CSI: DuCaine

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  1. EmeraldEyes06

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    Alrighty then!! I have written some original Horatio/Calleigh scenes for the show. It's the stuff that you may never see... or will eventually see if I get on the writer's team. :lol: These two scenes were previously posted in the DuCaine shipper thread, but I will post these scenes and all updates to this forum in the future. Have a read, and let me know what you think. Constuctive critiscism please, be completely honest. Thanks guys!!


    It's the end of a long day. Horatio and the team have apprehended a serial killer, whose victims were young mothers and their children.
    Using mainly trace and ballistics evidence, the killer is going away for a long time, thanks to the crimelab. Horatio is at home after comforting the family of the killer's final victim, but he's not alone. He's joined by a mystery guest...
    But who is it??
    (Pssst.. you all know who it is, but just to those who wouldn't know... ;))


    FADE IN

    [INT. HORATIO'S HOUSE -- NIGHT]

    (There are candles lighting everywhere. Soft music
    in the background.
    Various dissolves in and out as the camera moves
    around the room.)

    FADE IN
    (Front shot of Horatio sitting on a leather sofa.
    Pans in slowly as he starts talking.)
    HORATIO: It's always the same... everyday. Another scene,
    another victim...

    CUT TO:
    (Camera following a pair of black high heels
    walking across tiled floor. Horatio continues
    speaking during this.)
    HORATIO:(v.o.) Another murder solved, another
    funeral.

    (Cut back to: Camera focusing in slowly on Horatio,
    panning slightly left.)
    HORATIO: No matter how hard I try, how much
    I put into them, these cases always haunt me...

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of hands taking out a bottle of wine.)
    HORATIO: (v.o.) They plague me... and I can't escape...

    (Cut back to: Camera still panning slowly left of Horatio.)
    HORATIO: Their families have closure, justice is served...

    CUT TO:
    (Two wine glasses being filled.)
    HORATIO: (v.o.) But I can't help feeling defeated... feeling like
    a failure.

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio in full profile. His eyes close now as he talks.)
    The pain dives me until it's unbearable...

    CUT TO:
    (Half shot of the woman, holding the glasses, walking to the left
    of the screen.
    We don't see her face, and she's wearing a black dress.)
    HORATIO: (v.o.) I strive to make things right, to make this
    city safer...

    CUT TO:
    (Profile shot of Horatio.)
    HORATIO: It never relents, the endless cycle, it keeps on going.

    CUT TO:
    (Woman's hands putting glasses on coffee table.
    Camera moves towards Horatio, as does the woman,
    we still don't see her face.)
    HORATIO: Life doesn't wait for you... that couldn't be truer.

    (Horatio in focus, the woman sits down beside him.
    We see that it's Calleigh.)

    CALLEIGH: I feel the same...
    (Camera focuses in on her.)
    CALLEIGH: It doesn't get easier, does it?

    HORATIO: (leaning forward with
    a sigh) I just want it to end... I want...
    (looks at her) the pain to stop.

    CUT TO:
    (Front shot of Horatio and Calleigh. As dialogue
    continues, camera moves in slowly.)

    CALLEIGH: The pain you feel shows you're human...
    you have a heart, and that's what I admire about you.
    (Horatio smiles slightly, leaning back a little.
    Camera focuses in on him.)
    HORATIO: Hmmm... you've always cared, Calleigh.

    (Calleigh leans towards him slightly.
    Horatio dips his head, eyes downcast.)
    CALLEIGH: Each day I feel the pain... it pulls my heart...
    I am letting you know now that you're not alone...
    the agony you feel... I share it.

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio smiling.)
    HORATIO: I believe you.

    CUT TO:
    (Front shot if them both. Camera pans slowly to Calleigh's hands,
    as she takes his left hand in her own, interlacing their fingers.)

    HORATIO: (glancing up) Calleigh?
    CALLEIGH: Horatio?

