Re: Nick Fic Song Fic Challenge
The Evidence Goes Turn Turn Turn:
Well, well, well! A Nick/Mandy fic. My heart overflowth with glee reading these two characters in such a sad and desperate moment make a deep, emotional connection. And I especially loved the last line:
On this chilled March morning, Nick Stokes needed Mandy Webster’s tenderness, her touch, just one caress. This morning he’d face the truth, confront the evidence, hope for the best, and turn…turn…turn the next page.
Totally awesome! This story highlighted Nick's sadness and grief over the the loss of Haley Jones. Wonderful story. Well written and I really felt like I was there witnessing the blossoming love between these two characters. Well done! This story had me wanting more. I hope the writer continues with it.
At the Mercy:
Well..here's how I felt after reading this one:drool::drool:. Very descriptive details of Nick. I have a very good idea who wrote this one. The last line of the story where she revealed her name had me in absolute hysterics! Loved it!
My writing instructor once told us stories should always be told in the past tense because when you tell someone a story verbally, it's always told in past tense, therefore the same rule applies to written tales. However, this fic goes against the grain. This tale being told in present tense adds to the sexual tension. You feel as if you are travelling with Nick on this erotic journey of his. Bravo!
Driving Blindly:
Another Nick/Mandy fic. Yee! Very good tale of unrequited love which reminded me of the song by Vanessa Williams
Save the Best for Last. My only suggestion would be to try and reduce the redundancy of some words. Heat and heat were used twice in one paragraph. Keep a sharp eye out for typs. Other than that, great story. The ending was very sexy. The play on words was awesome. CSI used to be great for that. Remember Grissom and Sara and the pickle! Lines like those have long ceased being used in CSI fandom.
Butterfly:
My first thought when I read this story was the episode 'Butterflied' only with Nick Stokes because he wasn't in the episode. A sore point with me as such an important episode in CSI fandom lacked a very important character. Anyways, I digress but will say this story is much better than the episode and kudos to the writer for such a vivid and tense fic. We delve deep into the mind of Nick Stokes as he tries to decipher what's going on around him only to find out it was a dream all along. Wow. Very surreal. You put those writers on CSI to shame with this one.
CRYING IN THE RAIN:
Interesting concept of not naming the 'angel'. I enjoyed this story very much. I liked this line the most:
There he stood, lost like a little puppy, shivering like a leaf with red, teary eyes. She could even see the tears which had escaped his brown eyes and were running down his cheek, mixing with the rain.
Nick does look like lost, little puppy when he's sad. This was a very good emotional tail
Writing was nice and tight and it flowed gracefully. The tone was steady through and through. Wonderful fic.
Justice:
You know I never about the 'Walter Gordon' case until I read this line:
Nick paused before he answered, making sure that Grissom met his eyes, his annoyance having turned to anger. “Don’t we usually refer to cases by the victim’s name, Gris?”
It is weird how Nick's burial has never been referred to as the
Nick Stokes Case when in fact, it was. How interesting. To me it says a lot how about TPTB dropped the storyline after it aired and how much the team never wanted to talk about what happened to Nick hereafter. As if they were afraid by talking about it with Nick, they would catch some disease which is ironic given how each of them became victims to crime following the seasons.
The conversation between Nick and Grissom was very in character. Nick defending his actions and Grissom trying to play the big, bad boss only to fail miserably as he always did. Really great job on this one and it gave me food for thought.
Everlasting Love:
It's always an interesting read where a case affects the CSIs so much it enables them to take note of their own lives. Nick is the same age as me and so I can relate to his reflecting on the 80s and the Depeche Mode era. Back then, though we never called it 'emo' we called it New Wave as in the New Wave of British Bands which included the likes of Depeche Mode. It sounds as if Nick is realizing life is passing him by and how others his age have already hit the milestones of marriage and children. Good fic. My only suggestion is perhaps not putting the whole song into the fic because since we already were writing from it, I found I skimmed over the song to get the meat of the story. I've included whole songs into stories so I write from personal experience and what has been given to me. My writing instructor told us if we are going to insert songs into our stories to stick with one or two lines and use the rest as inspiration.
Body Language:
Ooh..mysterious lover. Very tantalizing! I's like. It was short but sweet and left much to the imagination. You could go any route of any ship in this story.
Another Crime Scene:
Interesting take on a momentous event in Nick's life-the death of his friend. Nick having a spiritual moment is something TPTB rarely have touched other than in Grave Danger when the coffin cracked and Nick started panting, "Oh God!" or in Gum Drops when he said he didnt' believe in past lives. The angel managed to crack the veneer with a keen observation of why after all the near-death experiences Nick is still alive while his friend is no longer with him. The end was very touching.
Holding On:
I'm not a huge fan of sex with friends as my experience has been it usually ruins a friendship because a line has been crossed but this only fiction so anything goes and I liked this story. It was very sweet the way they comforted each other. Good job. The writing was nice and tight. Liked the 'money trail' line. I call it the happy trail, but hey we all have our expressions. LOL.
Great fics everyone!! I can't wait to
