Nick Song Fic Ch #8 - "Angel"- Now up!

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If Today - Aww... I liked the bonding between Nick and Sara. And the mention of the Cassie case was nice. :) Why couldn't we have had a moment like this on the show?

Each Day is a Gift- I love how concerned Nick is for the little boy and how he wants to help him... and the line about the image of the little boy breaking Nick's heart was well placed. Aww... the last thing the little boy said at the crime scene was heart breaking. Poor little guy. Nick's such a caring guy though and you could tell there was an instant bond there there the minute Nick introduced himself to the boy. Auntie Cat- cute. :D And Greg doing magic tricks, nice touch. Loved Jillian and Cath's conversation.

Rain- Agree with Princess on this one. Nick, why didn't you move out of the way! And yeah, if he survived, I could see Cath smacking him upside the head (once he was healed enough) for not moving out of the way. Love the thoughts he had though about his past.

The First Day - Man the Dallas Captain was a major jerkface. :lol: I loved the idea for this fic... seeing the first time Nick and Warrick met. I love that Nick said he was there for all of the victims. I miss Nick and Warrick's friendship.

Great stories, everyone. So sorry that I wasn't able to get one in for this challenge. I tried several different things and nothing would come together for me.

Once again, Egeria, the site looks great! :)
 
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My reviews....

If Today - A good example of a conversation that probably should have happened on the show. I like the different connections that they share that might not be obvious to anyone but them.

Each Day is a Gift - Very sweet story! You describe well the scene and how Nick feels about it. It is easy to imagine that he would not be able to let the little boy go.

Rain -Very descriptive...I can imagine the scene very well. I like the memories chosen for Nick's moment. Very effective way of showing how things can go from normal to crazy in just a second. A good lesson to learn!

The First Day
-Juneeta! :lol: Nice detail. I love this as a way of showing how Nick and Warrick met. I like to think that's how it went down. Nice job!
 
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If Today: This is another great example of something I wish we'd seen on the show. This is a very likely event to have taken place between the two... Something I would imagine Nick would wait quietly for Sara to approach him about, as you portrayed, just because that's how Nick is. I liked his encouraging words, even as he tells her the nightmares aren't going away any time soon. Bad news, but he delivers it with sensitivity. Great characterization. Good work!

Each Day is a Gift: Heartbreaking but sweet story. Very typical of Nick to want to help at the crime scene, although I'm sure he didn't know what he was getting himself into. I love that everyone was there for him, and at the end I liked Jillian's line about how big Nick's heart is - mostly 'cuz that's true! Nice job!

Rain: Wow - what a concept for a story. It's great because it's so descriptive and detailed in its way but takes place within a span of a second. I like that what he remembered most were happy moments, his triumphs and joys, and although he did recall his mistakes and tragedies it was briefly - because he'd moved on. Very Nick. You can't even get mad that you left us hanging on whether Nick lives or dies because the story does its job very well - takes us to that moment with Nick and lets us know that either way, Nick will be at peace. Well done!

The First Day: It's a neat story to tell, Nick 'n' Rick meeting for the first time. I like how Nick handled Captain Fischer and I liked Juneeta :) I also liked that Nick's first impressions of the Las Vegas lab weren't delivered by Grissom... probably would've scared him off ;)
 
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Might as well go ahead and reveal. :)

If Today - Smokey

Each Day is a Gift - Speedy

Rain - Egeria

The First Day - Jacqui
 
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Might as well go ahead and reveal. :)

If Today - Smokey

Each Day is a Gift - Speedy

Rain - Egeria

The First Day - Jacqui

Geesh, do you give anyone time to review? :) For someone who is on vacation, you sure are impatient. :lol:
 
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Might as well go ahead and reveal. :)

If Today - Smokey

Each Day is a Gift - Speedy

Rain - Egeria

The First Day - Jacqui

Geesh, do you give anyone time to review? :) For someone who is on vacation, you sure are impatient. :lol:

Mom!!! what did you do??? I wanted to review them and then reveal proudly who I think wrote them :( And you couldn't wait any longer... I thought you would be on vacation and watching sea lions all day???

You should never say that I'm impatient again... :)

But I guessed who wrote what right :p And I'll review anyway :D This afternoon after work.
 
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Wellll....since there had been no activity on the thread for three days...I figured I would lure you all back. :p

The story behind my story...just something that I'm sure probably happened in some way, even if they didn't show it. It was kind of short...not really involved...I wish I had done a better job on it, but then again, maybe that's how it really happened...short...not really involved. :)
 
Re: Nick Fic Song Ch #6 - "If Today Was Your Last Day"- Stories Up!

