Nick Song Fic Ch #8 - "Angel"- Now up!

[KFK]

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The Evidence Goes Turn, Turn, Turn Enjoyed the story.

At The Mercy I read it and then promptly head to the bathroom for an ice cold shower. :guffaw: I liked the way you ended the story. The story was a nice bit of smut.

Driving Blindly An interesting take on the Nick/Mandy relationship, though I did have trouble seeing Henry confronting Nick (only because Henry is so nervous and geeky around the CSI’s.) I enjoyed the story; it was sweet and romantic at the end.

Butterfly Very mysterious and vivid, it was like a surrealistic picture being painted by his brain…if that makes sense. I enjoyed the imagery and like everyone else wonder who the “partner” is? Hmmmm…who could it be?

Crying in the Rain What an imaginative concept, and an interesting way to explain Nick’s grief and pain. I truly enjoyed this fic, well done.

Justice This story was dead one in its no win, talking in circles conversations between Grissom and Nick. Grissom is incapable of relating to Nick, because Grissom is like the bugs he loves…devoid of emotions. Nick on the other hand lets his emotions show. I loved the fic, well done.:thumbsup:

Everlasting Love The case was sad and I could see how that would affect Nick. I liked the ending with Catherine offering comforting words to Nick. This was a nice story, good job. :thumbsup:

Body Language Very mysterious, who is Nick’s soul mate? The beginning was sad, but I was glad to see it helped Nick realize what was important in life. Good story, I enjoyed it.

Another Crime Scene A very spiritual read and I loved the way you captured Nick mindset at the time. The ending was great and very Nick like.:thumbsup:

Holding On I liked how you had Nick trying to comfort Catherine, I could see him doing just that. I also liked that you didn’t have them finishing what was started, so to speak. I like Nick and Catherine together, but only as friends, not lovers. Well done, a good fic.

Great job everyone, I enjoyed all of the stories, and can’t wait for the next challenge.

 

[GregNickRyanFan]

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I edited the post above because it had some weird coding like or something like that and it was hard to read the post. This weird coding happens if you copy and paste from Microsoft Word unfortunately (cause doing fics would be easier if you could copy/paste from word lol). As it is, I have to type all of my fics in a post window and then copy from it and paste into word because when done the opposite, you get that weird coding. Anyway, I removed the weird coding so the post would be easier to read.

 

[Smokey]

Re: Nick Fic Song Fic Challenge

Just curious, when can we start submitting song choice for the next round?

Princess (and everyone else), you can submit a song to me anytime you want. Each person gets one submission for a round. You can change your choice anytime you want, or you can just leave it as the one song you've chosen each time.

And everyone is going to get a turn, so if your song has been picked, then it will be after everyone else gets a turn that your song will be in the running again. So if yours hasn't been chosen, have patience. The odds get better with each round.

 

[KFK]

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GregNickRyanFan thank you for correcting my posting error. I had no idea cut and pasting from Word would do that, and then I didn't know how to edit it after. I used word because it's easier to type in, has spell check, and I could have mutiple windows open at one time to switch back and forth from.

Anyway, thank you again for correcting it for me. I send you a tray of warm chocolate chip cookies in appreciation.

Take care,

Kell

 

[NickyFan]

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Well, I've got three more reviews The last ones I'll post after the weekend

BUTTERFLY:
Wow that was a great story... I was amazed at the detail you wrote it with... You used all the senses Nick has in your story and that draws a very wonderful picture. The way you describe the tinniest of details makes me feel like I'm reight there to feel it myself.
I like the idea of the butterfly who was leading through the whole story... that was a great idea for making sure the story flow is right
The mysterious partner of Nick is not revealed, but I'm very sure who the writer of this wonderful piece of work is If it is who I think it is... the person knows that we talked about the detail thing

CRYING IN THE RAIN:
What an emotional fic... I hate seeing Nick hurt but I love reading about his emotional moments, crazy isn't it??? The concept of not describing the 'angel' any furher was good... it could have been really everyone I've no clue who wrote this one... should I know you???

JUSTICE:
Wow to come up with a story like that inspired by the song we had really takes a richment of ideas... and you brought the song well into the story It was great to read how Nick stands up for what he believes is right. When he is like that nobody can stop him, not even the stubborn bugman... Grissom never really got it, he can not even call things by their names...