    (Close up of them as they smile at each other.
    Horatio looks down at their hands, and rests his right hand
    over them.
    Close up on Calleigh as she smiles even more.
    Front shot of them as they lean towards each other.
    They hug.)

    HORATIO: I love your dress...
    CALLEIGH: (laughs) You flatterer! But I still think that
    I don't look good in all-black...
    HORATIO: (stroking her hair) Once again,
    sweetheart...
    (Camera cuts to close up of Calleigh closing her eyes,
    still smiling.
    Horatio pulls her back slowly to face him, and rests
    his forehead against hers.)
    HORATIO: ... I beg to differ.

    (They both open their eyes to look at each other.
    Camera pans slowly backwards.
    Final shot of Horatio and Calleigh holding each other.)

    (FADE TO BLACK.)


    Here's the second scene:

    Synopsis: Calleigh was involved in a shootout at a crimescene. She is cornered with a rifle pointing at her. Luckily, back-up arrives, with Horatio close behind. She is saved, but is whisked away by EMTs to check her out. Horatio arrests the perp, steaming mad.
    It's later that day, and Horatio comes by the lab to check on Calleigh. It's late, and the entire lab is empty...
    What's going to happen??

    White flash to:
    [INT - CRIMELAB - NIGHT]

    (Shot of Calleigh in the
    firing range.
    Camera slowly pans from
    behind her to in front of her
    as she fires round after
    round.)

    (When we finally reach to in front
    of her, we see Horatio leaning
    against the door, watching her
    closely.)

    CUT TO:
    (Close-up of Horatio
    as he smiles slowly.)

    Cut back to:
    (Calleigh fires one more
    round.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of her as she puts down her
    gun.
    Camera follows her hands to
    her taking off her glasses.
    Camera focuses in on
    her eyes for a moment.)

    Cut TO:
    (Horatio tilting his
    head slightly, still
    smiling.)

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh taking off her earphones,
    shaking her hair a little.
    She sighs, picks up the gun,
    and starts to clean it.)

    Horatio: (o.s) You've improved,
    I see.

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh jumps, the gun
    clattering on the work-table.
    She takes a deep breath,
    giving a small laugh.)

    Calleigh: Don't you ever knock?

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio smiling more, raising
    his hand to the door. He knocks
    3 times.)

    Horatio: Knock, knock, knock.

    Cut back to:
    (Calleigh smiling widely now,
    as she turns back to her
    gun.)

    Calleigh: If this gun was
    loaded...

    Cut to:
    (Horatio walking in a few steps.)

    Horatio: I shudder to think... then
    again, you are the Bullet Girl...
    (He reaches a spot a few feet behind
    her.)

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh smiling, still cleaning her
    gun.)

    Horatio: (quietly) I'd expect nothing
    less...

    (Calleigh puts the gun down,
    tucking her hair behind her ears,
    she turns around, leaning against
    the table.)

    Calleigh: You sure know how to
    flatter a girl, Handsome.

    (Cut to shot of Horatio as he
    smiles, dipping his head.
    But he raises it again,
    serious now.)

    Horatio: Umm... I just came by...
    to see how you're doing.
    (A beat.) Are you okay, Calleigh?

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh lowering her eyes.
    Long beat.
    She raises her head.)

    Calleigh: I am, considering...
    (She bites her lip.)

    (Horatio steps in a little more,
    Calleigh plays with her hands,)

    Horatio: What happened to you
    was unthinkable... no one
    should have to go through it...

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh smiling ironically.)

    Calleigh: I went through it, Horatio.
    What does that tell you?

    Cut back to:
    (Horatio looking at her, hands on
    his hips.)

    Horatio: Today tells me that
    right now... there is a very brave
    woman standing in front of me...

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh shifting, her face glowing.)

    Cut back to:
    (Horatio talking.)

    Horatio: ... who has overcome
    everything that was thrown at her...
    and I am here to tell you, that I'm
    very proud of you, Calleigh.

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh smiling.)
    Calleigh: Aw, Horatio... I'm
    blushing!!

    Cut to:
    (Wide shot of them as they
    both laugh.)

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio talking.)
    Horatio: If you need anything,
    anything at all...

    (Cut to close-up of Calleigh's
    face.)
    Calleigh: I know...
    (Close-up of her eyes.)

    I won't hesitate to call you...

    (Cut to close-up of Horatio's
    eyes.)

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh taking the gun and
    putting it back on the wall.)

    Calleigh: I'm gonna head... good
    night, Horatio.
    (She smiles as she walks up to
    him. He dips his head again,
    and looks up at her.)

    Horatio: Good night, Calleigh.
    (She nods, smiling.)

    CUT TO:
    (Side shot of her walking past.)

    Horatio: Calleigh...
    (He takes her hand as she
    walks by.
    Close-up of their hands.)

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh looking back at him,
    blinking rapidly.)

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio, glancing at their hands.
    He pulls her in a little closer to
    him.
    He gently squeezes her hand.)

    Horatio: You hang in there, Cal.

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh looking down demurely,
    nodding. She looks up.)

    Calleigh: (quietly) I will.

    (Her eyes flick to their hands.
    Horatio slowly lets her go.
    Slow-motion shot of their hands
    parting.)

    (Shot of Horatio and Calleigh smiling
    at each other.
    Calleigh walks out of the lab.
    Horatio stands there, looking
    after her solemnly.)

    Cut to:
    (Slow dissolve into a shot of
    Calleigh walking through the corridor,
    her head down, eyes lowered.
    Various shots of her in danger,
    fade in and out, accompanied by
    white flashes.
    During this, she slows down,
    her footfalls echoing.)

    Cut back to:
    (Slow motion shot of Horatio,
    looking down, Calleigh's footsteps
    echoing in the lab.)

    Cut back to:
    (Calleigh as finally,
    she stops.
    Camera pans around her.
    Front shot of her, the door to
    the lab behind her shoulder.
    She shuts her eyes, her breathing
    shallow.
    She turns back.)

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio looking to the guns
    on the wall.
    White flash to shot of
    Calleigh with a gun
    pointed at her.
    He sharply looks down,
    his fist clenched.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of the lab from Calleigh's
    POV.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of the lab door from Horatio's
    POV.
    Front shot of Horatio looking
    down.)

    (There is a sound of clacking
    heels.
    Horatio snaps his head up,
    and sees Calleigh running
    back to him.)

    Cut to:
    (Close-up of Calleigh running.)

    Cut back to:
    (Horatio still standing there.
    His arms open automatically,
    and Calleigh runs into his arms.)

    (Camera pans around them as
    they embrace, various close-ups
    hugging dissolve in and out.)

    Cut to:
    (Front shot of Horatio holding
    her.)

    Horatio: It's okay... it's okay...
    Calleigh: Hold me tighter...
    tighter...
    Horatio: I have you... I have you,
    sweetheart...
    Calleigh: Make me strong... don't
    let go... Horatio...
    Horatio: Calleigh...

    (Camera slowly moves back
    and away from them
    Several white flashes during the
    final shot of them, still holding
    each other in the lab.)

    (FADE TO BLACK.)

    It's my first time posting in the Fanfiction thread, so apologies for the really long post. Just to get this topic started off.

    COMING SOON... on CSI: DuCaine.
    An invitation to dinner... will sparks fly??

    STAY TUNED!!

    See ya!!
    :)
     
  2. Bullet_Girl

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    That was brilliant! I wouldn't be able to do anything like that. ever, I'm serious....you should be proud of yourself :D
     
  3. sissi59100

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    Totally agreed! lol it was nice to read, I really hope you will develop more on your next post !
     
  4. EmeraldEyes06

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    Okay, here we are with the next scene. If you've seen the promo, that was just a taster. If not, here's the tiny synopsis. Enjoy some more of CSI: DuCaine!!:

    All in a day's work for a CSI... Horatio and the crimelab solve yet another case. Everyone has gone home, and Horatio is leaving for the night, but he doesn't go to his own house...
    Where does he go??

    [EXT - LAB- NIGHT]

    (Crane shot of Hummer.
    We see Horatio walk up
    to the driver's door.)

    CUT TO:
    (Side shot of Horatoi
    looking up at the lab.
    He smiles a little before
    getting in the Hummer,
    and driving off.)

    Fade in:
    (Moving crane shot of
    Hummer driving along
    the road.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of Horatio inside
    the Hummer.)

    Short time jump to:
    (A condo.
    Long shot of front
    lawn.)

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio pulling
    up.
    There is a pause as
    he looks toward the
    house.
    Close-up of his face.
    He sighs, nodding
    to himself.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of driver's door
    opening, and Horatio
    getting out.
    Camera follows him
    up the path to the house.)

    Cut to:
    (Shot of front door,
    panning slowly backwards.
    Horatio reaches the door.
    Profile shot of him, as he
    stares at the doorbell.

    Close-up of his eyes.)

    Cut to:
    (Shot of his hand lifting.
    He rings the doorbell, and
    waits.
    He steps back a little, hands
    on his hips, eyes on the ground.)

    CUT TO:
    (Interior shot of the door.
    Person walking to the door,
    and opening it to see Horatio.

    Camera focuses on Horatio
    from the person's point of view.

    Horatio looks up.
    Slight pause.)

    HORTIO: Hey, there...

    (Slight beat, as camera slowly
    pans to Horatio's pint of view.
    It's Calleigh.)

    CALLEIGH: Hi...

    (Another pause.)

    Cut to:
    (Horatio shifting slightly.)

    Cut back to:
    (Calleigh pursing her lips,
    her eyes avoiding him.)

    BOTH: So...

    (They laugh.
    Some tension is dispelled.)

    CALLEIGH: You first...

    (Horatio ducks his head,
    hesitating slightly.)

    HORATIO: Umm... I'm
    sorry to intrude on your
    free-time but umm... I
    was...
    (Beat.)

    CALLEIGH: ... in the
    neighbourhood?

    (Horatio chuckles.)

    HORATIO: Yeah... and I...
    just came to see how you are...
    not just as your boss,
    umm...

    (Calleigh smiles.)
    CALLEIGH: Thank you, Horatio.
    I'm fine, really. I'm glad you care.

    (Horatio looks up, staring
    into her eyes.)

    HORATIO: I always have
    cared about you, Calleigh...
    and I always will...

    CUT TO:
    (Calleigh staring at him,
    a question in her eyes.
    Horatio looks ready to kick
    himself.)

    HORATIO: Umm, okay, uh...
    I'll leave you to it... glad you're
    okay... sorry I disturbed you...

    (He turns to leave.)

    CALLEIGH: Wait!

    Cut to:
    (Shot of him as he stops.
    Camera focuses in on him,
    Calleigh just behind him.
    She plays with her hands
    as she speaks.)

    CALLEIGH: I... I've made some
    dinner... and it's kinda big for
    one person...

    Cut to:
    (Horatio turning around.)

    HORATIO: I don't want to
    intrude...

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh smiling.)
    CALLEIGH: You're not... I'm
    inviting you in. This way,
    neither of us will have to eat
    alone...

    Cut to:
    (Horatio smiling and nodding,
    agreeing with her.)
    HORATIO: Yeah...

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh looking at him.
    He looks up, and they share
    a long, meaningful look.)

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh stepping to one side,
    and gesturing inside.)

    CALLEIGH: Come on in,
    Handsome.

    (Horatio chuckles again, only
    pausing a moment, before
    stepping in the door.

    Front shot of the door as
    Horatio steps in.
    Calleigh closes it slowly,
    and camera focuses in on
    their shadows behind the
    glass.)

    (Calleigh touches Horatio's
    shoulder, and Horatio takes off
    his jacket.
    Calleigh helps him out of it.)

    (Close-up of her holding
    his jacket.
    Slow-motion as he take her
    hand.
    His jacket falls to the ground.)

    (Various dissolves in and
    out of the shot as they
    face each other, holding hands.)

    (Slow-motion as they hug.
    They part slightly, their
    shadows only inches
    apart.)

    (They turn, and go further
    inside, away from the door.
    The light goes off.

    Camera moves away
    from the door.)

    (FADE TO BLACK.)

    Just a quick note: some of my future scenes may not go in chronological order with this one, but I will do my best to make a decent storyline out of this. Most of them will be kind of one-off's, but I will try to keep some order to them.

    Tell me what you think... more coming soon!!

    See ya!!
    :)
     
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    Please continue soon!
     
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    Can't wait for more girl!!
     
  8. EmeraldEyes06

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    Hello!! :) Waiting's over for this installment! I hope it's not too much of a dive, I really like it, and I know for a fact, that something like this will NEVER happen on CSI: Miami! :rolleyes: :p But in CSI: DuCaine, anything's possible!! :D Lyrics are copyright of Shivaree. The song is called "Goodnight Moon".

    A stint in the Everglades has left a distinct impression on Calleigh... namely mud and grime!

    CALLEIGH: The worst crime-scene ever!!
    I'll never get this gunk outta my hair!!

    HORATIO: Perserverance pays in the
    end... and patience is a virtue.

    CALLEIGH: Easy for you to say!
    You stood on the bank!

    HORATIO: (chuckles.)

    A bit of dialogue from earlier on. Here's the scene now.
    Here we go!!:

    [INT - CRIMELAB - EVENING]

    FADE IN TO:
    (Locker-room.)

    (Various dissloves of
    Calleigh walking about,
    taking clothes out of
    her locker, taking out
    her shower gel.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of her tying up
    her hair.
    Camera follows her
    to a shower stall.
    She goes in and
    closes the door.)

    (Camera pans backwards
    as her clothes are hung
    on the door.
    Camera focuses in for
    a second...
    Cue running water.

    Camera pans backwards
    from shower, back to main
    locker-room.)

    Cut to:
    (Shot of door opening,
    and Horatio coming in.)

    (He goes to his locker,
    and takes out a clean shirt.
    He's about to unbutton his
    shirt, when he raises his
    head, listening.

    Close-up as he listens.
    He hears the sound of the
    water running.)

    (Camera follows him as he
    enters the shower-room.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of clothes over the door.)

    Cut back to:
    (Horatio looking at them for a
    moment.

    Camera zoom in as he
    recognises whose clothes they
    are!)

    (Horatio takes a step back,
    mouthing a very, very bad
    curse word.
    He is about to make a quick,
    stealthy exit, when he hears
    Calleigh's voice.
    He freezes...)

    (Calleigh starts to sing.)

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio in half-focus,
    then focus in on the door
    behind him.)

    CALLEIGH: (singing)
    There's a nail in the door
    And there's glass on the lawn
    Tacks on the floor
    And the TV is on
    And I always sleep with my guns
    When you're gone...


    (Horatio turns around slowly,
    a smile spreading across his face.
    Calleigh's still singing, as Horatio
    leans back against the wall of
    the shower-room, listening.)

    CALLEIGH:
    There's a blade by the bed
    And a phone in my hand
    A dog on the floor
    And some cash on the nightstand
    When I'm all alone the dreaming stops
    And I just can't stand

    What should I do?
    I'm just a little baby
    What if the lights go out
    And maybe and then the wind just starts to moan
    Outside the door
    He followed me home
    Now goodnight moon
    I want the sun
    If it's not here soon
    I might be done
    No it won't be too soon
    'Til I say
    Goodnight moon


    (She hums the riff of the song
    between verses.
    Horatio shuts his eyes at one point
    during the chorus,
    savouring the moment.)

    (Calleigh stops for a moment,
    as Horatio strains to hear.)

    Cut to:
    (The shower-stall door.
    focusingin on the door.

    Cut back to:
    Horatio as he hears Calleigh's
    audible sigh.)

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio giving a sigh as well.)

    CALLEIGH: (o.s) Who's there?

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio, as his eyes snap open.
    He curses silently.
    He tries to tip-toe away.

    The water stops.)

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio sneaking away, and
    he nearly walks into a locker.
    He turns back slightly, looking
    back to the shower-room.)

    Cut back to:
    (Horatio turning towards the
    door, as he tip-toes away,
    quietly shutting the door.)

    CUT TO:
    (Horatio standing outside
    the locker-room,
    before he heads away,
    shaking his head and
    chuckling to himself.)

    CUT TO:
    (Locker-room.)

    (Calleigh emerges from the
    shower room, fully dressed,
    looking around.)

    CALLEIGH: Hmmm... I could've
    sworn... huh...

    (She walks out, taking another look
    around.
    She shrugs, and is about to leave,
    when something catches her eye.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of Horatio's locker-door,
    fully open.)

    (Calleigh walks over.)

    WHITE FLASH TO:
    (Before she had her shower, she
    walks by Horatio's locker,
    and we see that the door was
    fully closed.)

    (Calleigh pauses beside the locker
    door, and she looks down to see
    Horatio's shirt.)

    Cut to:
    (Close-up of her eyes, blinking
    rapidly.
    She then smiles secretly,
    biting her lip, and pulling on
    her damp hair in her ponytail.

    Cut to:
    (Shot of her picking up his
    shirt, folding it, and putting it back
    into his locker, shutting the door.
    Her stare lingers on the door
    door a second.

    Then she gives a small laugh, and
    turns to leave, still humming the
    song.)

    Short-time jump to:
    (Shot of Horatio's office.)

    (Pan back slowly to:
    Shot of Calleigh at the foot of
    the stairs.
    Long shot of her, zooming in.)

    CALLEIGH:(singing)
    Well, you're up so high
    How can you save me
    When the dark comes here
    Tonight to take me up
    The mouth from woke
    And into bed
    Where it kisses my face
    And eats my hand...


    That was for you, Handsome...
    I won't forget this...
    (whispers) This is our little secret...

    (She grins, before turning and
    walking away.
    Camera follows her briefly.)

    Cut to:
    (Front shot of Calleigh walking
    out of the lab, and focus back
    on Horatio's office.)

    Fade into:
    (Horatio's office, as he's writing
    up on some paperwork.
    He stops for a minute, leaning
    back.)

    CUT TO:
    (Shot of his pen tapping the page.
    It soon turns into a rhythm.)

    CUT TO:
    (Front shot of Horatio as he
    starts humming "Goodnight Moon".
    He laughs a little, nodding his head,
    before resuming his paper work,
    a smile on his face.)

    (FADE TO BLACK.)

    Hope you liked it. :)

    If anyone had any ideas, or would like to make requests for future scenes, I'm open to anything you think up. This is for all DuCaine fans, and I would like to see everyone have some creative input. You can PM me your ideas, or post them in this thread or the DuCaine ship thread.

    Thank you very much! More coming soon!
    :)
     
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    Please continue soon:)
     
  10. CSI_Trainee

    CSI_Trainee CSI Level One

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    Wow what great and intricate scenes you have written, you have a great talent and I think the writing team could use someone like you. Your scenes are so full of passion and feeling that it makes me feel as though I am there watching from the side lines or the veiws in which you exspress certain shots. Once again I say you have a great talent and I can't wait to see more of what you write!
     
  11. HoratioCainesGirl

    HoratioCainesGirl Police Officer

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    Please keep it up! I want to read more.... :)
     
  12. Bullet_Girl

    Bullet_Girl Coroner

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    Whoot! that's brilliant! :)Still a bazillion times better than anything I could do :D
     
  13. EmeraldEyes06

    EmeraldEyes06 Lab Technician

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    Oh, wow! :D Thank you all very much!! I'm so glad you enjoy my work. These scenes are the the product of shipping frustration and love for Horatio and Calleigh's relationship. I want to see them in something that can make an impact on someone; something beautiful that is really memorable. I see I've achieved just that! :) Thanks again for your lovely comments! Another scene is coming up!!
     
  14. athens

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    That was really nice..You do a great work:D..Write more soon!
     
  15. EmeraldEyes06

    EmeraldEyes06 Lab Technician

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    Here we go!! Enjoy this one, I really loved writing it!! :D Something that I owuld love to see, and should be shown in the future!! :)

    [INT - CRIMELAB - NIGHT]

    Fade into:
    (Calleigh working on paperwork
    in the lab.)

    CUT TO;
    (Shot of pen writing away,
    after a second it's put down
    by Calleigh.
    She gives a sigh
    off-screen, and the camera moves
    up to her massaging her neck wearily.
    She makes one last note, before
    putting down the pen.

    She picks up the report, and walks out
    of the lab.)

    (The camera follows her as she heads
    through the hallways.

    Fading in and out are shots of Calleigh's
    face, her feet walking, and the report
    in her hand.)

    CUT TO:
    (Wide shot of the stairs leading to
    Horatio's office.

    Camera zooms in on the steps.)

    Cut to:
    (Shot of Calleigh walking up the
    stairs.
    Shot cuts from behind her, to
    beside her, and to in front of her.

    Camera shot of door, zooming out.)

    (Calleigh approaches the door.
    There's no light on.

    Camera focuses in on Calleigh at
    the door, shot from behind.)

    (Calleigh quietly opens the door,
    assuming Horatio's gone, but as she
    takes a step inside, she gives a gasp, and
    backs out slightly.

    Interior shot of the door slightly open.
    Calleigh peeks her head.)

    Cut to:
    (Camera panning along the wall of
    Horatio's office, towards the desk.

    We see that Horatio has his head down...
    fast asleep.)

    Cut to:
    (Shot of Calleigh still looking in from
    the door, blinking rapidly,

    A pause, before Calleigh steps inside
    the door, turning slightly to shut it
    behind her.

    Camera cuts to shot behind her as she
    looks at Horatio.)

    Cut to:
    (Front shot of Calleigh as she steps forward,
    quietly, her breathing a bit quicker now.)

    Cut to:
    (Shot of Horatio sleeping.

    Calleigh reaches the desk, on
    Horatio's right side.)

    Cut to:
    (Shot of Calleigh as she stares at him
    asleep.
    She stands beside him, her hands clasped
    to her chest.
    Her eyes flit back and forth over him.

    Horatio gives a sleepy moan, Calleigh
    gets ready to bolt.

    He doesn't wake up.
    Calleigh breathes a sigh of relief.)

    (Camera follows her as she moves a bit closer,
    leaning over him still.
    Taking another breath, she reaches out,
    and slowly removed the pile of case folders
    he was leaning on, and rearranging his arms,
    so his head is resting on them.)

    Calleigh: Hope you don't mind. You looked
    uncomfortable.

    (A small snore is her only reply.)

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh giggling, but she puts her hand over
    her mouth.)

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh walking around to the front of the
    desk.
    She kneels down, folding her arms, and resting
    her chin on her forearms.)

    Cut to:
    (Wide shot of Calleigh watching Horatio.)

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh closing her eyes, smiling.)

    Calleigh: I remember when I fell asleep
    in the lab... you watched over me.

    Cut to:
    (Horatio moving a little, as he turns his head
    the other way.)

    Calleigh: Time I returned the favour...

    (A pause as she sighs.)
    Oh, Horatio...

    Cut to:
    (Shot of her hand reaching across the desk
    slightly.
    Camera shot of her hand moving towards him.)

    Calleigh: So near... and yet so far...

    (After a few minutes, Calleigh's eyes nearly
    fall closed too.

    She gets up.
    Camera pans to the right following her.

    She kneels right next to Horatio.)

    Cut to:
    (Front shot of them.
    Calleigh lightly puts her hand on his shoulder.)

    Calleigh: No matter what, Horatio, I'll always
    be here for you. I'll never give up on you...
    You... you are my life...
    (She looks down for a momnet.)
    I will tell you someday how I feel... but
    until then... in my dreams, I belong to you.
    (A beat.)

    (Camera pans in on them, as Calleigh leans
    in and kisses the top of Horatio's head.
    He mumbles quietly.)

    Cu to:
    (Wide shot of them.)

    Cut to:
    (Close-up of them, as Calleigh lifts her head
    away from him.)

    Calleigh: Sleep well, Horatio.

    (She gets up quietly, tip-toeing away.

    Taking one last look over her shoulder, she's
    about to leave when she hears his voice.
    She freezes.)

    Horatio: Cal... Calleigh?

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh slowly turning around.)

    Cut to:
    (Horatio sitting up, stretching slightly, giving
    a small yawn.)

    Horatio: Calleigh? When...
    Calleigh: I'm really sorry I woke you.
    Horatio: No, you didn't, it's okay...

    (He looks at his watch. His eyes widen
    in alarm.)

    Horatio: I've been asleep... oh God.
    (He looks to Calleigh.)
    Calleigh, I don't know what happened.

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh walking towards him.)

    Calleigh: Everyone needs rest sometimes...
    even you, Horatio Caine.

    Cut to:
    (Horatio chuckling.

    Calleigh sits on the desk on his right.)

    Calleigh:(hesistating) Um... how'd you
    know I was here?

    (Horatio looks up in surprise, but quickly
    ducks his head again.)

    Horatio: Umm... this'll sound strange but...
    uh... I recognised your perfume.

    (Calleigh bites her lip shyly, tucking her
    hair behind her ears.)

    Calleigh: Did you now?
    Horatio: Yes... I did

    (They laugh.)

    Camera focuses in on Calleigh,
    who then turns concerned.)

    Calleigh: Horatio, are you okay now?
    You ought to rest...

    (Horatio nods.)
    Horatio: I'm fine now... just needed to
    rest my eyes. I won't be much longer.

    (Calleigh nods, though still a little
    unconvinced.)

    Horatio: Really, it's okay!

    (Calleigh smiles.)

    Calleigh: Okay... just promise me that
    I won't find you crashing here in the
    morning...
    Horatio: I promise...

    Calleigh: You really promise?
    Horatio: I really promise.

    Calleigh: Cross your heart?
    Horatio:(crosses his heart)
    Cross my heart.

    Calleigh: Hope to die?
    (Horatio pauses.)
    Horatio: Well... that's kinda literal in this job...

    (Calleigh laughs.)

    Alright... hope to die.

    Calleigh: Stick a ballpoint in your eye?
    (Horatio grins.)
    Horatio: Stick a ballpoint in my eye... ow!!

    (They laugh again.)

    Calleigh: I'm finished here, I left my report
    here...
    (She points to the "IN" tray.)
    So I'm turning in. See you in the morning,
    Horatio.

    Horatio: Night, Calleigh.

    (Camera follows her as
    she walks to the door.
    She lifts her shoulders, and turns back
    to look at him over her shoulder.)

    Calleigh: What do you want in your coffee?

    Cut to:
    (Horatio smiling charmingly, dipping his head.)

    Horatio: Sugar?

    Cut to:
    (Calleigh laughing, giving one last look before
    leaving.)

    Cut to:
    (Horatio smiling, dipping his head
    He begins to write, a smile still on his face.)

    (FADE TO BLACK.)

    More surprises to come yet!!
    :)
     

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