Wellll....since there had been no activity on the thread for three days...I figured I would lure you all back. :p

The story behind my story...just something that I'm sure probably happened in some way, even if they didn't show it. It was kind of short...not really involved...I wish I had done a better job on it, but then again, maybe that's how it really happened...short...not really involved. :)

Can't wait there Mom, can you??? ;)

Here are my reviews :)

If Today:

Well, Mom, I knew it was yours (not only because you revealed it already) because of your ability to show support and that people care for each other through their hands :) It may sound stupid but for me it is a special little detail of your stories. Hands really show emotions and you write that always so well.

Your story may not be that involved but in my opinion that’s what makes this story special. I think that a conversation like that happened in some way, it’s only logic. They both had to deal with a horrifying event and both came out alive and have to deal with all the changes.

I liked the way you wrote it because of the way you wrote the conversation. To me a talk between the two always seemed a little uneasy and unsure… and somehow one or the other was always nervous during their conversation. It’s not like Nick with Cath or Sara with Greg… it’s different. And I think you portrayed that very well in your story.

You know I could kick my but for not simply writing a story and publish it… now more then before because you said you aren’t fully happy with the way it turned out and anyway you published it… that takes guts. But you really did the right thing with going with it because it’s a very good story :)

Each Day is a Gift:

Speedy that was lovely :) And it just reminded me on how much I love seeing Nick with children.

It was a typical Speedy-Story, if you know what I mean ;) I don’t even know how to really describe it… it has just your writing style. It is kind of straight to the point, with not much beating about the bush. It’s like you know always exactly where you want to go with what you tell us.

It was a great happy story, even though there is a serious topic behind it. It fits together very well and you stayed absolutely in character. This is what Nick would do :)

Just a question… When are you going to finally publish any of your songfics??? I mean they were all good… and I don’t see why you shouldn’t.

Just a little criticism… you should ask someone to beta read for you… it’s just sad when there are mistakes in a lovely piece like that… You know Smokey is a great beta reader, I can tell ;)
 
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So, I have to confess to cheating a bit here. This is actually a piece of a larger story that I am working on. That’s not to say that this wasn’t inspired by the song, it was just inspired in a round-about way.

Thinking about the lyrics of the song, it did occur to me to write a piece about how Nick forgives McKeen for killing Warrick. But while I can see Nick forgiving other trespasses, usually sooner than others might, I couldn’t see this one. I think at this point, Nick would be quite happy to hate McKeen for the rest of his life. I’m just not seeing that, not yet.

I kept coming back to the “last day” part but couldn’t kill Nick and couldn’t come up with anything else. There’s a lyric in the song about making your mark and I thought about how usually people make their marks – their impressions on other people – on the first day. Which brought me back to the piece I’m writing, and I think I’ve complained to others that I was struggling with the part where Nick and Warrick meet for the first time.

As a side note, I’m wondering if – in general terms, not this specific challenge – our song selection isn’t part of the low participation we’ve had lately? A lot of the songs have been really heavy subject matter and we’ve had great fics come of them but I wonder if a more upbeat kind of song would maybe be refreshing? What do you guys think?
 
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As a side note, I’m wondering if – in general terms, not this specific challenge – our song selection isn’t part of the low participation we’ve had lately? A lot of the songs have been really heavy subject matter and we’ve had great fics come of them but I wonder if a more upbeat kind of song would maybe be refreshing? What do you guys think?

Nice idea Jacqui :) I don't know why it is like it is at the moment but I can tell why I couldn't write for this challenge, even though it was my song choice. It was the song I wanted to write my first fanfic with and ended up being part of this challenge. I really wanted to write about this song, it is just that I really changed in the way I see my own writing and that might have been the problem here. I always try to write my story with using the whole song idea and not just a part or a phrase of it.

This song really means a lot to me and I just couldn't get what I wanted to say in a fic... there was no idea for a fic but usually there never is in my case... I write my fics with the thoughts I get from the song and try not to write the song idea in a fic I have already in my head. Somehow I think that I just couldn't get it all fitting well together. I tried really hard but needed to give up at the end.

It would be great to have something different from time to time... maybe a lighter song would help there... but I'm not quiete sure. Everyone of us has a different way to listen to a song or to read it. I guess the problem was just that maybe in the last themes people just couldn't identify with the song.

We should try it though... but I can't tell if it would be easier for me to write a fic jsut because the song is a happy one... that always depends on how we 'read' the song.


So my last two reviews...

Rain:

Well E. that was the kind of fic I would have liked to get on paper. You included the whole song idea in your fic and that was really impressive. You know I admire your sense for details but this time you could really bring your talent in the story because you needed to describe a few seconds. In fact you wrote your whole story about a few seconds and yet over so much more.

You really dealt with the the question "Could you say Good Bye to yesterday if today was your last day?" That was just great.

I liked how you let Nick see his whole life again in the few seconds and your conclusion was great as well. No matter how many bad things Nick has been through, there were also great moments, that he enjoyed to live for. And that you let those happy moments, which made Nick like he is win at the end gave the story a very positive ending, even we don't know wheter Nick would live or die.