That was a good thoughtful story, who really makes you think about the whole thing a little bit more. I like stories like that because they would have been a great continue of the real episode on the show... You wrote the characters good, made sure that we realize what they stand up for. Great work, I wish we would have seen a scene like that

I've a good guess who you are... but I'm too scared to tell because I don't want to be wrong :lol:




So that were my reviews for this week... what about posting the authors to the stories??? No one did it till now... and I don't want to be the only one to try, so I kept it nearly for myself who I think wrote what...

 

[Speedystokesgirl]

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Some more reviews from me.

Butterfly: Wow, that was really a great story. The descriptions were unbelievable. I felt like I was there. There are so many twists to this story, that everytime I thought I had it figured it out, it changed. I love the symbolism of the butterfly and what it represents. Now if I only knew who was the mysterious partner is, that would be nice. :lol: You leave the reader wondering who it is, not to mention the sex of this partner. Very nicely done. The whole story seem so surreal and you felt what Nick felt.

Crying In The Rain: Oh that was so sad. Very well written. We never did get to really see how Warrick's deather affected Nick and now we do. Your description of Nick in this story is dead on. I could see him walking, feeling lost, tears falling from his eyes. The story was also romantic. To find that kind of love, that one person that can help you get through anything is a rarity and, definitely, a soul mate. Great job!

Justice: Ok, I so wasn't expecting that. I really like the take on the lyrics 'at the mercy of a girl'. Nick was at Cassie's mercy. He know she was alive and he was going to find her one way or another. I like that he was rough with Grissom, but I'm a little surprised that Grissom didn't lose anger. He was definitely pushing Grissom's buttons. I'm with Nick though, I wouldn't be sorry for what I did either. What those boys did to Cassie and her family is unforgivable and he allowed a little girl to get the justice he'll never get.

I'd put the names of who I think wrote the stories, but I'd be soooooo wrong. Just when I think I knew who wrote one story, someone else writes one with Mandy in it and totally messes with my head. :lol:

More reviews later!

 

[GregNickRyanFan]

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Just when I think I knew who wrote one story, someone else writes one with Mandy in it and totally messes with my head. :lol:

:guffaw:That totally threw me too. :lol:

 

[Speedystokesgirl]

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Alright, my final reviews!

Everlasting Love: Man, I wish I could find a love like that. Who doesn't? At first when you wrote that Nick was wearing a suit and this was a family guy, I thought Nick had to leave his wedding to do the crime scene. That he didn't tell anyone about it. :lol: Good story. Poor Nick, he really needs to find someone. I'll be happy to do that for him. He really takes some cases to heart and you showed that in this story. Good job!

Body Language: Well, that was short and to the point. I like it! Another mystery love for Nick. Sometimes you need a kick in the a** to make you take a chance and this case did that for Nick. Good story!

Another Crime Scene: Now that was a very interesting story. I knew he was an angel, when he have his name. Could he be Nick's guardian angel? I would be freaking too if someone knew stuff about me that they shouldn't. I'm not a religious person and don't know if angels exist, but stranger things have happened. I like how you incorporated the lyrics into the story and how you interpreted the lyrics. I like this take on how Nick decided to start Eli's college fund and I know Nick will always be there for Warrick's son. Even if we don't see it on the show. This was a very unique story with a paranormal feel to it. Great job!

Holding On: Ok, that was hot without being 'hot'. Ya know? I thought for sure I knew where this was heading, but your ending definitely went against the grain and they ended up doing the right thing. Nick is always the gentleman and Catherine stopped when she should have. Even if I know it wasn't easy for her to do that. Poor Nick, he's gonna need a cold shower when he gets home. :lol: Nick was at her mercy, that's for sure. It made me want to jump his bones. Great job!

 

[Jacqui]

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I'm going to review in reverse order

Holding On: Very typical of Nick to need some human contact and to know when other people are hurting too, especially Catherine. I loved the moment when he opened his arms to her and she snuggled into him . . . I wanted to be Catherine right then! I loved how the description of his blue jeans was kind of like a metaphor for Nick's demeanor right then - relaxed, familiar, comfortable. I like how Nick's desires are not made clear to the reader, as I imagine that in this situation they wouldn't be clear to Nick either. It wrapped up quite nicely too, with a gentle reminder of reality. The only thing I'd say about this fic is that for me, it was more about Catherine than about Nick. But despite that, it was a really lovely read that gave me warm fuzzies. Nice job!

Another Crime Scene: Very nice job with description and detail! It all helps set the mood and show that Nick is really at rock-bottom spiritually, with all that he went through on top of having just lost his best friend. Michael's message was something that Nick really needed right then. At the end we get the sense that Nick knows he needs to make the fog clear so he can be of use to his friend, be a friend to little Eli. You could benefit from a proofreader, but the story itself was really good - sad, introspective, but a good read. It's beautifully done!

Body Language: Nick's very fortunate that Angie admitted her love for her friend. Very sweetly done, only in a sad kind of way. Only we don't get to know who Nick's crush is...

Everlasting Love: I know others have said it, but I love Wendy as a CSI! The Jansen's story is such a sad one, but like the previous (next?) story it touches Nick in such a way as to make him look at his own life and take stock of it. I like how you brought the song itself into the story and that the brother in law talked about how music affects different people different ways - as exemplified by our challenge I love that it's Nick and Catherine in the end talking things out; Catherine is a great friend to Nick and he knows she won't steer him wrong. I did skip over the song lyrics, which interrupted the flow a bit. I really liked this one, very touching!

Justice: Interesting take on the lyrics. The beginning is a bit abrupt but the story and dialogue blossom well. I liked Nick's detatched interest in Peter's injuries. Nick really does seem to have Grissom's number but most of the time the problem is that Grissom's got Nick's. Only this time, Nick's not backing down and I like that he doesn't, even as he admits he crossed a line. Nice work!

I'll be back with more soon!

ETA:

Crying in the Rain: I loved the use of the rain to set the mood. The weather is always cool as a metaphor for someone's mindset. I can see Nick doing just this, walking by himself in the rain, not wanting to worry anyone or bring anyone down with his memories and his grief. It's sad but ends with a ray of sunshine as his girlfriend comes to get him from his lonely walk. It seems a bit repetitive in places, but that's not terribly disruptive. Nicely done!

Butterfly: You had me at hello on this one . . . I love butterflies. LOVE the use of blue, which represents so many things from loyalty to peace, all very important in the kind of relationship that Nick is realizing he has. It was nice to see the Bugman too, given the butterflies! Your descriptions are so vibrant I can really see what Nick is seeing in his dreams. I really enjoyed this one.

Driving Blindly: Oh, poor Mandy! And Henry knowing that she's in love with Nick before the professional observer does - LOL I liked Henry in this one, though it's a bit OOC for Henry to smack down anyone. Usually he's the doofus trying to crack jokes with the big kids but this shows that he's really on the ball. The ending was very . . . satisfying, shall we say? . . . and I loved the muffin joke

At The Mercy: Oh . . . wow. . . . Wow. That was hot! Whew! Needs some punctuation/grammar attention but it's Nick smut so . . . who cares? I loved that all Nick asks for a starter question is "Why?" I really liked that moment actually, both of them settling and gazing at each other, and Nick touches her face. What a sweet gesture! But then that's our Nick. (Although he ought to be thanking his lucky stars he's still alive!) Very very nice!

The Evidence Goes Turn, Turn, Turn: The incorporation of the song lyrics in the story was good here, I liked Nick's inner monologue. It's got a sad edge to it but in the end I lit up to see Mandy's tired smile at Nick. I also loved the title and the ending sentence tying back to the title of the episode, as well as the sounds in the lab in the beginning that came full circle in this little snippet of Nick's life. Well done!

These were such great stories! Sorry for the late reviews and the edited post; I just got my power cord yesterday. Once again, huge ginormous thanks to Smokey and Egeria for organizing and posting all of this! The site is beautiful E!

Great job everyone!

 

[egeria]

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Ok so I'm super late getting my reviews done and I'm sorry! Here's three and I'll get more done this evening.

Butterfly

Nice start! I’m a fan of the ‘catch you from the first line’ kind of stories and this one did the job. Your descriptions are captivating, you really put the reader right into the scene.

The story is full of twists and turns which keeps the reader wanting more. I love the interpretation of the lyrics in the first scene, and the way the butterfly keeps appearing is masterful.

I love that the whole story is a dream! Very nice surprise at the end! I want to know why the phenolthalen turned blue! :lol: And like everyone, I want to know who this partner is, and is it a guy or a girl?!

All in all your story was a really captivating read.


Crying in the Rain

You really throw us in the deep end with your beginning, but I love the visual of Nick with wet clothes plastered to his body. Still, you set the mood for your story brilliantly and I can’t help but feel Nick’s depression.

I really love the thoughtfulness of this story, from Catherine looking out for Nick, to Nick’s own train of thought. You seem really in touch with Nick’s emotions and I can feel the guilt emanating from him.

The girl, Nick’s angel sounds really amazing but I love that you leave it up to the reader to decide who it is.

Your story really runs us through emotions, from depression and guilt to love and gentleness. It’s beautiful.


Justice

I like the opening line. Catchy and immediately draws the reader in to find out more. Cleverly done.

I really enjoyed the dialogue between Nick and Grissom. It flowed easily with the right amount of description to fit the conversation. You could *see* it happening as you read it.

I always wondered about this episode, and what the fall out for Nick would have been. I like your version, I could definitely see something like this on the show if they had only followed through.

Your interpretation of the song was subtle and beautiful. Nick at the mercy of the girl, the victim. It’s tragic and perfect.

Your story is really good, both Nick and Grissom are very in character and it was an enjoyable read.

 

[Nicksfriend]

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Don't count me out yet..I'll get it done today...I promise....Went to my daughter's graduation yesterday...cried like a little baby...my little girl has grown up...!

Sorry...fell asleep.

Body Language...I like how the author had me guessing,who is Nick's soul mate or was the author wanting me to fill in the blank? Very nice!

Everlasting Love...I hope the powers that be could read this fic...Nick needs a girlfriend,he needs to have that in his life. Very nice read and use of the lyrics. Also loved the use of the name Claire and I agree,Nick needs to be able to love someone.

Driving Blindly...I will never accept these two people together,my mind won't allow but with that said, this was a very good story of love realized and I really enjoyed reading it,very good use of the lyrics and the muffin joke was good also. Well done!

 

[NickyFan]

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So my last reviews Late but well thought through :lol:

EVERLASTING LOVE:
I liked the way you used the song in this story... something I should think about when I always rack my brain in thinking how I should get the song in my story. So easy and so believable...

The case was there to make Nick realize how short life can be and how strong love can be I liked the idea of him needing to cancel a date because of work... I guess that's something common in that line of work... and it makes it difficult to have a real family with wife and children.

That you let Catherine talk to him about that was cool. I could see that happen on the show... sad that they're not that into the private lifes of the CSI's...

I liked how you let Nick talk to his date at the end. Life is too short to not live every day to the fullest. In your story I can see Nick having a family some day

That was a sweet story, very well written :thumbsup:
I'm fully in the dark who you are... hopefully I'll find it out while reading your story again tomorrow

BODY LANGUAGE:
That was a short sweet story full of love Another mysterious lover for Nick... I like that concept It could be everybody... cool The way you wrote in the song was nice too... even I think that this story could have been a little longer... not that I hate short fics but in a longer version you would have been able to show us more of the feelings Nick has when he is with this mysterious lover. I love to read about thoughts and feelings, it makes me feel like I'm right there...
All in all I really enjoyed the story, for it's concept and for his ending

ANOTHER CRIME SCENE:
Oh the detail you put into this story were amaizing... I wish I could write details like that... I love the mysterious concept of your story... it really captivated me till the end... and I somehow think Nick needed that kind of attention from somebody who really understands...

And I so loved the ending of the story... great that you showed us how Nick finally decided to open a collage fund for Eli That was cool.

That was a very thoughtful story with an amaizing concept and it showed once again how different people think while reading the same song lyrics...

Great work... even I hate to say that I don't know who you are...

HOLDING ON:
Wow, I never thought I would get to read a story with Nick and Cath together on a couch and...
That was a surprise but a good one :thumbsup: I loved the feelings you wrote into your story... they made your story more believable and showed how much they both need a shoulder to lean on...

That you wrote the story out of Catherines point of view was cool because that way you were able to describe us the hot Texan she was with :drool:

Great work with lots of details and emotions




I can't believe I reviewed them all... I wish it would have been twice that much... Now I'll spend my time with reading them all again to get the authers to the stories...

 

[egeria]

Re: Nick Fic Song Fic Challenge

Alrighty! My last reviews

Everlasting Love

Your story is really good. I like how the reader empathizes with Nick at the first sentence. You get us into his mood and really feeling for him.

Nice to see Wendy at a scene, and I like how she copped on to the date right away. Very sharp.

Your use of the lyrics at the crime scene was so sweet and sad at the same time. Nick figuring out the love in the song was perfect, he really *is* that in touch with his own emotions. Very believable and in character.

I really like how the case transitioned into Catherine telling Nick to basically get a life. And your use of an OC was a really nice touch and kinda refreshing to be honest.

This story was really sweet. I love it!

Body Language

This story was really special, Nick learning to let go and embrace the chance at love. I love that we don’t know who Nick’s crush is, leaving us to fill in the gap with whomever we want. Another story where we don’t know if it is a man or a woman and I really like that.

I’m glad Nick decided to give Angie the letter, it’s definitely something he’d do and I find myself silently cheering.

I have to say, this was short but very sweet.

Another Crime Scene

Wow, this fic is really inspired. From the setting outside with Nick being reminded of Warrick, to the church inside and the crime scene there. The dereliction of the church evokes the image of Nick’s friendship with Warrick, where once it was lively and good, it has now been destroyed though death.

The conversation between Nick and Michael is really subtle, but you can see how healing it is for Nick, even if Nick himself doesn’t realise it. You really kept the story so mysterious, drawing the reader into the conversation and the scene with your descriptions and dialogue.

Your use of the song lyrics to describe Michael and Nick was really poignant. Nick at the mercy of the girl, the victim, that tugged my heart strings.

I really like your story, the setting and dialogue were captivating.

Holding On

Great opening line, immediately makes the reader wonder who should be giving in to what. I like how Nick is looking out for Catherine in your story, it’s usually the other way around.

I love how natural it seemed for them to end up at Catherine’s and then watching a dvd…until they’re snuggling on the couch. The transition is really smooth and believable…particularly if the reader knows how easily it can happen. Ahem. But I digress.

Catherine’s idle caresses seem really special, and she’s very in touch with her feelings. I like that she’s almost bemused while lying in Nick’s arms. I love your descriptions here, it’s so easy to see it happen, easy to see Nick reacting like that, confused but not stopping Catherine.

I have to admit that I’m glad they DO stop, I think it made the story all the more special and tender. Sometimes all it takes is a little touch, a little caress. A re-connection with humanity. Your story felt like two lost souls just *being*. I love it.

And I’m like 99.99% sure I know who wrote this story.

 

[Smokey]

Re: Nick Fic Song Fic Challenge

All right folks! Drum roll please!

It's time to reveal the authors of these wonderful stories!

It would be great, too, if everyone could leave a little line saying how they came up with their story idea.

Without further ado:

KFK (Kell) - The Evidence Goes Turn, Turn, Turn
Speedy - At the Mercy
MyFutureCSI - Driving Blindly
Egeria - Butterfly
Nickyfan - Crying in the Rain
Jacqui - Justice
Princess - Everlasting Love
GregNickRyanFan - Body Language
Nicksfriend - Another Crime Scene
Smokey - Holding On

(If I mixed any of these up, let me know asap!)

Thanks to all who participated! This was a great batch of stories. I'm really looking forward to moving on to the next round.

So the idea behind my story...I was torn between going all out with the smut or trying to find something else in the lyrics. I failed at that, so I'm really impressed with those of you who were able to do so.

So I decided to almost go with the smut...almost, but not quite. I've always liked the relationship between Nick and Catherine and feel like they really care a lot about each other, so it seemed natural to me.

And yes...they were watching Matthew McConaughey. :lol:

 

[Speedystokesgirl]

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How did I come up for 'At the Mercy'. Well, when I first read the lyrics I immediately thought, 'smut'. Then I had no idea what I was gonna right.

Then an ending came to mind and I built on that. Then as I was writing the story the ending changed. However, for the life of me, I can't remember what the original ending was. or :lol:

At the mercy of a girl. I went with that and since I've been accused of being a Mary Jane, I decided that was going to be her name. That's for all the Mary Jane's out there. :guffaw:

Oh, by the way, the Mary Jane in the story is NOT me. I don't have brown hair and blue eyes, I have auburn (brown/red) hair and green eyes. Smokey can contest to that! :thumbsup: