loved Warrick, they both miss their friend.
To the writer...excellent! Again the reader was drawn into the story with the descriptive way you write, the alleyway was vivid in my reader's mind and I was caught up in the interaction between the two workers, sharing a beer, sharing their thoughts, their emotions.
You let the reader take it from there with the roses...Of course she loves roses....she is Catherine!
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One More Case...Nick the Hero.
I easily see Nick as a hero, an unsung hero.He seems to always feel that he has to save someone, and that trait has endeared him to me as a reader and a writer of fanfic.
We get three points of view in this story, First we have Nick's POV.he wants to leave for the weekend, to have a date with his new girlfriend, April, but he is loyal. So he runs the case for Catherine, who has a life too. (Kind of reminds me of Grissom) It is his job as assistant supervisor.
He arrives at the crime scene, works it, then he gets a feeling that all is not as it should be. He and Brass soon see that it isn't, a gun is fired and they are off, both men, so different in how they were raised but so alike in their desire to catch the bad guy.
They see a man running from a room, Nick responds to the sound of a baby's cry, he knows what he has to do, he is Nick. He runs into the room with no regard for his own safety, and there he finds the source of the cries, a baby, a victim of the worse kind of malicious hatred, the mother dead, the baby left to die , to be burned alive.
Nick feels as if he has arrived too late, the baby's cries have ended, the baby boy is dead, but unwilling to accept it as a fact he starts CPR,before he even leaves the smoke and fire engulfed room...and he never stops, even when the room explodes, he does not stop giving the life saving CPR.
Finally the baby lets out a weak attempt at crying and Nick knows the baby is still in danger, as he , himself starts wheezing and having difficulty himself.
Then we see Brass, who sees his partner struggle for air, for life. He can't help but to reflect on his past attempt at doing the same, of letting go...of moving on. But he knows when Nick's heart's restarted that he chose to live....and he was certain that it was Nick who made the choice, because he too had been made to make that decision when he was shot, not so long ago.
Then Catherine, who is consumed with guilt for sending Nick out on one last case sits at his beside, unable to leave it, unable to loose their connection for fear that he might let go...and she knows Nick, knows that he would place himself in danger to save a child, a friend or even a stranger. He is a hero.
This story is a true concept of the person Nick Stokes is, and how we perceive him to be. We see him as an UNSUNG hero....that is our Nicky!
To the writer...Do you ever write anything that is not medical????lol!
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Peace
First of all...I watched The Bucket List and caught the emotional bucket list cry out...I liked!
First, this was way too short...I wanted more.
Our Nick would have kept his anger inward...he would have been angry though, but he would have also known that it would be useless to express it, the woman, the mother of his child, was dying. They had made sex...noncommittal sex, "I am drunk" sex, not love. No emotional connections, just a one night stand, and there it was...no real reason to yell or scream.
But now he had suddenly claimed the title of father, now he has a daughter who is a stranger to him, and together they would be saying good bye to the woman that had finally brought them together.
This is an emotionally packed story....yet you held back...and I think you did because that is what Nick would have done. I like that you allowed Nick to go back at the end...to give us a glimpse of our Nick's deep sense of loyalty and his unwavering sense of forgiveness.
To the writer: Great job!
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This One Moment
Well. All I can say is that I am glad Nick didn't....yuck.
As a writer you have a way with words and a way at having us to emotionally respond to your story...Hooorah! (Marine call out!)
All I could think is 'No.... he better not'...this woman has been a real disappointment to her father, well he really isn't even blood related to the woman who claims him as her father but he was there for her and she really is a loser.
Ellie stories aren't my flavor but I liked yours. Your use of words is like a delicacy ....they are delicious. You take us into the situation and treat us to a wonderful array of exciting words and direction. I would describe your work as fast and furious....and wonderfully entertaining.
To the writer: This is excellent writing ...you kept my attention and kept me wondering...Would Nick fall for her sexual attempt. He did have that fling with Kristy so...I was a little tense there...but our Nick showed great restraint and it made me smile. Poor Ellie, you described her well.....she is definitely a loser of all losers.
Great job!
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Angels Around Us
Okay, this is funny, but just in the first couple of paragraphs I felt the need for a dictionary. Great words!
I also got the a clue that whoever wrote this story is a fan of CSI...well versed in past cases to bring up Slick Willy, very good!
Empathetic Nick...I really loved that you brought out what I find so endearing about our Nicky, he can empathize even with the worse of souls. And then there is our Catherine, bringing his (Nick's) head out of the sand and giving him the impromptu lecture of him being too empathetic. but Nick was not phased...he will be Nick, regardless.
I am also a fan of Nick and David interaction...you can see he feels so relaxed around Nick, he never was around Grissom, fearing he might screw up I guess.
Okay, the meat and potatoes of this story...Our Nicky is shot, in the chest no doubt and we probably have a traumatic chest injury, this is bad, no wonder he is talking to angels.
The description of Nick talking to the death angel is sad, it made me angry too, he has suffered so much over the years. Then he looks beyond Catherine and he sees that one person, his friend standing there to bring him comfort.....Guys, you wouldn't believe me if I told you but I have seen people do this so many times....it is so wonderful, a breathtaking experience....Warrick talking to Nick...it was a great moment in this fic...well done! But if I were Nick I would be a little upset with that guardian angel of his...he must have been napping,lol.
To the writer: I truly enjoyed this story...excellent use of the song and your writing technique is great. Keep writing stories like these because they are to sure to entertain this reader!
Great job!
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Escaping One Last Time
Well, Todd was selfish...that is the conclusion of this story for me. I'm sorry but that is what it made me feel....the man was only thinking of his own needs and to heck with his children or his soon to be ex wife.
I know of what I speak, my best friend did the same in nursing school and all I felt was anger at her selfishness.
This story was difficult for me to read and more difficult for me to review....too close to home....I associated my feelings at that time with what Nick felt in this story.
To the Writer: You did well.Your writing is excellent. I felt you slammed dunked it on the emotional turmoil one feels when losing a friend to suicide. Great writing!
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Well, off to read Nickfan's story at the big house.....have a great night and thank you each writer for doing such a great job of writing stories! Well done!
Wooden Angel...I was taken to another place with this story...one filled with hopelessness and sadness and by the end of story you gave us hope for a little boy named Ishmael. I like this concept....I really liked this story
First, Dr Benoit did remind me of Ray...too bad he had to die at the end. That was sad. The use of the French language made me get more involved by encouraging me to use Goggle translate....I love a story that gets me involved..yours did, good job!
Second, I am a Nick angster so I did like it that you had our Nick ill, and that you allowed Daddy Grissom to find him and to get him to a hospital. I could see this happening on the show...wish they would take a wee bit of direction from such a story as yours....it would work!
Now for the writer of this fic...you did an excellent job with description and bringing us to the point of caring for a character, Ishmael. Your writing is smooth and flowing...it takes us to a place where we can enjoy, painting a picture with words is so important in a fic and You did an excellent job!
If I could offer you any advise...it would be to continue what you are doing as a writer. As a reader I found your story refreshing and exciting! Keep up the good work!
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The Anniversary..Well, as a lover of the friendship of the boys, one which I will never forget..I do love this story!
Catherine and Nick sitting in the dark alley, the one where their friend had died, painted a picture of healing wounds, of remaining sadness and one of moving forward. Yes, they miss Warrick, and Yes Grissom would have said that it was time to move forward and not look back but he never was very good a close friendships.
This poignant moment was important for this reader, a reminder of what was lost when Warrick died ...when Gary Dourdan left the show...and it left me sad. The team was broken that day, a piece of Nick was forever fractured and the way he saw the world died with his friend. I do miss the Nick of the past, glass half full, I want to change the world Texan but as we see, he has not forgotten his friend.
I could picture them sitting there, talking, having that moment together, they both loved Warrick, they both miss their friend.
To the writer...excellent! Again the reader was drawn into the story with the descriptive way you write, the alleyway was vivid in my reader's mind and I was caught up in the interaction between the two workers, sharing a beer, sharing their thoughts, their emotions.
You let the reader take it from there with the roses...Of course she loves roses....she is Catherine!
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One More Case...Nick the Hero.
I easily see Nick as a hero, an unsung hero.He seems to always feel that he has to save someone, and that trait has endeared him to me as a reader and a writer of fanfic.
We get three points of view in this story, First we have Nick's POV.he wants to leave for the weekend, to have a date with his new girlfriend, April, but he is loyal. So he runs the case for Catherine, who has a life too. (Kind of reminds me of Grissom) It is his job as assistant supervisor.
He arrives at the crime scene, works it, then he gets a feeling that all is not as it should be. He and Brass soon see that it isn't, a gun is fired and they are off, both men, so different in how they were raised but so alike in their desire to catch the bad guy.
They see a man running from a room, Nick responds to the sound of a baby's cry, he knows what he has to do, he is Nick. He runs into the room with no regard for his own safety, and there he finds the source of the cries, a baby, a victim of the worse kind of malicious hatred, the mother dead, the baby left to die , to be burned alive.
Nick feels as if he has arrived too late, the baby's cries have ended, the baby boy is dead, but unwilling to accept it as a fact he starts CPR,before he even leaves the smoke and fire engulfed room...and he never stops, even when the room explodes, he does not stop giving the life saving CPR.
Finally the baby lets out a weak attempt at crying and Nick knows the baby is still in danger, as he , himself starts wheezing and having difficulty himself.
Then we see Brass, who sees his partner struggle for air, for life. He can't help but to reflect on his past attempt at doing the same, of letting go...of moving on. But he knows when Nick's heart's restarted that he chose to live....and he was certain that it was Nick who made the choice, because he too had been made to make that decision when he was shot, not so long ago.
Then Catherine, who is consumed with guilt for sending Nick out on one last case sits at his beside, unable to leave it, unable to loose their connection for fear that he might let go...and she knows Nick, knows that he would place himself in danger to save a child, a friend or even a stranger. He is a hero.
This story is a true concept of the person Nick Stokes is, and how we perceive him to be. We see him as an UNSUNG hero....that is our Nicky!
To the writer...Do you ever write anything that is not medical????lol!
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Peace
First of all...I watched The Bucket List and caught the emotional bucket list cry out...I liked!
First, this was way too short...I wanted more.
Our Nick would have kept his anger inward...he would have been angry though, but he would have also known that it would be useless to express it, the woman, the mother of his child, was dying. They had made sex...noncommittal sex, "I am drunk" sex, not love. No emotional connections, just a one night stand, and there it was...no real reason to yell or scream.
But now he had suddenly claimed the title of father, now he has a daughter who is a stranger to him, and together they would be saying good bye to the woman that had finally brought them together.
This is an emotionally packed story....yet you held back...and I think you did because that is what Nick would have done. I like that you allowed Nick to go back at the end...to give us a glimpse of our Nick's deep sense of loyalty and his unwavering sense of forgiveness.
To the writer: Great job!
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This One Moment
Well. All I can say is that I am glad Nick didn't....yuck.
As a writer you have a way with words and a way at having us to emotionally respond to your story...Hooorah! (Marine call out!)
All I could think is 'No.... he better not'...this woman has been a real disappointment to her father, well he really isn't even blood related to the woman who claims him as her father but he was there for her and she really is a loser.
Ellie stories aren't my flavor but I liked yours. Your use of words is like a delicacy ....they are delicious. You take us into the situation and treat us to a wonderful array of exciting words and direction. I would describe your work as fast and furious....and wonderfully entertaining.
To the writer: This is excellent writing ...you kept my attention and kept me wondering...Would Nick fall for her sexual attempt. He did have that fling with Kristy so...I was a little tense there...but our Nick showed great restraint and it made me smile. Poor Ellie, you described her well.....she is definitely a loser of all losers.
Great job!
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Angels Around Us
Okay, this is funny, but just in the first couple of paragraphs I felt the need for a dictionary. Great words!
I also got the a clue that whoever wrote this story is a fan of CSI...well versed in past cases to bring up Slick Willy, very good!
Empathetic Nick...I really loved that you brought out what I find so endearing about our Nicky, he can empathize even with the worse of souls. And then there is our Catherine, bringing his (Nick's) head out of the sand and giving him the impromptu lecture of him being too empathetic. but Nick was not phased...he will be Nick, regardless.
I am also a fan of Nick and David interaction...you can see he feels so relaxed around Nick, he never was around Grissom, fearing he might screw up I guess.
Okay, the meat and potatoes of this story...Our Nicky is shot, in the chest no doubt and we probably have a traumatic chest injury, this is bad, no wonder he is talking to angels.
The description of Nick talking to the death angel is sad, it made me angry too, he has suffered so much over the years. Then he looks beyond Catherine and he sees that one person, his friend standing there to bring him comfort.....Guys, you wouldn't believe me if I told you but I have seen people do this so many times....it is so wonderful, a breathtaking experience....Warrick talking to Nick...it was a great moment in this fic...well done! But if I were Nick I would be a little upset with that guardian angel of his...he must have been napping,lol.
To the writer: I truly enjoyed this story...excellent use of the song and your writing technique is great. Keep writing stories like these because they are to sure to entertain this reader!
Great job!
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Escaping One Last Time
Well, Todd was selfish...that is the conclusion of this story for me. I'm sorry but that is what it made me feel....the man was only thinking of his own needs and to heck with his children or his soon to be ex wife.
I know of what I speak, my best friend did the same in nursing school and all I felt was anger at her selfishness.
This story was difficult for me to read and more difficult for me to review....too close to home....I associated my feelings at that time with what Nick felt in this story.
To the Writer: You did well.Your writing is excellent. I felt you slammed dunked it on the emotional turmoil one feels when losing a friend to suicide. Great writing!
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Well, off to read Nickfan's story at the big house.....have a great night and thank you each writer for doing such a great job of writing stories! Well done!
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