Nick Song Fic Ch #8 - "Angel"- Now up!

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Egeria, I received your rather rude note and I will never get excited about this challenge again or that the stories are up....Whatever dude!
 
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I have a surprise! We've got one more story coming in! :) I'll let you know when it's up.

Also, some of the regular writers who didn't send one in this time asked if they could review. Absolutely!! :) We always want as much input as we can get, so go for it!
 
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Yay!!! Now that I'm back online I'll start reading the new stories :D

... and review them of course :)

Can't wait to see what you all wrote :D
 
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Welcome back, NickyFan! You've been missed! But you sure did your best to stay involved while you were gone. Much appreciated!
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And now my reviews. :)

Change of Scenery - I like the relationship between Nick and Catherine here. You can tell just from their dialogue how they respect and understand each other. I love the idea of Nick getting a fresh start somewhere new, although it's a little sad to think about him leaving Vegas. :)

If I Could Just See You - I like how we get to find out what happened between the last time we saw Nick and when we saw him again in the alley. It seems like a believable reaction to me, and even better that it's in Nick's own words. Leaving it up to the reader to decide who he is talking to...all sorts of possibilities there. :)

Break Away - Another fine example of Catherine and Nick's relationship. Another one where the reader has to decide what happened! :lol: Well, I know what I think, and I'm happy with it. :)

The Inability to Let Go - Very nice theme of "let it go" all the way through to the end. You really write a Nick that is very believable and realistic. Your writing is very descriptive and heartfelt. Nice job! :)

The Storm - The baby died. :( This was heartbreaking, but another great interpretation of Nick's character. He was true to it throughout. Good job! :)


EDITED TO ADD: The sixth story is now up on the page!!! Please read and review it as well! :)
 
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The Price of Admission- I didn't expect her to be at Nick's family's ranch. That was a good twist. I loved how Nick was so protective of Cole not wanting him to be around her. And the fact that his brother Billy admitted that he'd gone through the same thing Nick had was also a nice twist.
 
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The Price of Admission - Really great twist on a post-Grave Danger tale. The thought of Nick having a bit of claustrophobia afterward never really occurred to me so good job on that. Nick being so protective of his nephew is such a Nick quality and having his brother tell him he had known about the babysitter was a nice moment.
 
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I guess I should start posting my reviews now, that you nearly all did :D

I can just say that I'm really surprised about what you all came up with :) The stories are so different and yet all perfectly written and in character. Good job, ladies :thumbsup:

Thank you Egeria for managing the site again, even you haven't written for the challenge. That's really cool :D

And thanks to Smokey for continue to run the challenge and beta-reading my story :)

Change Of Scenery:

Awww I would be sad, seeing Nick leaving... :( But I understand why he did though... it wasn't the same for him after all the people leaving he cares so much for.

But Nick is a family man through and through, so it's clear that he would want to be there for his family. The conversation between Nick and his niece was sweet. I really could imagine Nick talking like that to her.

Finding this job was the best thing that could have happened to him. He can do what he always loved to do and he can be there for his family.

I really enjoyed this story, even I would start crying if Nick would leave :(
 
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The Price of Admission - Great story! You really had me wondering who she was there for a bit. Everything is really clearly written and very visual. I can see it all happening. I hope the guys tell someone about that woman so this doesn't happen again with anyone else.
 
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Yay for this challenge! I've spent the last couple of days getting to read new fics :D

Welcome back, NickyFan!! Hope your summer was lovely and that we'll get to read some new stuff from you!

And now, my reviews:

Change of Scenery - You know, I never saw Nick as a praying kind of man, but when you don't know what else to do, I suppose you always go back to the basics. I like how understanding Catherine is in this one - it's almost like she knew what he didn't yet; that she knew he'd been away from his family for too long and that he needed them as much as they needed him. Nicely done!

If I could Just See You - This is really heart-wrenching. I kept visioning Nick in the locker room after Turn, Turn, Turn - not the same actions or words, but the same feeling of helplessness, of sorrow, the questions undoubtedly running through Nick's head. I love that it fills the void of what happened, though it's tough to take. It's perfect though, the way it's conveyed - right from Nick's own mouth. Really beautiful job and I think you nailed the theme.

Break Away - I like Nick's niece in this one. Of course he'd be the cool uncle, right? Again, I like Catherine here too - she and Nick definitely have a special kind of relationship and I think it shows here. She knows something's up and wants to help, not just for the sake of the lab but for the sake of her friend. Love Cath. I like how it ends without the reader knowing what Nick's decision is. Great job!

The Inability To Let Go - The beginning is so emotional, with Nick sitting at the grave all but yelling at Warrick, that I wondered and worried that it would either get worse or fizzle in the end, but you didn't disappoint :) I particularly like Eli reaching up and wiping away Nick's tears, almost as if he's taking his father's place by saying "Let it go, man," in his own way. Nice job!

The Storm - Love Nicky The Helper :) And you always know when Nick's gut tells him something, it's usually spot on. Although I have to tell you, I wanted to smack both Nick and the officer when the officer left... You ought to know better by now! Sad that the baby died, but that was probably the most merciful thing. Nice work!

The Price of Admission - It's good that the Stokeses were able to be of some use to their son in his recovery. The twist with Sue Ellen being there was unexpected and a bit jarring - poor Nick's trying to recover and there she is. And it is logical that she wouldn't have just one victim - people like her never do, it just escalates. I felt for Billy at the end, too - of course he's happy that his brother made it out of the coffin, but he's probably even more happy that he's still got the opportunity to say his peace with Nick.

Great job, everyone! Looking forward to the next one :D
 
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Some more reviews :D

If I Could Just See You:

I know the writer of this one :D And because I know you I can be totally honest and don't need to worry about your reaction :) I can say that this is a good story, it really is BUT like you maybe think yourself it isn't your best one. I had problems to 'read your style' this time, which might be because you struggled with the song or your time problems... I had problems like that in my story too and I can tell that you're not entirely happy with your story.

That all doesn't change the fact that I really like the concept of your story :) That you didn't tell us who Nick is talking to is great because we can choose for ourself who it is. I would really like to know who YOU think he talked to ;)

I like how you decribed the whole thing through Nick's eyes, that's something we never had before. The way he sees himself is really interesting. I would really like to know how he sees himself and thank you I have a good picture of that now :D


Break Away:

Awwww, you're mean :( What decision did he make??? Come one, you can't leave me hanging like that... ;)

That was a really interesting story. It would be so sad for me to see Nick leaving but it would be understandable if he did though after all he's been through. But that he never gave up no matter what happened is one thing I admire on him. And so *I* think that he made the decision to come back to Vegas :D

That you had his niece talking with him was cool... it was good to see how Nick reacted to her plans.

I've got a little advise for you :) You could work a little bit more on that feeling part. I think you are able to make your story even more vivid with some more emotions and feelings descriptions in your story. It would make this story even better :D Think about it :)


The Inability To Let Go:

And again I wish they would have brought something like that in the show. We really got nothing after Warrick's death and that with Nick as his best friend...

It's great that you brought Eli in the story :) He acts kind of like a little Warrick here, comforting Nick when he's down.


Storm:

I immediately knew that this is your story as I read about the hospital :D There you are in your element :) You know I can see a change in your writing style from your earlier fics to your new ones... The storyflow is even better then before :) Thumbs up for that :thumbsup:

Your story made me cry, it was just so heart wrenching :( Your last story was nearly as sad :(

I love seeing Nick with children. He is always so sweet with them :)
The tragic of your story is indescripable...

The part where Nick gave Storm his name reminds me on a great story I read before yours :)

Well done with that one, the feelings you were able to write in your story really let me feel the drama and tragic of your story theme.


The Price Of Admission:

Oh you really surprised me with this one :) That was a great story, really... and this time you even wrote a proper ending which doesn't seem hurried :) Thumbs up for this one :thumbsup:

Everything fitted so well together... the buried alive thing with his traumatic experience as he was a child.

And you even worked on the feeling part this time :D No you got me :lol:
I liked the interaction with Nick and his brother... there weren't many words needed between them... they really understand each other and care about each other.

You even thought about that Nick might me claustrophobic because of his ordeal... man, that really was well thought through... Great work :D



Awwww already done :( We really should write more stories... sad that it is already over...

When starts the next round??? :p

Btw thank you Jacqui :D I'm glad to be back again, it just wasn't the same without you guys :)
 
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Hey Ladies:

Well I'm think I'm going to take part in the next round. I'm feeling better now.

Now onto the reviews:

Change of Scenary:

Aww..Nick leaving. But it sounds as if he's made peace with his decision given how many people have left over the years and the losses he experienced. I like how this story played out. You did great on adding in the personal issues that draws Nick away from Vegas. My only suggestion is try to move away from 'telling the story' to 'showing the story'. Add some more description.

If I Could Just See You:

I wouldn't change a thing about this story. It was awesome. Beautifully written and great for us Nick fans who wish like he it had been him who found Warrick and not Grissom. You wrote very closely to the series as to how it would have been had the writers of CSI had taken some time to devote to Nick. I liked how Brass blocked him. I can see that happening. I liked it. Great job!

Break Away:

Argh! You left us hanging, but oh well. It was good and I liked his conversation with his neice and how he carefully answered her questions without frightening her. The conversation with Catherine was very touching and you can see how much they care for each other in a platonic way.

I will finish my reviews off tommorow. So far I like what I see and thanks Smokey for understanding why I had to bow out this time. My funk is lifting slowly but surely!
 
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Just dropping by to say great stories :D I'll post some reviews this weekend. :thumbsup:

Reviews as promised!

Change of Scenery

Wow. You start us with a real sense of desolation. The team so broken up and everyone gone. Ouch! Having Wendy talk to Nick was lovely, really we don’t see enough interaction between the two so that was nice. I really like the glimpse of Nick with his family. But Nick moving to Michigan? Ooooh that was hard to read!! Change it so hard but you handled it gracefully. That Nick feels happy with his decision, well…a reader has to respect that!

If I Could Just See You

Oh wow. What a great start. Nick talking about the waitress and how he was only looking. Very realistic and oh so believable! This story is really heart breaking and yet I’m really glad you wrote it. I feel such a palpable sense of relief to finally hear Nick’s point of view of that terrible night. The tears came when Nick described how he thought Warrick had shot someone, and not the other way around. That was genius. I can just imagine Nick choking up as he talks about it. The best part about the story? Not knowing who Nick is talking to. I know who I *think* it could be, but my choice wouldn’t be the same as another reader, and that makes us a part of Nick’s story. And I love that.

Break Away

I like the start, with Catherine forcing Nick to open up. It’s just what he needed and the transition to seeing Nick with his family, well it was really refreshing. Hearing Nick, how lost he feels, that was heart wrenching. I really like your OC, Annie. She’s believable and a perfect foil for Nick to do some soul searching. I like your ending though, leaving it up to the reader to imagine Nick’s reply but just as certain it’s a positive answer. Very good way to bring some empathy into the story.

The Inability to Let Go

This story, so angsty and so emotional. I got a lump in my throat from reading this. This line ‘Today their conversation had been quiet’…wow. Your setting is so detailed and descriptive it was like being there. And Nick…going to see Tina and Eli, that was so special and sweet. I love how it’s Eli who finally breaks through and brings Nick the peace he needed. As sad as the subject matter is this story was so touching in a positive and uplifting way. I really love it.

The Storm

Very effective start, driving a sense of urgency to the story with enough description for readers to see the scene. Nick finding that baby in the midst of a storm, wow, that was unexpected! He seems so tender as he’s racing to get the baby to a hospital, calling him ‘little fella’…that’s so sweet! My heart really goes out to that child, you gave the reader such empathy for him through Nick. Very sad and effective story.

The Price of Admission

This was a really fabulous interpretation of the song. Wow…you really packed a punch with the appearance of *that* woman. You’ve really drawn the reader in with your emotions and descriptive writing. Oooh I felt like reaching into the screen and punching her myself! I like this glimpse into Nick’s family, and you know…until now I never once wondered if Nick’s brother had experienced the same abuse? Your story is brilliant, emotive and well written. I just hope Nick and Billy go tell someone else about their molester!
 
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Time to reveal the authors! If they like, they can post a little something about the story behind the story. :)

Change Of Scenery - GregNickRyanFan

If I Could Just See You - Smokey

Break Away - Princess

The Inability to Let Go - NickyFan

The Storm - NicksFriend

The Price of Admission - Jacqui
 
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Mine is actually the rough draft version which I tried to flesh out, but gave up after several tries. :lol:

I've actually started writing another part of the story which will tell Greg's part of the story... what his "family emergency" was. :)

I will probably also write a fic where Nick meets his new team. :D

I need to decide what small city of Michigan to use though. I don't really know many, though I did look up some on google, but didn't have that much luck as far as finding a name I liked. I may just make up a name. :lol:

And if you're wondering why I chose Michigan, well I wasn't sure what state I was going to choose... but then my brother was telling me something about them building movie studios in Michigan, so I just decided to use that.
 
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