Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". Wow, Holy Twister Batman! Now's that's a twist. Geez Linda what away to makes even confused, lol :guffaw:! Great job:bolian: Please add more soon
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". This keeps getting weirder with every update. You certainly know how to keep us focused hon. Great work :devil:
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". When Mac walked up to the nurses station he asked..."excuse me, can you tell me where I can find Dr.Simms?" "Sure, I think he said he was heading into the privacy lounge." "Thank you." After being pointed the way, he seen the sign, and as he walked in he seen Dr.Simms still gurgling. "Christ"!!!! Help, get in here now." As the nurse ran in, she seen the doctor and pushed the call button. "Easy Dr.Simms, what happened?" Raising his hand in the motion of, "get me a pen", Mac passed him some paper, as he wrote...."help my Lori." Picking up his cell he called Flack. "Listen Flack, I need you to get over to Dr.Simms place right now, his daughter is in danger." "I'm on my way Mac." Hanging up the phone, Mac moved out of the way while the doctor's loaded Simms onto the stretcher. "Please call me when he is out of surgery." "We will Det.Taylor." Heading out the door, Mac rushed over to Lori's, hoping in hell Flack got there in time. *Knock, knock* Coming to the door, Lori opened it and seen Dr.Robins standing there. "Dr.Robins daddy isn't home right now, he's at the hospital." "I know that Lori, he sent me over to make sure you were okay, may I come in?" "Of course." Opening the door wide, Lori heard the sirens in the distance, as Dr.Robins pushed her into the house. "Auuuuuuuuuugh," she screamed, as he grabbed her, holding her in a vice like grip. Coming through the door, Flack seen Lori wrapped within the perps hands. Aiming his gun he said...."release her, put the weapon down." "You don't understand, they killed my son, they locked him the closet. The closet was full of acid. It fell on him, burning him, eating him alive. Well now it's my turn for revenge." "You don't want to do this. Come on now, release the girl." "I said no." At that moment Mac came in. "Listen to me, you don't have to do this. This isn't going to bring your son back." "You think I don't know that. I've waited three years for my revenge, they killed my son." "I understand. But this isn't the way to get your revenge, you've killed enough." *Sobbing* "You don't understand, no one understands." Getting angry again, Dr.Robins held the scalpel closer to Lori's skin. Mac knew he had two choices. Either he shot the doctor and took the chance of the scalpel not cutting Lori, or he could continue to try and talk him down. "Please Dr.Robins, let her go. We can help you, just give us the chance to hear your story." Crying harder, he released the scalpel from Lori's neck, and tossed her to the ground. "I did all this for my son. I have nothing without him." As Mac ran over to grab the doctor, he slit his own throat, sending blood squirts everywhere. "It's to late Mac, he's gone." Checking for a pulse Mac realized Flack was right. Looking over at Lori he said..."you young lady are going to tell me this story from the begining, understood?" "Yes Det.Taylor, but I want to see my dad. Is he okay?" "We don't know yet, so why don't we sit down and you can start." Drying her tears with her hands, she began....."It was June 27th, 2005."
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". I'm glad Lori is safe, but I wonder what her story is. Linda, it's good to see you've found yourself a great Beta-reader :thumbsup:
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". Way to go Linda! :bolian: Awesome update. I feel so sorry for Dr. Robbins. That must be so hard! Please add more soon. Oh and Linda: You 'Monster Mash' girl! :guffaw:
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". Loved that update but I cant wait to find out the whole story!
