CSI Fan Fiction Critique Group.
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Jennifer
Lab Technician
I finished my story. Although I didn't have much time to write, what I wrote came to me pretty fast as I was typing...which RARELY happens when I write a story. Usually it takes me days or weeks to write a story as I get little mini-writers blocks, but not this time!
Anywhoo...I PM'd the link to you, Jodie.
Anywhoo...I PM'd the link to you, Jodie.
Amanda_Ruth
Witness
I really can't wait to find out who I'm critiquing! This is going to be just oodles of fun! (wow... get out of my brain, Grandma!)
I'm in a writing mood... so who knows, maybe I'll be able to finish this oneshot that's been kicking my ass the past couple weeks! Who knew GSR would get harder to write when it went canon!
I'm in a writing mood... so who knows, maybe I'll be able to finish this oneshot that's been kicking my ass the past couple weeks! Who knew GSR would get harder to write when it went canon!
Amanda_Ruth
Witness
Is anyone else feeling a sense of emptiness after finishing their challenge story? I know I am... I miss writing Danny!
Oh no... a new adage has been born. Once you write New York, you never go back!
Oh no... a new adage has been born. Once you write New York, you never go back!
Zelda49
Rookie
Well, I started off in New York, but I've migrated to Miami and discovered I like the warm weather :lol: I do have one unfinished NY fic left, though, so I suppose the new adage applies to me, too.
Oh, and Amanda, you're going to want to be careful of the double posting--you can edit your original post for 24 hours if you have something to add instead of making a new one. Don't want you getting in trouble with the mods!
Amanda_Ruth
Witness
OMG THANK YOU! I didn't know that, honestly! *logs away in memory* I'll be keeping that in mind! SORRY MODS!
By the way... can't wait to find out about the stories we'll be critiquing! I have so much spare time today, I can hardly contain myself!!! *splodes*
By the way... can't wait to find out about the stories we'll be critiquing! I have so much spare time today, I can hardly contain myself!!! *splodes*
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adorelo
CSI Level Two
Alrighty, then. It’s time folks. The following ‘pairings’ were randomly selected out of a hat because I’m better than LLK :lol: (who used a bowl). I need the critiques in by next Saturday (May 3rd) and a new featured fic will be up on Sunday (May 4th). If you’d like to be featured, please send me a PM. Have fun, and let’s get to it!:
When Critiquing, please use the format:
Story Title:
By (Authors name)
Critique by (your name)
Critique by challenge - Project #3
And don’t forget to answer the TQ: Did you find it easy, or hard to write about friendship? Was it difficult straying away from your norms? Do you think your writing was influenced by the show, or was it primarily an ‘off screen’ friendship?
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Mary Magdalene: Friendship Or Love
Adorelo: Where Everybody Knows Your Name
LLK: Hurt
Zelda: At The End Of The Day
Speedcochrane: What He Wants
Amanda Ruth: Five-Fold
Jennifer: I Can’t Get No Satisfaction
Marija Magdalena: To Rise Above And Beat It
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Those of you back for the second or third time, wow, time’s flown :thumbsup:. Welcome to the new posters, good luck with your first challenge
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Any issues, PM me.
Have fun!
When Critiquing, please use the format:
Story Title:
By (Authors name)
Critique by (your name)
Critique by challenge - Project #3
And don’t forget to answer the TQ: Did you find it easy, or hard to write about friendship? Was it difficult straying away from your norms? Do you think your writing was influenced by the show, or was it primarily an ‘off screen’ friendship?
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Mary Magdalene: Friendship Or Love
Adorelo: Where Everybody Knows Your Name
LLK: Hurt
Zelda: At The End Of The Day
Speedcochrane: What He Wants
Amanda Ruth: Five-Fold
Jennifer: I Can’t Get No Satisfaction
Marija Magdalena: To Rise Above And Beat It
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Those of you back for the second or third time, wow, time’s flown :thumbsup:. Welcome to the new posters, good luck with your first challenge
. Any issues, PM me.
Have fun!
lostladyknight
Pathologist
Announcement Time:
1. Jodie did an AMAZING job with the FCG and the Challenge project while I was unable to run things. It was a hiatus of sorts... but I was still here. Anyway... Jodie is my hero and we all should thank her for everything she did. She's just wonderful.
2. I'm coming back. I could never leave this FCG for long. I've hated being away as long as I have so starting next week... LLK is back..
3. Welcome to the new members. I was THRILLED when I saw the turnout we had for this project..
4. You're all amazing. Not just Jodie, thogh she IS super awesome. Thanks for making this such a success.
5. I <3 you guys. There was a nasty rumor that I was leaving CSI with Gary Dourdan. The truth is... it was true. But I can't do it. There's too much still left to love.
1. Jodie did an AMAZING job with the FCG and the Challenge project while I was unable to run things. It was a hiatus of sorts... but I was still here. Anyway... Jodie is my hero and we all should thank her for everything she did. She's just wonderful.
2. I'm coming back. I could never leave this FCG for long. I've hated being away as long as I have so starting next week... LLK is back.
.3. Welcome to the new members. I was THRILLED when I saw the turnout we had for this project.
.4. You're all amazing. Not just Jodie, thogh she IS super awesome. Thanks for making this such a success.
5. I <3 you guys. There was a nasty rumor that I was leaving CSI with Gary Dourdan. The truth is... it was true. But I can't do it. There's too much still left to love.
Amanda_Ruth
Witness
*TQ*
Did you find it easy or hard to write about friendship? Was it difficult straying away from your norms? Do you think your writing was influenced by the show, or was it primarily an ‘off screen’ friendship?
I haven’t watched CSI: New York as much as much as I used to recently, but from the snippets I remember from when I did watch it, he and Flack seemed to be pretty close friends. I was always fascinated by Danny and his relationships with the people he works with. I loved his almost hero-worship of Mac, but I was even more entranced by his friendship with Flack. Those are the kinds of friends I like… the kind of friends who goof on each other all the time! They are the most fun to write, and most times, for me, the easiest. Writing this was no exception… until I got to the conflicted emotions in Danny’s relationship with Rikki. He seems to care for her so much, but it seems to go beyond friendship, and that’s what had me addicted to the prospect of them being together.
And, if I said that this wasn’t hard for me to write, I’d be a damn liar! This was the hardest story I have ever had the pleasure of writing. I actually loved writing new characters, because it was becoming so dull and monotonous writing CSI all of a sudden. This gave me the new enthusiasm to do other stuff that was different. I’m just happy that Danny has always been my favorite out of ANY of the CSIs… not just male… I mean, Sara was, but she left. And… she got annoying after a while. Danny has always been awesome, in my mind’s eye.
I’m pretty sure, from what I’ve contemplated, that I was more influenced by the show than anything else. Some other CSI: New York stories that I read always seem to portray Danny and Flack as good friends who care about each other, which is something that I tried to capture in the piece I wrote for the challenge. But, I think a lot of the friendship you get with characters is mainly off screen, because the shows are trying to focus more on the science aspect of it again. I feel there is a lack of CSI connections… which irks me, because the science needs to be balanced out with some kind of personal relationship.
Anyway, onto my critique of an amazing story that only I get to critique! MWAHAHAHAHA! (but y’all should review it. It’s pretty kickbutt)
Story Title: Five Fold
By Adorelo
Critique by Amanda_Ruth
Critique by challenge – Project #3
Alright, since this story was broken into parts, that’s how I’m going to do this critique. I think I’m kinda stealing this idea from you, actually, so no biggie. Thanks for the idea! I’m going to critique each separate ‘part’, since they all seem to be like separate mini-stories. Kind of like a mini-series. Here goes everything:
*1.1 Professional*
*The Good*
Characterization
Okay, I’m going to start with characterization, because I’m not that good with Miami. But I think I have the basics down pretty well. I’m going to start with Horatio. I’ve always seen him as a bit smug, and I’ve never really liked him. His character is good, and he has a caring heart. He’s a good soul, I just always saw him as a bit pompous (I swear, it’s the sunglasses). Okay, let’s see if I can make any sense out of this. Basically, the way I see him is pompous, but the way he’s portrayed on the show is as a caring soul with the biggest heart. He cares about his team, and he’d do anything for them. He’s very forgiving, and that’s what is intriguing about him. You captured this perfectly. Without revealing all the circumstances behind what happened, you made it clear that he did something big for Eric, but it didn’t seem like that big of a deal to him. You also captured his demeanor quite well, also. Although a very caring and loving man, he has a slight smugness that makes him seem almost vain, but not at the same time. It’s incredible how you were able to catch this mixture so completely, without overdoing one or the other. He also always has that one comment to make about a general topic (at least, from what I’ve seen on the show) that makes so much sense, but none at all at the same time. And then he just leaves without explaining himself, like the smug jerk that he can be sometimes. My favorite example of his smugness and mannerisms is probably:
“ “It’s not a problem,” Horatio replied, lowering his head as he maintained eye contact. “
Also, I’ve noticed how emotionally fragile Eric can be at times, and that’s something that you also captured very well. He’s insistent on how much things mean to him, and is very open about what he’s feeling. Few people can capture that with anyone but Calleigh in their stories, but it’s true with others. It’s more so with Calleigh and Horatio, and – when he was alive – Speed. You were able to capture this with one scene that couldn’t have been more than one thousand words long. But you didn’t let it go unsaid that Horatio was only a friend at work. That he wouldn’t confide in him about personal matters, not like he did with Speed or does with Calleigh, anyway.
Plot
Well, there wasn’t much of a plot to this, but it almost seemed like a post ep, even though this didn’t follow an episode at all. It just started in the middle of a scene, at a crucial part for Eric. It was like flipping through channels and stopping at something when it’s almost over, just to catch the tail end of it. Now, in most cases, I would honestly say this was a bad thing. But, with yours, it seemed to have this unique quality that you don’t see often in this kind of story. I applaud you on getting the first good review from me on a scene like this.
*The Bad*
Hmm… the bad in this story is hard to come by, but it is there: mainly in the form of spelling and grammar errors. I’ll do what I did in one of my past critiques and put the quote from your story, then what I think it should be. I’ll put an explanation if it needs one, but most probably won’t. And you don’t have to make the changes if you don’t think it necessary.
Original Quote
“As though sensing the mans’ uncertainty, Horatio gave a soft pat on his shoulder.”
My Edit
“As though sensing the man’s uncertainty, Horatio gave him a soft pat on the shoulder.”
Explanation
The first change was obviously just a minor typo, so I fixed it for you. The second is up for debate, and, once again, you don’t have to change it if you don’t want to. This is just a possible change that you can make.
Original Quote
“He shook his head, defiantly.”
My Edit
“He shook his head defiantly.”
*The Ambiguous*
I’m not really conflicted on anything in this part. It was very well written. Onto the next part.
*1.2 Reality*
*The Good*
Characterization
Okay, this will be a tad more difficult, because I’m not as familiar with Natalia, seeing as I never really watch with her in it. I understand that there was an abusive boyfriend/ex-husband (I forgot) in her life, and that could contribute to her indecisiveness, I’m not totally sure. From what I know of her, she was a very strong woman, one who could hold her own. But in a moment of weakness, she never tried to hide it. She let people in when she needed to. From the little I know, I would say that she was very much in character until the end, when she said “Just friends?”.
Once again, you caught Eric’s character spot on. He’s a very sensitive man, always putting others before himself. At least, recently that’s been who he is. He hates hurting the people he loves and cares about, which is exactly what he’s facing in this scene. It’s absolutely beautiful, how you did it. And the fact that he cares enough to remain friends with Natalia… it’s just… wow. He’s so confident that they can make friendship work, despite everything that had happened between them, and that confidence is infectious. His willingness to make it work, as well. She can’t help but feel the same, because he is so convincing. It’s amazing. Simply perfect.
Plot
Now, as I recall, there was a time when Eric and Natalia slept together, but what I remember was it being a onetime thing. The way you wrote this made it seem like they tried to make a relationship work, which wouldn’t be at all surprising when it comes to Eric Delko. I think it would have been an interesting thing to explore further, and I’ve always been curious as to what would have come of it, had the show gone more into what happened between them. The pregnancy scare was bad, though… I don’t think I liked that.
*The Bad*
Amazingly enough, this is non-existent… and I’m usually so good at finding something wrong with anything! (I’m a pessimist… most of the time)
*The Ambiguous*
Honestly, I just really don’t know if I liked having this in at all, and I’m conflicted because the scene worked so well for something that I’ve been curious about. I don’t know… I’m just anti-Natalia, I guess.
*1.3 Reluctant*
*The Good*
Characterization
How you wrote Ryan in this part of the story was very in character for Eric. I’ve always noticed some animosity between them, and never really understood why… mainly because I didn’t watch many of the episodes with Tim Speedle. This anger that Eric has towards Ryan was never justified for me, because I didn’t understand the significance of Ryan’s presence. When I realized that he had, in fact, been Speed’s replacement, I finally understood why Eric resented his presence so much. The way you captured this resentment, and the fact that Eric is in denial of it, was beyond perfection (I know, I gush!). It was especially great when Eric finally accepted the fact that he bordered on hating Ryan. I think what I loved the most was the way Eric reacted to Ryan using Speed’s name. I can see him believing that Ryan’s use of his dead friend’s name is similar to a Catholic’s reaction to someone using the Lord’s name in vain, or something along those lines.
I think you caught Ryan perfectly as well. He’s always pushing to belong in CSI, as a transfer from… patrol, was it? Not completely sure. Anyway, trying to come into a position that was once filled by a close friend of everyone already there is hard enough, but when you’re like Ryan, it has to be ten times harder. Always trying to impress everyone around him, which can easily get annoying. He’s always eager to learn, which can also be trying to the patience of a person in Eric’s state of mind. But the fact that you kept him as he is supposed to be, and didn’t just change him around so he didn’t piss Eric off was wonderful. I loved it. Also, I can totally appreciate the fact that sometimes Ryan is an jackass, and doesn’t realize when he’s crossed a line. He does that, and you pulled it off so well.
Plot
Okay, I have always been very fascinated by the plot surrounding Speed’s death, mainly because I know nothing about it. I like to see how the characters feel about it, and bringing it up in Eric’s little tiff with Ryan was the best way I could think of to approach it. I really can’t say much about this, because there are no words to express how I feel about it. If I ever do discover those words, they will be in the form of a PM, I promise.
*The Bad*
Original Quote
“It was still on his hinges.”
My Edit
“It was still on its hinges.”
Original Quote
“I’ve not pissed anyone off, Wolfe.”
My Edit
“I haven’t pissed anyone off, Wolfe.”
Explanation
I feel like it’s more likely that Eric would say it like that. I don’t know why, it just sounds better like that… to me, at least.
Original Quote
“His eyes closed in recognition as a though flitted across his mind.”
My Edit
“His eyes closed in recognition as a thought flitted across his mind.”
Original Quote
“Wolfe’s words hit a chord…”
My Edit
“Wolfe’s worlds struck a chord…”
Explanation
According to what I’ve seen and heard before, I’m used to it being said the way I edited it… but, once again, it’s entirely up to you whether or not you change it.
Original Quote
“… griping the smaller man’s hand in his own in a firm, quick shake.”
My Edit
“… gripping the smaller man’s hand in his own in a firm, quick shake.”
*The Ambiguous*
Move along… nothing to see here.
*1.4 Sorrow*
*The Good*
Characterization
As always, your take on how Eric would feel in a scene was perfect to his character. I can actually picture him tossing a ball up and down, talking to a friend who is no longer able to be there. His faith that his friend would be able to hear him, despite the fact that he’s dead, is so believable to me. It’s eerily similar to what I do with my late sister. And holding onto something that means so much to him and represents such an important moment between the two friends is something Eric would most likely do. It seems that you have a grasp on his character that I haven’t seen in most Eric/Calleigh stories. It’s damn scary, that’s for sure.
Plot
There doesn’t really seem to be much of a plot in this section, so instead I’ll comment on the scene you created. Having the balance of life in a place that is so well known for death was incredible, because I’m not used to noticing the life around me when I visit my sister’s grave. As you said, it is a curious mix. But I think you brought out something that most people don’t realize when they’re in such a death-ridden place: that life goes on. Death does not mean the end of all life, and you brought that out by simply having birds flying about in a cemetery, singing their little hearts out. I think the fact that it was the anniversary of Speed’s death was so heavy, my heart was in a cast iron grip. I almost cried. I’m serious.
I really don’t want to say anything bad or ambiguous about this part, simply because it was my favorite (anything I said was my favorite before this was a lie… I just liked it a lot). So, I’ll move along, and don’t worry, there were no glaring errors that needed to be pointed out. I promise.
*1.5 Possibilities*
*The Good*
Song Choice
Alright, this is where the song you used came in, and I must say, good choice. I love Brad Paisley, and though it took me a bit, I can definitely see how Celebrity fit into this story. It’s so lighthearted, it sets the scene for what is a celebration between a group of friends.
Characterization
Alright, this is where you brought Calleigh in, which I had been anticipating from the beginning. I get a bit worried whenever someone uses Calleigh, just because her character is so difficult to capture perfectly. Now, in a light situation such as a party, she is definitely going to be a bit more carefree, which you definitely pulled off. And you also brought in her more serious side when Eric started to advance on her a bit. She is always so protective, but she seemed to bring down her defenses a bit. You did this in a way that stayed so in character, I could hardly believe it. I thought for sure that you would have her do something out of character, but what ended up happening was the most in character thing I could possibly think of. I won’t say what, because I don’t want to spoil it for anyone who hasn’t read it yet, but you know the end of your story well enough to know what I’m talking about.
Imagery, formerly known as Plot
Okay, the imagery… oh, shoot. You make it so hard to describe your imagery… because you’ve already done it so perfectly. My favorite thing was when you had Eric trying to get closer to Calleigh. I could almost see that actually happening. But, I’ll point out in *The Bad* what I didn’t like about this scene. Yes, there is something I didn’t like.
*The Bad*
Okay, this is where I’m going to tell you what I didn’t like about this scene. Of all the scenarios I’ve imagined with Eric and Calleigh finally getting together, none of them had other people – from work, I mean – around. They’ve always been alone or in some secluded restaurant… not where their coworkers could discover them. That kind of thing always just seems to irk me. That is all.
*The Ambiguous*
Hm… I don’t believe I’ve used this section more than once… and I don’t intend on using it now… I guess I just had it because I wanted to be clever. You know, The Good, The Bad, and The Ambiguous? Get it? Wow… I is lame!
*Thoughts in General*
Character Use
Something that I rarely see in good stories is the interaction of the main character with more than one or two characters, especially in one shots. You pulled something I had never seen before, and I commend you on the excellent way you did it. I got to see Eric converse with Horatio, Natalia, Ryan, AND Calleigh… not just one or two of them! It was a treat, I must say.
Writing Style
This form of story organization is like nothing I’ve seen before, and it was very creative. I like how it separates scenes completely, not involving a previous one with the next one in the series of shorts. Even though this is true, they seem to fit well together, making it one story, not five.
Alright, that’s all I have to say about this story. It was very good, I must say. But who knew I could say so much about a story that isn’t even 4000 words long?
Did you find it easy or hard to write about friendship? Was it difficult straying away from your norms? Do you think your writing was influenced by the show, or was it primarily an ‘off screen’ friendship?
I haven’t watched CSI: New York as much as much as I used to recently, but from the snippets I remember from when I did watch it, he and Flack seemed to be pretty close friends. I was always fascinated by Danny and his relationships with the people he works with. I loved his almost hero-worship of Mac, but I was even more entranced by his friendship with Flack. Those are the kinds of friends I like… the kind of friends who goof on each other all the time! They are the most fun to write, and most times, for me, the easiest. Writing this was no exception… until I got to the conflicted emotions in Danny’s relationship with Rikki. He seems to care for her so much, but it seems to go beyond friendship, and that’s what had me addicted to the prospect of them being together.
And, if I said that this wasn’t hard for me to write, I’d be a damn liar! This was the hardest story I have ever had the pleasure of writing. I actually loved writing new characters, because it was becoming so dull and monotonous writing CSI all of a sudden. This gave me the new enthusiasm to do other stuff that was different. I’m just happy that Danny has always been my favorite out of ANY of the CSIs… not just male… I mean, Sara was, but she left. And… she got annoying after a while. Danny has always been awesome, in my mind’s eye.
I’m pretty sure, from what I’ve contemplated, that I was more influenced by the show than anything else. Some other CSI: New York stories that I read always seem to portray Danny and Flack as good friends who care about each other, which is something that I tried to capture in the piece I wrote for the challenge. But, I think a lot of the friendship you get with characters is mainly off screen, because the shows are trying to focus more on the science aspect of it again. I feel there is a lack of CSI connections… which irks me, because the science needs to be balanced out with some kind of personal relationship.
Anyway, onto my critique of an amazing story that only I get to critique! MWAHAHAHAHA! (but y’all should review it. It’s pretty kickbutt)
Story Title: Five Fold
By Adorelo
Critique by Amanda_Ruth
Critique by challenge – Project #3
Alright, since this story was broken into parts, that’s how I’m going to do this critique. I think I’m kinda stealing this idea from you, actually, so no biggie. Thanks for the idea! I’m going to critique each separate ‘part’, since they all seem to be like separate mini-stories. Kind of like a mini-series. Here goes everything:
*1.1 Professional*
*The Good*
Characterization
Okay, I’m going to start with characterization, because I’m not that good with Miami. But I think I have the basics down pretty well. I’m going to start with Horatio. I’ve always seen him as a bit smug, and I’ve never really liked him. His character is good, and he has a caring heart. He’s a good soul, I just always saw him as a bit pompous (I swear, it’s the sunglasses). Okay, let’s see if I can make any sense out of this. Basically, the way I see him is pompous, but the way he’s portrayed on the show is as a caring soul with the biggest heart. He cares about his team, and he’d do anything for them. He’s very forgiving, and that’s what is intriguing about him. You captured this perfectly. Without revealing all the circumstances behind what happened, you made it clear that he did something big for Eric, but it didn’t seem like that big of a deal to him. You also captured his demeanor quite well, also. Although a very caring and loving man, he has a slight smugness that makes him seem almost vain, but not at the same time. It’s incredible how you were able to catch this mixture so completely, without overdoing one or the other. He also always has that one comment to make about a general topic (at least, from what I’ve seen on the show) that makes so much sense, but none at all at the same time. And then he just leaves without explaining himself, like the smug jerk that he can be sometimes. My favorite example of his smugness and mannerisms is probably:
“ “It’s not a problem,” Horatio replied, lowering his head as he maintained eye contact. “
Also, I’ve noticed how emotionally fragile Eric can be at times, and that’s something that you also captured very well. He’s insistent on how much things mean to him, and is very open about what he’s feeling. Few people can capture that with anyone but Calleigh in their stories, but it’s true with others. It’s more so with Calleigh and Horatio, and – when he was alive – Speed. You were able to capture this with one scene that couldn’t have been more than one thousand words long. But you didn’t let it go unsaid that Horatio was only a friend at work. That he wouldn’t confide in him about personal matters, not like he did with Speed or does with Calleigh, anyway.
Plot
Well, there wasn’t much of a plot to this, but it almost seemed like a post ep, even though this didn’t follow an episode at all. It just started in the middle of a scene, at a crucial part for Eric. It was like flipping through channels and stopping at something when it’s almost over, just to catch the tail end of it. Now, in most cases, I would honestly say this was a bad thing. But, with yours, it seemed to have this unique quality that you don’t see often in this kind of story. I applaud you on getting the first good review from me on a scene like this.
*The Bad*
Hmm… the bad in this story is hard to come by, but it is there: mainly in the form of spelling and grammar errors. I’ll do what I did in one of my past critiques and put the quote from your story, then what I think it should be. I’ll put an explanation if it needs one, but most probably won’t. And you don’t have to make the changes if you don’t think it necessary.
Original Quote
“As though sensing the mans’ uncertainty, Horatio gave a soft pat on his shoulder.”
My Edit
“As though sensing the man’s uncertainty, Horatio gave him a soft pat on the shoulder.”
Explanation
The first change was obviously just a minor typo, so I fixed it for you. The second is up for debate, and, once again, you don’t have to change it if you don’t want to. This is just a possible change that you can make.
Original Quote
“He shook his head, defiantly.”
My Edit
“He shook his head defiantly.”
*The Ambiguous*
I’m not really conflicted on anything in this part. It was very well written. Onto the next part.
*1.2 Reality*
*The Good*
Characterization
Okay, this will be a tad more difficult, because I’m not as familiar with Natalia, seeing as I never really watch with her in it. I understand that there was an abusive boyfriend/ex-husband (I forgot) in her life, and that could contribute to her indecisiveness, I’m not totally sure. From what I know of her, she was a very strong woman, one who could hold her own. But in a moment of weakness, she never tried to hide it. She let people in when she needed to. From the little I know, I would say that she was very much in character until the end, when she said “Just friends?”.
Once again, you caught Eric’s character spot on. He’s a very sensitive man, always putting others before himself. At least, recently that’s been who he is. He hates hurting the people he loves and cares about, which is exactly what he’s facing in this scene. It’s absolutely beautiful, how you did it. And the fact that he cares enough to remain friends with Natalia… it’s just… wow. He’s so confident that they can make friendship work, despite everything that had happened between them, and that confidence is infectious. His willingness to make it work, as well. She can’t help but feel the same, because he is so convincing. It’s amazing. Simply perfect.
Plot
Now, as I recall, there was a time when Eric and Natalia slept together, but what I remember was it being a onetime thing. The way you wrote this made it seem like they tried to make a relationship work, which wouldn’t be at all surprising when it comes to Eric Delko. I think it would have been an interesting thing to explore further, and I’ve always been curious as to what would have come of it, had the show gone more into what happened between them. The pregnancy scare was bad, though… I don’t think I liked that.
*The Bad*
Amazingly enough, this is non-existent… and I’m usually so good at finding something wrong with anything! (I’m a pessimist… most of the time)
*The Ambiguous*
Honestly, I just really don’t know if I liked having this in at all, and I’m conflicted because the scene worked so well for something that I’ve been curious about. I don’t know… I’m just anti-Natalia, I guess.
*1.3 Reluctant*
*The Good*
Characterization
How you wrote Ryan in this part of the story was very in character for Eric. I’ve always noticed some animosity between them, and never really understood why… mainly because I didn’t watch many of the episodes with Tim Speedle. This anger that Eric has towards Ryan was never justified for me, because I didn’t understand the significance of Ryan’s presence. When I realized that he had, in fact, been Speed’s replacement, I finally understood why Eric resented his presence so much. The way you captured this resentment, and the fact that Eric is in denial of it, was beyond perfection (I know, I gush!). It was especially great when Eric finally accepted the fact that he bordered on hating Ryan. I think what I loved the most was the way Eric reacted to Ryan using Speed’s name. I can see him believing that Ryan’s use of his dead friend’s name is similar to a Catholic’s reaction to someone using the Lord’s name in vain, or something along those lines.
I think you caught Ryan perfectly as well. He’s always pushing to belong in CSI, as a transfer from… patrol, was it? Not completely sure. Anyway, trying to come into a position that was once filled by a close friend of everyone already there is hard enough, but when you’re like Ryan, it has to be ten times harder. Always trying to impress everyone around him, which can easily get annoying. He’s always eager to learn, which can also be trying to the patience of a person in Eric’s state of mind. But the fact that you kept him as he is supposed to be, and didn’t just change him around so he didn’t piss Eric off was wonderful. I loved it. Also, I can totally appreciate the fact that sometimes Ryan is an jackass, and doesn’t realize when he’s crossed a line. He does that, and you pulled it off so well.
Plot
Okay, I have always been very fascinated by the plot surrounding Speed’s death, mainly because I know nothing about it. I like to see how the characters feel about it, and bringing it up in Eric’s little tiff with Ryan was the best way I could think of to approach it. I really can’t say much about this, because there are no words to express how I feel about it. If I ever do discover those words, they will be in the form of a PM, I promise.
*The Bad*
Original Quote
“It was still on his hinges.”
My Edit
“It was still on its hinges.”
Original Quote
“I’ve not pissed anyone off, Wolfe.”
My Edit
“I haven’t pissed anyone off, Wolfe.”
Explanation
I feel like it’s more likely that Eric would say it like that. I don’t know why, it just sounds better like that… to me, at least.
Original Quote
“His eyes closed in recognition as a though flitted across his mind.”
My Edit
“His eyes closed in recognition as a thought flitted across his mind.”
Original Quote
“Wolfe’s words hit a chord…”
My Edit
“Wolfe’s worlds struck a chord…”
Explanation
According to what I’ve seen and heard before, I’m used to it being said the way I edited it… but, once again, it’s entirely up to you whether or not you change it.
Original Quote
“… griping the smaller man’s hand in his own in a firm, quick shake.”
My Edit
“… gripping the smaller man’s hand in his own in a firm, quick shake.”
*The Ambiguous*
Move along… nothing to see here.
*1.4 Sorrow*
*The Good*
Characterization
As always, your take on how Eric would feel in a scene was perfect to his character. I can actually picture him tossing a ball up and down, talking to a friend who is no longer able to be there. His faith that his friend would be able to hear him, despite the fact that he’s dead, is so believable to me. It’s eerily similar to what I do with my late sister. And holding onto something that means so much to him and represents such an important moment between the two friends is something Eric would most likely do. It seems that you have a grasp on his character that I haven’t seen in most Eric/Calleigh stories. It’s damn scary, that’s for sure.
Plot
There doesn’t really seem to be much of a plot in this section, so instead I’ll comment on the scene you created. Having the balance of life in a place that is so well known for death was incredible, because I’m not used to noticing the life around me when I visit my sister’s grave. As you said, it is a curious mix. But I think you brought out something that most people don’t realize when they’re in such a death-ridden place: that life goes on. Death does not mean the end of all life, and you brought that out by simply having birds flying about in a cemetery, singing their little hearts out. I think the fact that it was the anniversary of Speed’s death was so heavy, my heart was in a cast iron grip. I almost cried. I’m serious.
I really don’t want to say anything bad or ambiguous about this part, simply because it was my favorite (anything I said was my favorite before this was a lie… I just liked it a lot). So, I’ll move along, and don’t worry, there were no glaring errors that needed to be pointed out. I promise.
*1.5 Possibilities*
*The Good*
Song Choice
Alright, this is where the song you used came in, and I must say, good choice. I love Brad Paisley, and though it took me a bit, I can definitely see how Celebrity fit into this story. It’s so lighthearted, it sets the scene for what is a celebration between a group of friends.
Characterization
Alright, this is where you brought Calleigh in, which I had been anticipating from the beginning. I get a bit worried whenever someone uses Calleigh, just because her character is so difficult to capture perfectly. Now, in a light situation such as a party, she is definitely going to be a bit more carefree, which you definitely pulled off. And you also brought in her more serious side when Eric started to advance on her a bit. She is always so protective, but she seemed to bring down her defenses a bit. You did this in a way that stayed so in character, I could hardly believe it. I thought for sure that you would have her do something out of character, but what ended up happening was the most in character thing I could possibly think of. I won’t say what, because I don’t want to spoil it for anyone who hasn’t read it yet, but you know the end of your story well enough to know what I’m talking about.
Imagery, formerly known as Plot
Okay, the imagery… oh, shoot. You make it so hard to describe your imagery… because you’ve already done it so perfectly. My favorite thing was when you had Eric trying to get closer to Calleigh. I could almost see that actually happening. But, I’ll point out in *The Bad* what I didn’t like about this scene. Yes, there is something I didn’t like
.*The Bad*
Okay, this is where I’m going to tell you what I didn’t like about this scene. Of all the scenarios I’ve imagined with Eric and Calleigh finally getting together, none of them had other people – from work, I mean – around. They’ve always been alone or in some secluded restaurant… not where their coworkers could discover them. That kind of thing always just seems to irk me. That is all.
*The Ambiguous*
Hm… I don’t believe I’ve used this section more than once… and I don’t intend on using it now… I guess I just had it because I wanted to be clever. You know, The Good, The Bad, and The Ambiguous? Get it? Wow… I is lame!
*Thoughts in General*
Character Use
Something that I rarely see in good stories is the interaction of the main character with more than one or two characters, especially in one shots. You pulled something I had never seen before, and I commend you on the excellent way you did it. I got to see Eric converse with Horatio, Natalia, Ryan, AND Calleigh… not just one or two of them! It was a treat, I must say.
Writing Style
This form of story organization is like nothing I’ve seen before, and it was very creative. I like how it separates scenes completely, not involving a previous one with the next one in the series of shorts. Even though this is true, they seem to fit well together, making it one story, not five.
Alright, that’s all I have to say about this story. It was very good, I must say. But who knew I could say so much about a story that isn’t even 4000 words long?
lostladyknight
Pathologist
Blast! I was number 2! I was so hoping to be the first critiquer. Oh well, number two isn't bad either.
This critique is not NEARLY as good as Amanda's. I almost feel bad about not doing a better job. Oh well. Amanda's so awesome she's always a tough act to follow.
Without further ado...
Story Title: Hurt
By: speedcochrane
Critique By: lostladyknight
Critique By Challenge- Project Number 3.
Critique:
This was by far one of the best Horatio pieces that I've ever read and I'm not just saying that. It truly is. I read it first a few hours ago when the assignments first appeared, took it in, and decided to come back a while later to read it a second time. Like a good book there were may details that I didn't pick up on the first time and I bet if I read it again there would be even more. I almost wish that your writing was more flawed so that I could give you a better critique but I'm going to try to do the best I could.
There were things about this piece that just wowed me. Some of the thoughts that you had Horatio thinking and some of the things you had him saying were just so in character it was uncanny. I may not know his character that well but I feel pretty certain that if you'd strayed too far from him I would have picked up on it and there was none of that. You have an amazing handle on him as a character. Though this piece was a tough angsty road for H, I could see him walking it vividly.
“Mala Noche justice... meet Miami Justice.”
A prime example of what I was talking about. Absolutely Horatio. Or the scientific way he explained the reaction he was having to the pain in his hands.
Another thing that I would love to compliment you on is your beautiful language. I just love your style with writing. Some of your images were painted so clearly that it just sent chills down my spine. Seriously. It was just so good. So real. I really don't know how to describe it other than saying it was real. Thats the best way I can really describe it. It was just... real.
A sharp crackle. Screams. Caine turned his head to see Marisol descend to a paved fate. Seconds were disguised as laggard minutes. Her sullen eyes locked with his, scared and questioning. A veiw he dreaded once more...
Chilling and beautiful.
Another thing I noticed, and loved, was the way Horatio's name shifted from Horatio to Caine. How he was Caine when he was someone he didn't recognize. It was a subtle way of adding an extra highlight to the differences between Horatio and who he was in this fic. While it was all Horatio, all in character, you could see the differences between who he is on the outside and who he is on the inside. It was a Jekyll/Hyde effect and I think that you displayed it beautifully.
There were so many other subtle things that I think I picked up on but if I keep going I'm going to be giving you a critique like fourteen miles long and nobody wants that. So... I'm just going to leave this by telling you that you did a fantastic job. I love this interpretation of the challenge. Fantastic.
TQ: Did you find it easy, or hard to write about friendship? Was it difficult straying from your norms? Do you think your writing was influenced by the show, or was it primarily and 'off screen' friendship?
Well this challenge was a lot harder for me to write than the last one. Not sure what that means though. It wasn't that hard to write about friendship. The tough part was deciding which of the several friendship plots I really wanted to use. I had several that I'd thought up and outlined. The rest will be turning into fanfictions in the future, not sure when. I also really didn't stray from my norms much at all with this one. It was a challenge that was very easy to bend to fit with the usual way I write things. I guess I just have an out of the box way of looking at things. And while it was an off-screen friendship it was heavily influenced by the show. Ever since the episode “Lying Down With Dogs” aired and I saw Nick's reaction to the plight of the dogs I knew that something like this was coming from me. I felt a deep connection with Nick in that moment and I was just waiting for the right outlet for that. I guess I found it.
This critique is not NEARLY as good as Amanda's. I almost feel bad about not doing a better job. Oh well. Amanda's so awesome she's always a tough act to follow.
Without further ado...
Story Title: Hurt
By: speedcochrane
Critique By: lostladyknight
Critique By Challenge- Project Number 3.
Critique:
This was by far one of the best Horatio pieces that I've ever read and I'm not just saying that. It truly is. I read it first a few hours ago when the assignments first appeared, took it in, and decided to come back a while later to read it a second time. Like a good book there were may details that I didn't pick up on the first time and I bet if I read it again there would be even more. I almost wish that your writing was more flawed so that I could give you a better critique but I'm going to try to do the best I could.
There were things about this piece that just wowed me. Some of the thoughts that you had Horatio thinking and some of the things you had him saying were just so in character it was uncanny. I may not know his character that well but I feel pretty certain that if you'd strayed too far from him I would have picked up on it and there was none of that. You have an amazing handle on him as a character. Though this piece was a tough angsty road for H, I could see him walking it vividly.
“Mala Noche justice... meet Miami Justice.”
A prime example of what I was talking about. Absolutely Horatio. Or the scientific way he explained the reaction he was having to the pain in his hands.
Another thing that I would love to compliment you on is your beautiful language. I just love your style with writing. Some of your images were painted so clearly that it just sent chills down my spine. Seriously. It was just so good. So real. I really don't know how to describe it other than saying it was real. Thats the best way I can really describe it. It was just... real.
A sharp crackle. Screams. Caine turned his head to see Marisol descend to a paved fate. Seconds were disguised as laggard minutes. Her sullen eyes locked with his, scared and questioning. A veiw he dreaded once more...
Chilling and beautiful.
Another thing I noticed, and loved, was the way Horatio's name shifted from Horatio to Caine. How he was Caine when he was someone he didn't recognize. It was a subtle way of adding an extra highlight to the differences between Horatio and who he was in this fic. While it was all Horatio, all in character, you could see the differences between who he is on the outside and who he is on the inside. It was a Jekyll/Hyde effect and I think that you displayed it beautifully.
There were so many other subtle things that I think I picked up on but if I keep going I'm going to be giving you a critique like fourteen miles long and nobody wants that. So... I'm just going to leave this by telling you that you did a fantastic job. I love this interpretation of the challenge. Fantastic.
TQ: Did you find it easy, or hard to write about friendship? Was it difficult straying from your norms? Do you think your writing was influenced by the show, or was it primarily and 'off screen' friendship?
Well this challenge was a lot harder for me to write than the last one. Not sure what that means though. It wasn't that hard to write about friendship. The tough part was deciding which of the several friendship plots I really wanted to use. I had several that I'd thought up and outlined. The rest will be turning into fanfictions in the future, not sure when. I also really didn't stray from my norms much at all with this one. It was a challenge that was very easy to bend to fit with the usual way I write things. I guess I just have an out of the box way of looking at things. And while it was an off-screen friendship it was heavily influenced by the show. Ever since the episode “Lying Down With Dogs” aired and I saw Nick's reaction to the plight of the dogs I knew that something like this was coming from me. I felt a deep connection with Nick in that moment and I was just waiting for the right outlet for that. I guess I found it.
Hee. *squishles and smoochles LLK*
TQ: Did you find it easy, or hard to write about friendship? Was it difficult straying from your norms? Do you think your writing was influenced by the show, or was it primarily and 'off screen' friendship?
I found friendship fairly easy to write it about. Why? It's simple. Almost everyone has experienced friendship at one point in their life -- including me -- so already I had something to draw from. It's not like love or sex where in order to write something that tells the reader there's an actual understanding taking place in the writer's brain, an experience/knowledge has to be there. And that's just complicated anyway. So friendship was a nice breather.
Was it difficult straying from my norms? Definitely. I've been writing an unstructured satiric script-fic for almost three years and the amount written outside of that since its inception can be counted on one hand. For this challenge, I definitely had to step out of that mindset. And the fact that my word programs didn't have spell check made it that much more difficult. It's a good thing I know my ABCs. Yeah, okay so there are spell checkers online but I'm far too lazy double click sometimes.
I'd say my writing was influenced moreso by the show than anything else. I know I've said that I could draw from experience, but that was a small part in retrospect. I mainly wanted to delve into what the show has already told us. There's a lot of mystery surrounding how Horatio thinks and feels, and because it's been established that he's formed bonds between his team and people who are long gone, I wanted to explore that. I think if my writing were 100% influenced 'off-screen', I would have a hard time with characterization. :lol: There's my experiences and then there's the character's reaction to various events. When we're only given so much by TPTB, interpretation based upon a small mixture of experience and a large dash of characterization goes a long way. Hopefully, heh.
Critique
Story Title: What He Wants
By: Amanda_Ruth
Critique By: speed_cochrane
Critique By Challenge- Project Number 3.
Okay, the firstly, I just want to say that I don't read a whole lot of NY but I do watch the show almost as much as I watch Miami, so I think I have a pretty good handle on it. lol and hopefully I can provide a good critique.
Plot
I love that you chose the Rikki/Lindsay dilemma to showcase the friendship between Danny and Flack. Plus, the whole Rikki ordeal was some great development for Danny and just begged to be delved into deeper by a great writer--enter, Amanda. I have to admit though, I was a bit worried that this plot wouldn't work well for a one shot because of its complexity, but you wrote it wonderfully. It was a contrast between the angst and lightheartedness between Danny and Flack to uplift. Their discussion had me giggling in some parts and saying 'awww' in other parts! You made it so clear that they have this bond and it doesn't always have to be explicitely shown. Sometimes a smirk or a quirky pet name can say it all--plus Flack was sort of taking care of Danny which was subtely shown by him helping Danny into the car. I also liked that the friendship aspect didn't take up all of the fic and that you included a conclusion/decision on Danny's part.
The songs
The music you used was awesome and fit very well with the tone and theme of the story. It didn't inhibit the story in any way, but added to it. I kind of saw it as a recipe. You had all these elements brought together (humour, friendship, angst, excellent description and imagery) and then the songs added that spice to compliment and meld it together for a savory finish.
Characterization
I know you were worried about it, but I thought it was all very in-character. It may have been because of Zelda's help, or you or a mix of both but in the end, it didn't come off as 'the writer not knowing what she's doing'. Nothing seemed forced--quite the opposite. It actually seemed as though you were relaxed, writing for them. Also, like I said above with Flack 'taking care of Danny', so-to-speak was very much a truth about their friendship. Flack always seemed (to me) like a big brother to Danny so I was glad to see that Danny wasn't like "wth r u doin @ my house? We lyke, dont even no each othr." Also, Danny's my favourite character from NY so I was glad that you chose him and characterized him properly. It just sends shooting pains into my skull when people either spell the character's name wrong, make them say "yo dawg" and expect me to believe it or clothing shinannigans. You didn't do any of those things so kudos. I could visualize everything down to what they were saying to the clothes they were wearing. Nice job.
Grammar
I didn't find anything, so kudos once more! Plus, I normally don't like to critique grammar unless I know that person isn't used to writing/hasn't done it before/not familiar with grammar... :lol: I already know you're a great writer so anything I would have found would probably have been a silly oversight anyhow.
Areas to work on
I honestly tried to find something--anything to suggest but I couldn't find anything. By the time I had something posted here, I figured out what you were trying to do and it was correct, heh.
The only thing that I could possibly suggest is to not be so awesome next time so I have more to write. :lol:
So overall, I really loved this story. It kept me interested to the end and the fact that you took some time to develop it and didn't shoot into Danny spilling his guts in the first sentence made it worth the while and effort. Plus, wherever you encorporated elements from the challenge (ie. 'it was stranger than fiction, songs, etc) it was seamless and didn't seem like 'ZOMG I have to put this in. CLUNK. There.' Everything looked as if it had a purpose.
*squishles and smoochles LLK*TQ: Did you find it easy, or hard to write about friendship? Was it difficult straying from your norms? Do you think your writing was influenced by the show, or was it primarily and 'off screen' friendship?
I found friendship fairly easy to write it about. Why? It's simple. Almost everyone has experienced friendship at one point in their life -- including me -- so already I had something to draw from. It's not like love or sex where in order to write something that tells the reader there's an actual understanding taking place in the writer's brain, an experience/knowledge has to be there. And that's just complicated anyway. So friendship was a nice breather.
Was it difficult straying from my norms? Definitely. I've been writing an unstructured satiric script-fic for almost three years and the amount written outside of that since its inception can be counted on one hand. For this challenge, I definitely had to step out of that mindset. And the fact that my word programs didn't have spell check made it that much more difficult. It's a good thing I know my ABCs.
Yeah, okay so there are spell checkers online but I'm far too lazy double click sometimes.I'd say my writing was influenced moreso by the show than anything else. I know I've said that I could draw from experience, but that was a small part in retrospect. I mainly wanted to delve into what the show has already told us. There's a lot of mystery surrounding how Horatio thinks and feels, and because it's been established that he's formed bonds between his team and people who are long gone, I wanted to explore that. I think if my writing were 100% influenced 'off-screen', I would have a hard time with characterization. :lol: There's my experiences and then there's the character's reaction to various events. When we're only given so much by TPTB, interpretation based upon a small mixture of experience and a large dash of characterization goes a long way. Hopefully, heh.
Critique
Story Title: What He Wants
By: Amanda_Ruth
Critique By: speed_cochrane
Critique By Challenge- Project Number 3.
Okay, the firstly, I just want to say that I don't read a whole lot of NY but I do watch the show almost as much as I watch Miami, so I think I have a pretty good handle on it. lol and hopefully I can provide a good critique.
Plot
I love that you chose the Rikki/Lindsay dilemma to showcase the friendship between Danny and Flack. Plus, the whole Rikki ordeal was some great development for Danny and just begged to be delved into deeper by a great writer--enter, Amanda.
I have to admit though, I was a bit worried that this plot wouldn't work well for a one shot because of its complexity, but you wrote it wonderfully. It was a contrast between the angst and lightheartedness between Danny and Flack to uplift. Their discussion had me giggling in some parts and saying 'awww' in other parts! You made it so clear that they have this bond and it doesn't always have to be explicitely shown. Sometimes a smirk or a quirky pet name can say it all--plus Flack was sort of taking care of Danny which was subtely shown by him helping Danny into the car. I also liked that the friendship aspect didn't take up all of the fic and that you included a conclusion/decision on Danny's part.The songs
The music you used was awesome and fit very well with the tone and theme of the story. It didn't inhibit the story in any way, but added to it. I kind of saw it as a recipe. You had all these elements brought together (humour, friendship, angst, excellent description and imagery) and then the songs added that spice to compliment and meld it together for a savory finish.
Characterization
I know you were worried about it, but I thought it was all very in-character. It may have been because of Zelda's help, or you or a mix of both but in the end, it didn't come off as 'the writer not knowing what she's doing'. Nothing seemed forced--quite the opposite. It actually seemed as though you were relaxed, writing for them. Also, like I said above with Flack 'taking care of Danny', so-to-speak was very much a truth about their friendship. Flack always seemed (to me) like a big brother to Danny so I was glad to see that Danny wasn't like "wth r u doin @ my house? We lyke, dont even no each othr." Also, Danny's my favourite character from NY so I was glad that you chose him and characterized him properly. It just sends shooting pains into my skull when people either spell the character's name wrong, make them say "yo dawg" and expect me to believe it or clothing shinannigans. You didn't do any of those things so kudos.
I could visualize everything down to what they were saying to the clothes they were wearing. Nice job.Grammar
I didn't find anything, so kudos once more! Plus, I normally don't like to critique grammar unless I know that person isn't used to writing/hasn't done it before/not familiar with grammar... :lol: I already know you're a great writer so anything I would have found would probably have been a silly oversight anyhow.
Areas to work on
I honestly tried to find something--anything to suggest but I couldn't find anything. By the time I had something posted here, I figured out what you were trying to do and it was correct, heh.
The only thing that I could possibly suggest is to not be so awesome next time so I have more to write. :lol:
So overall, I really loved this story. It kept me interested to the end and the fact that you took some time to develop it and didn't shoot into Danny spilling his guts in the first sentence made it worth the while and effort. Plus, wherever you encorporated elements from the challenge (ie. 'it was stranger than fiction, songs, etc) it was seamless and didn't seem like 'ZOMG I have to put this in. CLUNK. There.' Everything looked as if it had a purpose.
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Amanda_Ruth
Witness
ZOMG THANKS! Hehe... I, uh... uh... don't know what to say, really. Other than thanks of course... OO! I should tell you that I'm branching out into Miami! I mean... it's gonna be hard, but I know I'm gonna have support from a couple people. Blame my new transition on a certain little E/C writer. *cough*Jodie*cough*
Oh... and I'll try to make it not as awesome as my New York story... I promise you'll be able to criticize something. Well... at least hopefully!
Oh... and I'll try to make it not as awesome as my New York story... I promise you'll be able to criticize something. Well... at least hopefully!
lostladyknight
Pathologist
Hey everyone I have something I'd like to run by you. A new friend of mine is interested in starting a new project in the CSI Miami fanfiction community and I just wanted to know what you all thought of the idea. Essentially it would be a community written story. Sort of like co-authoring but not exactly. Each author would write a different chapter of the same overall fic. There would be an outline of sorts to follow that would be agreed upon before beginning with the project. Then each author would take his or her turn and write a chapter. The next author would pick up where the last one left off and continue on. It would be passed around from person to person until the entire fic was finished.
The reason why I'm asking you all is because you're my biggest connection to the Miami writing world. The rest of the people I interact with on a daily basis are almost strictly Las Vegas writers. Since you guys are by far the BEST Miami writers I've read on ff.net, though I haven't read much over there as far as Miami goes, I'm sure we'd love for you all to participate.
So, I guess all I'm asking is if you all think you'd be interested in doing something like that. Either PM me or post in here to let me know. I hate having to use the FCG as a place to ask about outside projects, especially during challenge week, but this really is the best place I know to go.
http://www.fanfiction.net/~workinprogress08
There's a link to the FF page with more info.
The reason why I'm asking you all is because you're my biggest connection to the Miami writing world. The rest of the people I interact with on a daily basis are almost strictly Las Vegas writers. Since you guys are by far the BEST Miami writers I've read on ff.net, though I haven't read much over there as far as Miami goes, I'm sure we'd love for you all to participate.
So, I guess all I'm asking is if you all think you'd be interested in doing something like that. Either PM me or post in here to let me know. I hate having to use the FCG as a place to ask about outside projects, especially during challenge week, but this really is the best place I know to go.
http://www.fanfiction.net/~workinprogress08
There's a link to the FF page with more info.
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I think it's a cool idea. I'd definitely be interested in participating! That's actually something I've always thought would be a neat thing to try out here since RPGs used to be so popular back in the day. Though I understand this is nothing like an RPG. It's just that people liked participating in the one plot, lol.
Would it be a good idea to post it in the Fan Fiction Recommendations, Requests & Showcase too? Some more people in the overall community might have a better chance of seeing it there. Just a suggestion, not trying to step on toes. :lol:
I'd definitely be interested in participating! That's actually something I've always thought would be a neat thing to try out here since RPGs used to be so popular back in the day. Though I understand this is nothing like an RPG. It's just that people liked participating in the one plot, lol.Would it be a good idea to post it in the Fan Fiction Recommendations, Requests & Showcase too? Some more people in the overall community might have a better chance of seeing it there.
Just a suggestion, not trying to step on toes. :lol:
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