And in fact it is like you said in your story. It doesn't really matter. He lived his life and got through good and bad times and has no need to change a single part of it.

A great story, well done :thumbsup:

The First Day:

What I like on your story, Jacqui, is the fact that you dealt not with Nick's last day in your story but with his first day in the LV crime lab. That was an interesting interpretaion of the song.

You know, your stories always make me thoughtful. You always give so tiny little hints and details in your story and I often read your stories twice to make sure I really get what you try to say. It's not that it is difficult written, it's just that you know how to wrap up information in your writing.

I like your character detail... how you let Nick say that he was in Vegas for all the six dead people, even though the Dallas PD only sent him for two of them. You didn't make a fuss about it in your story but you clearly showed us what kind of person Nick is.

I've great respect for your way with words, I wish I could write that clearly and yet so well phrased. That's a gift and you use it well :)
 
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An upbeat song? For Nick?? :lol: Novel idea! Get it??? Novel???? :D

I guess a lot of people just think of angsty Nick when the think of what song reminds them of him. But you guys are in charge of the song submissions, so send in whatever you want. :)

I'm keeping a list of everyone's choices, so feel free to update whenever you want and I'll put your new choice on the list. Please remember tho, we are going to give everyone in the challenge a chance to submit a song before we start the rotation over again. So far we still have me, Speedy, Egeria, Nicksfriend, Fieldmouse, and Bookgirl on the list to be chosen, assuming all of them still want to do it. :)
 
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An upbeat song? For Nick?? :lol: Novel idea! Get it??? Novel???? :D

:wtf::wtf: Funny gal, aren't ya? :lol:

Ok, here's my reviews! Finally!

If Today: That was a sweet story. I really think that Sara needed that. It helps when you see that you're not alone. Lord knows, Nick is right, Grissom would just had said "so it's over". No Grissom, it will never be over. At least Sara has someone to talk to about it and now Nick does to. You need that in your life. Great job.

Rain: Ummm, what the hell happened? :wtf: Did the SUV hit him? Did he live? Did he die? Damn, I hate endings like that. :p This was great. :) I haven't read a story like this with Nick. I love how you captured all his moments at CSI. I love the repetition of him documenting the shards of glass. Your description of him with Kristy, very nice. :devil: You can imagine this all happening in slow motion and seeing Mitch and Greg trying to do something. A lot people say when they are in an accident it's like everything slowed down. You captured that here. Great story! I loved the suspense, especially because it came out of nowhere. Very nicely done! Now continue it so I know what happened. Geesh. :rolleyes: :lol:

The First Day: Oh sure, another story that just stops! :wtf: Y'all killing me here. I like this view of Nick's life in Dallas and a plausible reason how he joined the Vegas lab. You're going to finish this, right? You know something? I think this case will lead to a beautiful friendship between Nick and Warrick. :thumbsup: I don't know how I know, but I just do. :D Me likes the story.

Each Day Is A Gift: That's my story, so I won't review. Where did the idea come from? Always wanted to do some kind of Nick adopting and when I read the lyrics of this song, I thought it would work. Sorry for all the mistakes in the story. I did a deeper grammar check and, apparently, that doesn't work either. I give up. I'll have to check with my beta to see what mistakes there are. Jacqui loves to put all that 'red' on my stories when I send them to her. :guffaw:

Oh by the way, GNRF, I put Greg doing magic tricks in there just for you! :thumbsup:

Now I'm going to go back and read all the other reviews and inspirations for the stories.
 
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Oh by the way, GNRF, I put Greg doing magic tricks in there just for you! :thumbsup:

:D Thanks! :D I can really picture him doing that too. Reminds me of silly labRat Greg. :lol:
 
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Hello? Hello? Anyone here, here, here, here, here?

Man, there's an echo in here, here, here, here! :lol:

HELLO? HELLO? HELLO?
 
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I'm the worst person on the planet. I'm so sorry it took this long to review.

If Today:

I've always liked Nick and Sara scenes, there's some great chemistry there. They're such great friends and I love how this story reflect its. The writing was amazing.

Each Day Is a Gift:

Awww..so sweet to see Nick with kids. The man was born to be a father. The little boy touched my heart. Wonderful story.

Rain:

Holy smokes that was something! The ending was breathtaking. The description of his life (especially with Kristy) was gritty. Wow!

The First Day

Hey! How Nick came to be in Vegas. Woe! Love the first meeting with Warrick. Excellent job.

Sorry these are short and sweet. And I hadn't read who wrote these but I'm impressed. I will say I wasn't surprised Egeria wrote Rain, though.

Jacqui, I agree. A nice upbeat song would be cool. I think we should submit some fresh songs. But that's just my humble opinion.
 
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