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". Melty, I'm thinking you are reading my Fantasy stories on ff.net, right? I have Vampire's Darkness 1,2,3. The howl that came from hell, and For the love of my Shapeshifter.:lol: And Natty, you know there is still one more twist don't ya. I know you know by your giggle ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "It was June 27th/2005, the year that changed my life forever. Mary's gang was reaking havoc on the poorer kids in the school. As we were walking down the hall, Mary seen George at his locker. She had always hated George, I don't know why. She just did." "Lori, you keep saying Mary's gang, if you were with them that makes you part of it, understand?" "Of course, sorry. Anyways, when we neared the locker, the boy's wanted to play a gag and lock George in the closet." "What boys? Give me their names." "One was Nick, but he's in jail now. The other was Simon he wasn't at the party." "Why wasn't he at the party?" "He died a few weeks before. He was hit by a drunk driver. The guy threw him right up in the air, it was horrible." "Okay, continue with your story." "Inside this closet we didn't see the container of acid sitting on the top. As we slammed the door, we heard him scream. None of us wanted to open it, we were freaking you know. But I opened it. We seen all his flesh melting off him. I ran to the phone, and called 911." Mac was beginging to realize the torment and pain this father must have suffered. "Anyways, when we got back to the closet, George had already passed out. I'm telling you Det.Taylor it was aweful. His bones could be seen almost everywhere." "Was he still alive when the Ambulance arrived?" "He must have been, for they rushed him to the Hospital." "Where your father tried to save him, but failed." "That's right. Can I see my dad now?" "Lori...?" "Yeah....?" "Why didn't you ever tell anyone?" "Are you insane. Mary would have killed me. Sorry Det.Taylor wasn't gonna happen." "Accident or not, you helped cause a young boys death. Don't you feel any remorse?" "Of course I do. But I'll be damned if I take the blame." "Mac..." "What is Danny?" "I'll be right back. Flack and I are going to check for the scalpel. We haven't come across it yet." Nodding his head yes, they headed out the door. "Mary...can you tell me who the other girls were?" "Umm...I just want to see my dad please." "There were no other girls. In fact there was no one there at all but you and George, right? You blamed Mary didn't you?" "How did you figure that out. I never told anyone." "That's my job Lori. I found two letters, both addressed to George's father telling him that Mary and Nick did this. You are very smart, aren't you Lori?" "I've been told I am. But still, when did you have time to get the letters, you came right here. I don't get it." "Danny my CSI found them in the front seat. Before I came in here, he passed them to me. I noticed the handwritting was yours." "Think you're smart don't ya Detective?" "Come on Lori, I'll take you to see your dad. After that you will be going downtown. I'm placing you in NYPD's custody until this case comes to trial." "Case...what case? It's all over. You have nothing on me." "Lori, I have more than you think. You started this evil game. You made George's father think his son died at the hands of Mary and her gang. When in actuality George died because of the revenge you wanted on Mary." "You don't understand. She was such a fucking bitch. Do you have any idea how long I planned this? But no...that stupid acid had to be sitting up there. Don't you get it. No one was supposed to die." "Lori do you understand what you are confessing to me here?" "I do. But it's not going to make any difference. For you will never get the chance to bring this to trial." "Why is that Lori?" Placing her hands behind her head like she was relaxing, she pulled the scalpel out from the pillow and plunged it at Mac.
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". :evil: Linda.....come back :scream: Just because I guessed doesn't mean you can leave me hanging TOO long!! :lol:
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". Talk about confession. Natty's right Linda, you'd better hurry back and read us in :lol:
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". OMG! Why is it always Mac who get's stabbed or shot?:guffaw: Please add more soon Linda! :bolian:
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". Knowing it was coming, Mac brought up his hand and knocked the scalpel from her hand. Tackling her to the ground, Mac cuffed her. "That's it young lady, you just blew your chance at seeing your dad." "Nooooooooooo....please, I didn't mean too, I'm sorry." Passing her off to Flack, he said...."take her downtown, and make sure you get her a child advocate." "You got it Mac." Leaving the house, Mac headed back to the Hospital to see how Dr.Simms was doing. "Excuse me...are you Det.Taylor?" "I am, how's Dr.Simms?" "He died an hour ago in surgery." "Okay, thank you." Exiting the Hospital Mac called Flack. "Flack". "Listen Don, Dr.Simms died in suregery, I need you to check records and see if Lori has a mother somewhere." "Okay Mac, I'll call you back." Hanging up the phone, Mac headed back to the station. Meanwhile.... "Hey Angel, what should we do today?" "Hmm...I don't know, what do you feel like doing?" "How about we take a walk in the park?" "Sounds like fun, let's go. You want to come Gabe?" "Yeah...I'll grab my frisbee." "Mom, we'll be back soon. We are going over to the park." "Okay guy's, have fun." When they got to the park, they tossed the frisbee around, and as it landed in the bush, they seen the body. "Macalleigh...come quick." "What is it Gabe?" "Look...a dead girl." "Oh God, I'll call dad." "Taylor." "Hey dad, we need you over at the park, Gabe just found a body, female." "Okay love, we'll be right there." While everyone tried to look, Macalleigh, Gabe and Horatio tried to keep them all back. "Hey Macalleigh...were's the body?" "Over here Danny, in the bush." "Everyone back up, Thompson, get these people to back up." "Come on people, move along now, nothing to see here." Just as Danny bent down, Sheldon showed up. "I know you are not thinking of touching that body." "Of course not Hawkes, wouldn't think of it." "Uhuh...move it Messer, I need a reading." "Hey Danny...where is my dad?" "He's at the station Macalleigh, he'll explain it to you tonight." "Oh...okay, can we go, or do we have to stay." "Nah..go ahead." When they got home Gabe yelled......"hey mom, we found a dead body". "I'm sorry?" "We found a dead body in the park." "Oh my...who's on it?" "Danny, Flack, and Sheldon." "Where's your dad, why isn't he on it?" "I don't know, Danny said he was on another case, but that dad would explain when he got home." "Hmm...okay." "Horatio, want to play a video game?" "Sure Gabe, let's go." Meanwhile.... When Mac arrived at the staion, he found Lori with the child advocate. "You must be Det.Taylor?" "I am, and you are?" "Sarah James, childrens advocate." "It's nice to meet you. Lori I have to let you know your father died during surgery, do you have a mom, or aunt we could call?" "What...my dad is dead, no, it can't be true, please say it's not true." "I'm sorry Lori, but he's gone." "This is all your fault, I hate you. If and when I get out of here I'll kill you, and Macalleigh, and the rest of your family." As she went to attack Mac again, he grabbed her, holding her hands. "Umm..I'm going to a Psych in on this Det.Taylor." "You do that, in the meantime she's back in cuffs." Placing her in a set of cuffs, she looked at Mac with hatred.
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". Wow! Lori needs a serious take down. Great job Linda. Please add more soon
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". It seems MaCalleigh is a magnet for finding bodies all over. Poor hon and Lori really needs to get in touch with her shrink. She's one messed up girl Great update Linda.
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". With Lori finally settled in a State Mental Hospital. Mac headed home to spend time with his family. "Hi daddy you are home." "I am Angel. Can you sit with me for a few minutes?" "Of course dad. What is it?" "Lori's dad died, he was in surgery but didn't make it." "Oh...poor Lori. How is she daddy?" "She's not well Macalleigh. It seems she set everything up. It's a very long story." "Okay, how about giving me the short version?" "Well...it seems Lori set some young boy up at school three years ago to get back at Mary and her gang." "Oh..wait a minute dad. It was the boy that was burned with acid in the closet, wasn't it?" "How did you know Macalleigh?" "It's all the schools talked about for weeks. We all had to attend a seminar on the do's and don'ts of acid. So Lori was the one who set up Mary and had her killed?" "She was sweetheart. She sent letters to the father of the boy who died. This must have sent the father into seeking his own revenge for his sons death." "God dad. Her hatred for Mary must have ran deep." "It did Macalleigh. But she's been put away in a Mental Hospital. Hopefully she'll get the help she needs." "I hope you are right dad. I really felt sorry for her and the way Mary treated her. But now...I don't know if I can ever forgive her for what she has done." "Come here Angel baby, give your dad a hug." Walking over Macalleigh hugged him tight. "Better dad?" "Much better Macalleigh, thank you." "You never have to thank me daddy. I love you. So for you my hugs are free." she giggled. Just as Mac was about to tickle her her mom walked in. "There's my baby and her daddy. Supper's ready." "Coming mom. Where's Horatio and Gabe?" "They are eating already. You know boys, they just can't wait." "Hey...boy in the room." said her dad. "Dream on daddy. You are past the age of a boy." Running up behind his daughter, he picked her up, swung her over his shoulder, and smacked her bum. "Owwww....daddy!!!" "You are never to old to be spanked Macalleigh, remember that." After dinner Macalleigh and Horatio said their good-bye. "Well my Angel, I'll see you soon. I love you Macalleigh." "I love you too Horatio." Taking her in his arms he kissed her with passion, with desire and with love. When they had left, Macalleigh began to cry. "Aww...come on Angel. I know it hurts. But you will be together again very soon." "I know mom. But June seems so far away." "Trust me Macalleigh. It will be summer vacation before you know it." So ends another story in Macalleigh's Highschool Years. Now we move ahead to summer vacation. Where Macalleigh finds herself in Miami for the summer. A summer full of fun, beach, and sun. Right?
Re: "MaCalleigh....What Could've been". Awesome job Linda. :bolian: I so can't wait for vaction story to start. Please add more soon:devil: