Re: Nick Fic Song Challenge Thread #2 First of all thank you, Smokey for creating the site :thumbsup: I must have cost you a lot of time and nerves, just so we have a place where we can read our stories. Thank you And now to the reviews... It’s Beginning to Look a Lot Like Murder: :guffaw: This one is just too funny for words. I love it The whole concept is great, as are the descriptions of the people and toys in your fic But what I like the most are the tiny little ‘moments’ in your fic, for example the part where Nick told Jack The Ripper in the box to get on the ground, while nudging the box with his feet so it fell down :lol: or when the elephant described Charlie in the box and says that his friend is 6 feet tall when he is closed or how Santa talked about Jim and Nick as they were little boys… You really used the song idea in your fic… that’s very impressive. This story was unbelievable funny and very well done, in every aspect. It is definitely the funniest thing I’ve ever read in English. You know I never watched ‘Rudolph the Red Nosed Reindeer’ before but with the help of your descriptions I could see the Misfit Toys all in my mind and if I could choose one, I would choose the Elephant :lol: A Visit From St. Nicholas: Wow A poem!!! That’s really impressive… I have great respect for you for trying that Even though I need to say that I always thought that if someone would ever write a poem for a challenge (since it is definitely allowed to write one), it would be you. Why??? Because you have a very good way with words and because you know your way in English grammar. That was really amazing and funny too For me as no English native it was very hard to read in a few parts but I read it again and again and finally got it all. This has nothing to do with you or the way you wrote your poem but with my lack of vocabulary This isn’t just a poem, it is a story too, or at least it tells a story I can’t even write poems in German so I have even more respect for you. Great work, really Reindeer Games: April??? Mrs. Clause??? Funny :lol: How did you get this idea??? I like how you used the song in your fic. You were able to write something completely serious with it… okay maybe not that serious :lol: But you worked with the song idea, so it would fit your story. That’s cool The Reindeer statue instead of the Reindeer, young April instead of grandma… funny :lol: You work a lot with personal speech in your stories, so they’re always easy to read and one can follow them pretty well. What I miss a little are descriptions… of the environment (for example smells, look of the countryside, etc.) and the people you bring into your story. We all know how the CSI’s look like but I would like to know the people better you introduce to us in your stories. You have got a picture of them in your head when you write about them in your stories but your readers haven’t. That’s why I would like to know more about a person YOU write into your story Just a suggestion though This story was very nice to read and the story flow was good. You have a way to keep your readers entertained with simple things, keep up the good work :thumbsup: This Time of the Year: Awww gotta love a family story It’s very interesting how the Americans spend Christmas, since there are a few differences between the US and Germany in that area… The ugly gnome, huh??? I remember that I carved my aunt a wooden angel at age 8 or so… she still has it I guess that’s what your parents do, because it’s very special for them. It’s not the figure that is special. Special is that the child meant it well and wanted to make his/her parents happy with it. And well, I can tell… my wooden angel wasn’t really an angel though :lol: I think I forgot the wings… but well my aunt still loves it Nice idea to write a story about something like that.