Road Trip - CSI:Miami - "Crazy Eights"

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  1. saraholic

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    no....no....NOOOOOOO!!! I'm bad again!!! :( What am I doing? I'm kidnapping cutie Alena, killing Jess AKA the one I loved, leaving Calleigh open for Ryan, destroying my friendships with everyone. Wow....I did a lot of damage. :(

    Update Soon...I guess. :(
     
  2. carlz31

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    Aww, thanks Jessie. And haha yeah...that was my first thought when it said that the kids had left *looks around...whistles* Hehe :p


    Awww, poor Alena :( And poor jessie. And I have to say, poor Colton aswell. I mean, I guess I shouldn't, but we went to these lectures the other day, basically about this. How a prisoner can barely function in society unless there is a strong support around them, because they usually come out worse than went they went in. And I guess thats what kinda happened here. I mean, while Colton did have strong support, everyone still kinda gave up on him - "once a criminal, always a criminal" and such. Oh well, I guess it's a little too late for an over-analysis *looks away sheepishly*

    But still, poor Delko family...I guess they were...ok, I actually don't know why he went after them, but I'm sure he had some sort of reason...or maybe he didn't, I really have no idea.

    Ok, I'm done analysing now ;) Please update soon!


    EDIT: ok, I obviosuly didn't get that the chapter was edited *nevrous laugh* Heh, well, I guess my review doesn't make much sense now...oh well. Yay for Colton being good again! *huggles Cotlton*
     
  3. Anni Grey

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    Cool update! My great lord, the Delko family is trying to tie first place with tradgey with the Speedles. And what of Horatio? Did he escape from the bomb? I mean, really, what would this be with out him? Loved how you brought his bomb expertise into it, and Jess' subsequent unbelief that he could pull it off. I was laughing so hard at that. Great as always!

    But, I feel as if I missed something.... What is the Cuba thing?
     
  4. Finch

    Finch Funnier in Enochian Super Moderator

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    Just to let y'all know, I edited the recent chapter to accomodate a different version of events. Bad!Colton was taken out. ;) - For those who caught it last night.

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    Trace Lab, next day

    Calleigh: *walks in* Horatio's missing.

    Speed: I know. I've been analysing the bomb debris.

    Calleigh: He wasn't even in the room when the bombs went off.

    Speed: There was a pair of latex gloves burned into the floor so he was in there. I think something else is going on.

    Calleigh: Like what?

    Speed: Jess was in there with a bomb. Horatio defuses the bomb, she gets up and walks away. Then the whole room blows up while H is still behind. He wanted to make it seem like he blew himself to smitherenes.

    Calleigh: Why?

    Stetler: *walks in* What are we working on here?

    Speed: Nothing.

    Stetler: You two were discussing a case.

    Speed: That's what we do, we work here.

    Stetler: Then you were talking about a case.

    Speed: Not anything you need to get your tighty whities in a bunch about.

    Stetler: *frowns*

    Calleigh: Agent Stetler you will know our results on Horatio Caine's case as soon as we know.

    Stetler: Thank you Detective. I'll see you both later. *leaves*

    Calleigh: Tim if you give him something he'll leave you alone.

    Speed: I don't like him.

    Calleigh: I don't know anyone who does. *sigh* So how are things with you?

    Speed: Fine.

    Calleigh: You're still going to therapy?

    Speed: ...Does everyone know?

    Calleigh: Not everyone. So are you still going?

    Speed: Yeah.

    Calleigh: Oh good. How are things with it?

    Speed: Just fine.

    Calleigh: Really?

    Speed: Yeah.

    Calleigh: Good.

    Speed: *nods*

    Horatio: *walks in*

    Speed: *lifts head*

    Calleigh: *turns around*

    Horatio: Okay Stetler's busy for a while. I need to get his accounts.

    Calleigh: ...You're alright?

    Horatio: I am.

    Speed: I'm...Confused. None of this is making sense.

    Horatio: Here's the information at hand. I have reason to believe agent Stetler stole the cocaine out of evidence. I've been checking up on him for a while and he's been seen downtown distributing some of the substance. He planted Colton's fingerprints to throw suspicion off of himself and I made sure he was there when I 'interrogated' Colton.

    Speed: Why?

    Horatio: So he wouldn't know we were onto him. Then I had Jess touch the boxes so it made it seem like Colton had motive. I sent Eric to get the evidence but he took off his gloves. That wasn't part of the plan but he hasn't screwed up in a while.

    Calleigh: So why was Alena's hair found in the box?

    Horatio: I don't know and I have no idea who dropped it there but Colton grabbed her from PD while Eric was being questioned by IAB.

    Speed: So what's with Cuba?

    Horatio: I checked into Stetler's credit card information and it appears he has one flight out to Cuba this afternoon. I also checked his bank account and he has a substantial amount of money that was deposited two days ago.

    Calleigh: Money from the cocaine. You think he's working with those corrupt feds?

    Horatio: Here's what we're going to do. You both are going to distract Stetler today while Colton and Eric get to Cuba. I don't want Rick getting on a plane until they get there.

    Calleigh: You got it.

    Horatio: I'm heading out as well so make him believe I died in the explosion.

    Calleigh: Okay.

    Horatio: *leaves*

    Speed: ....I'm still confused.

    Calleigh: It's okay Tim.

    Ryan: *walks in* Hey is there something up? Because the holding cell is blown away.

    Speed: I'm just as confused.

    Calleigh: Horatio's got it all worked out. It might not make sense right now but it'll all work out in the end.

    Ryan: So...It's not Colton?

    Calleigh: No.

    Ryan: Damn.

    Calleigh: You know, Ryan some people can change.

    Ryan: I know I did.

    Calleigh: See? Then Colton isn't so bad.

    Speed: I'm still confused.

    TBC.............
     
  5. Still_RIP_Speed

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    awwwwwwwwww Bless you speed *pats head* it is alittle confusing....but what an awesome update-i always knew Stelter was dodgy....

    love the tension and comedy...
    Update soon Geni :D
     
  6. calleighspeedle

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    update soon Geni.
     
  7. Hunter

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    *grabs chest* Oh thank God Horatio is alive...

    Yes, they're going to get Stetler!! (Does this mean they can shoot him? Like in the line of duty? :D :D )

    Sweet updates Geni!! Can't wait!
     
  8. cainesugar

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    Man are you lucky you didn't kill him. I swear...gosh, glad he's okay. Thanks, Geni, I was so freaked out there. I love this whole plot, very interesting. Poor everyone, we didn't even get to see how wild they were in California. *sigh* Someday...

    Anyways, here's my real bad try for a Wubba Monster minus legs. I didn't have enough clay. :lol:

    http://i156.photobucket.com/albums/t32/cainesugar/IMG_3117.jpg
    And here's one with legs that really sucks worse. :lol: It does!
    http://i156.photobucket.com/albums/t32/cainesugar/IMG_3156.jpg

    Don't laugh. Okay, you can laugh a little bit.

    Thanks for the updates Geni. Very awesome. :D
     
  9. Finch

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    :lol: Lilly that is awesome. And don't worry, they'll all be back in California. :)

    *************

    Cuba, streets

    Colton: Okay Eric I don't mean to be the killjoy around here but I seem a little out of place and you blend in so well.

    Delko: Relax, Stetler's more pasty that you so he'll be easy to find.

    Colton: Great. So um...Why didn't we just arrest him? Why the whole sting operation?

    Delko: Because we could bring down the feds.

    Colton: What feds?

    Delko: *looking down at phone* We found out who he was dealing with. It's a small group of federal agents. We can't just go up to them and arrest them.

    Colton: So I framed Jess so you could protect her, to implicate yourself, so we'd get to Cuba to stop Stetler from...Selling the lab's cocaine to feds?

    Delko: Exactly.

    Colton: Didn't H say that Alena's hair was found in one of the boxes?

    Delko: Yeah.

    Colton: Well I had her so...Who was in contact with her? Because anyone could have been sitting with her.

    Delko: Where is she?

    Colton: She's in the truck.

    Delko: *walks back to truck* Alena.

    Alena: *looks up*

    Delko: *opens door, kneels* When you were at the police station yesterday, did anyone talk to you besides Colton?

    Alena: Yup.

    Delko: Who?

    Alena: A guy.

    Delko: What was his name?

    Alena: His name....Um....Ricky.

    Delko: *looks up at Colton*

    Colton: *pulls out gun*

    Delko: Alena, I need you crawl into the back seat and cover yourself with the blanket back there, okay?

    Alena: Okay. *stands, climbs over seat*

    Delko: Wait. Stop, come back here.

    Alena: *jumps back over seat*

    Delko: What's that in your pocket?

    Alena: *looks down at jeans*

    Delko: *reaches into pocket, pulls out device*

    Colton: What the hell is that?

    Delko: It's...A tracking device. Stetler put a tracking device in her...Jeans.

    Colton: He knows we're here.

    Delko: Who's playing whom?

    Colton: I think we're about to find out. *lifts hands*

    Delko: *stands, turns around*

    Stetler: *pointing gun at Eric* Nice job boys, you figured it out.

    Delko: We know what you've been doing.

    Stetler: You don't know the half of it. I knew you two were up to somethin'. You know, Horatio thinks I'm stupid and naive but I guess he has another thing comin'.

    Delko: What do you mean?

    Stetler: *snaps*

    Two men walk over to truck, grab Alena

    Alena: *screams*

    Delko: Let her go! Let her go!

    Colton: *pushes Eric back* Whoa man, take it easy.

    Delko: *frowns* If you hurt her, I-

    Stetler: You'll what.

    Delko: ...

    Stetler: I'm tired of Horatio and his precious team stickin' their heads were they don't belong. Especially you and your ex-con friend here.

    Colton: Hey. Let's not forget who's breaking the law.

    Stetler: Oh right because you're just a standup citizen aren't you? Who do you think they're going to believe? An ex-con, or a cop?

    Delko: You're no cop.

    Stetler: It's comments like that, that can make your life more difficult.

    Delko: What are you talking about?

    Stetler: *grabs phone, dials*

    Delko: *frowning*

    Stetler: *lifts phone*

    Voice: ERIC! HELP!

    Delko: Jess?

    Stetler: *snaps phone shut* I doubt Horatio can save her this time.

    Delko: You set up the other bombs around the room.

    Stetler: And I almost got your pretty wife and Horatio too. It's too bad he had one up on me and suspected that the idiot here made a mistake in checking the room after he placed his 'pressure plates' on the seat.

    Colton: *frowns*

    Stetler: It must kill y'all inside to know that I knew about the whole thing. Boys?

    Men shove Alena into back of black van

    Delko: Alena!

    Colton: *grabs Eric*

    Stetler: Oh and your wife has 12 hours to live. I wonder who you're going to save first. *jumps into van*

    Van drives away

    Delko: *pulls out gun, starts to shoot*

    Colton: Eric. Eric! They're gone.

    Delko: ...Why didn't we see this?

    Colton: I don't know. But we have to save Jess and Alena.

    Delko: How...I don't know where they're keeping Jess...

    Colton: I'll look for Jess, you go get Alena.

    Delko: Yeah.

    Colton: Call me in two hours.

    Delko: You got it.

    Miami, PD, two hours later

    Horatio: *flips page of files*

    Yelina: *walks over* No one's seen Jess in over three hours.

    Horatio: Mhm. I just recieved a call from Eric apparently Rick took the situation into his own hands after he found out what was going on.

    Yelina: He's a smart man.

    Horatio: That...That he is take a look at this.

    Yelina: What's this?

    Horatio: Stetler's phone records.

    Yelina: That looks like a county number.

    Horatio: It is, it is a county number. It's the Dade-County Woman's Correctional Facility.

    Yelina: Why would he be calling a prison?

    Horatio: Let's find out.

    Prison

    Man: *places book onto desk* Inmate logs, just like you requested.

    Horatio: Thank you sir. *takes off shades*

    Yelina: *looks around*

    Horatio: *flips pages*

    Yelina: You know I heard this place is transporting 4400 inmates over the next few days across town because ths facility is going to be renovated to house more people.

    Horatio: Hmm I heard about that.

    Yelina: The city counsellors weren't too happy about it, said it was potential breach of security.

    Horatio: *flips page* ...

    Yelina: You find something?

    Horatio: ...Take a look at that.

    Yelina: *leans over* Kayleigh Speedle.

    Horatio: *dialing phone* Kayleigh Speedle and look who's been visiting her for the past week.

    Yelina: Rick.

    Horatio: *lifts cellphone* ...Yeah Speed I need some information on an inmate.

    Crime Lab, Layout room

    Speed: *grabs laptop* Go ahead.

    Horatio: When is Kayleigh due to be released?

    Speed: *lifts head*

    Calleigh: *looks over*

    Speed: I'll look it up. *starts typing*

    Horatio: Thank you.

    Speed: ....Got it. She's due for her next hearing in October of 2008.

    Horatio: October...Okay. I want you to do something else for me, I want you to look up when she's going to be transported into the temporary facility.

    Speed: *typing*

    Calleigh: *walks over*

    Speed: It won't let me access it. You want me to crack it?

    Horatio: You know what, don't bother.

    Click

    Calleigh: What was that about?

    Speed: *turns around* Is this the map of the area that Eric and Colton drew out?

    Calleigh: Yeah.

    Prison, in front of cell

    Horatio: *shifts positions*

    Kayleigh: *smiles* Lieutenant.

    Horatio: Kayleigh.

    Kayleigh: *laughs* What brings you to my humble abode?

    Horatio: Evidence.

    Kayleigh: *grabs lighter* You want a cigarette?

    Horatio: No thank you.

    Kayleigh: Who's the lady?

    Horatio: This is Detective Yelina Salas.

    Kayleigh: Is she your body guard? *starts to laugh*

    Horatio: *smirks*

    Yelina: I'll call a judge and get a warrant for her cell.

    Horatio: Okay.

    Yelina: *leaves*

    Kayleigh: She's pretty.

    Horatio: Yes she is.

    Kayleigh: So what's this evidence that brought you to me?

    Horatio: Do you know a man named Rick Stetler?

    Kayleigh: What do I get out of this?

    Horatio: That depends on what you tell me.

    Kayleigh: He's been visiting me for a week.

    Horatio: Why?

    Kayleigh: He said he could get me a deal...Isn't that what all of you cops do? Make deals in exchange for information?

    Horatio: What information did he need?

    Kayleigh: He needed men. He didn't tell me why and I didn't ask.

    Horatio: And what did he give you in return?

    Kayleigh: You know that man is a lying son of a bitch.

    Horatio: I assume he didn't keep up his end of the bargain.

    Kayleigh: No.

    Horatio: What names did you give him?

    Kayleigh: You think I'm going to trust you now? After what he did? I'm a little tired of playing this game. Just because I'm a criminal doesn't mean it's okay for me to get screwed over.

    Horatio: A young woman's life is at stake and maybe her daughter too. I need to know who you passed onto him.

    Kayleigh: I want to make a request first.

    Horatio: Name it.

    Kayleigh: A screwdriver.

    Horatio: *stares at Kayleigh*

    Kayleigh: *leans head against wall* ....So I can fix myself. A brand new me.

    Horatio: ...I'm sorry Kayleigh. *turns around, walks away*

    Kayleigh: *starts to cry*

    TBC...................
     
  10. cainesugar

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    Oh gosh Geni where do you come up with this funny, witty, amazingly creative stuff? That was very funny. good one. And yes, kayleigh, she is very pretty. Horatio knows that, isn't that right Horatio?
    Thanks on the Wubba Monster comment. I now have to make it pose and animate so we can make movie clips. I'll work on that. :lol: Thanks for the inspiration and sorry for 'borrowing' your idea (you should copyright all this stuff, it's genius and someone could stea it :rolleyes:)

    Can't wait to see what happens. I feel so bad for all these RT people, they just keep getting knocked around lol. And I kind of feel bad for Kayleigh, because she really has no one and while she did terrible things she'll always be alone and afraid, and can only rely on visist from an asshole to keep her life interesting.
    Speaking of assholes, whoa nelly Stetlerx100000! You really supercharged the evil here, Geni, I like it. He's worse than...um, Lex Luthor (ya know, from Smallville? You still watch? New ep tonight, the wedding! Nevermind OT sorry!!!)
    Hehe. Sorry for taking up all this space with Lex Luthor crap. Great update! Can't wait for more, this is so exciting!
     
  11. Anni Grey

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    Oh good lord, that was good! So much action, I almost lost my way. I have to know how this pans out!

    I feel bad for Kayleigh, she wants so bad to be 'fixed' that my heart burst for her. However, she could be using that as a ploy to get out... But the tears tell me differently.

    Now, Stettie, I don't feel bad for. He's such an Ass. I think that's enough said if I want to keep my dignity.

    All in all, I loved it! Can hardly wait for more! Great job!
     
  12. Finch

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    Oh I love Lex. :devil:

    Anyway, lol. You can borrow my ideas anytime, Lilly. :)

    Thanks Anni!

    *********

    Prison cell, one hour later

    Calleigh: So why are we here again?

    Speed: *shines flashlight* We're looking for evidence of whatever the inmate gave Stetler whether it be a piece of paper, a pencil, anything.

    Calleigh: *lifts matress* This place is just as bad as the men's prison.

    Speed: Well the state doesn't exactly see gender.

    Calleigh: *opens books* Still, it's not somewhere I'd want to be.

    Speed: *leans closer to wall*

    Calleigh: You find something? *walks over*

    Speed: You bring the ALS?

    Calleigh: Sure.

    Few minutes later

    Calleigh: Looks like writing.

    Speed: Yeah. Louis...Batone.

    Calleigh: Name of one of the men?

    Speed: This happens when the paper gets pressed against the wall and a pen is used to write down the words leaving behind the indentations and scratch marks which we can see with an alternate light source.

    Calleigh: So she wrote the information on a piece of paper and handed it to Stetler.

    Speed: This is one of the guys that Stetler must have hired to kidnap either Jess or Alena.

    Calleigh: He's in Cuba with Alena...So he needed someone in Miami with Jess. Maybe this is the guy.

    Speed: We have to find him.

    Calleigh: We find him, we find Jess.

    Speed: *turns off AlS* Where's Kayleigh?

    Calleigh: She's outside in the exercise pit.

    Speed: I'm going to need to talk to her about this guy, see what he specialized in.

    Calleigh: You want me to go with?

    Speed: Nah, I can handle it. *leaves*

    Calleigh: Okay.

    Exercise pit, doors open

    Speed: *walks in*

    Doors close

    Kayleigh: *leaning head against fence*

    Speed: *places hands in pockets* I need your help.

    Kayleigh: Everybody needs something. *turns around*

    Speed: Louis Batone's name was written on your wall. That's the name you gave to Stetler.

    Kayleigh: So go find him, CSI boy.

    Speed: I need some information first.

    Kayleigh: You know what I like about you? So casual and fearless. I am a murderer.

    Speed: Are you going to hurt me?

    Kayleigh: I haven't decided yet.

    Speed: Well while you're deciding, I need that information.

    Kayleigh: Do you have a gun?

    Speed: No.

    Kayleigh: You know, I always wondered why they put basketball nets in here but they never give you a ball. Kind of defeats the purpose don't you think? *laughs*

    Speed: Maybe.

    Kayleigh: *places hands behind back*

    Speed: *lowers eyes*

    Kayleigh: You kind of get used to this place after a while though.

    Speed: *walks around Kayleigh*

    Kayleigh: *turns around* It's too bad I won't be here for very long.

    Speed: Oh really.

    Kayleigh: *smiles* I'm being transfered until they can fix up this place. You know, before it falls apart and everyone escapes. Kind of reminds me of a zoo. Except there's less puke and screaming children. A lot of blood though. *pulls out knife*

    Speed: *stares at knife*

    Kayleigh: Aren't you excited to become the next animal on display? Then again you won't be alive to see your fans.

    Speed: *backs up* Where's the guard?

    Kayleigh: Oh I'm afraid he's not coming. There's actually a riot in prograss as we speak. A couple of the girls decided it might be nice to transfer early.

    Speed: ...Put the knife down.

    Kayleigh: Why don't you wave your kit and make it disappear. *walks closer*

    Speed: *backs up into fence*

    Kayleigh: *swings hand*

    Speed: *grabs Kayleigh's hand*

    Kayleigh: *frowning*

    Speed: Back up.

    Kayleigh: You have no idea what it's like in here.

    Speed: I have an idea.

    Kayleigh: Then you know what it's like to want to die.

    Speed: I do.

    Kayleigh: Then why are you still alive?

    Speed: Because I'm a coward.

    Kayleigh: I don't believe that.

    Speed: High praise coming from a criminal.

    Kayleigh: I'm your sister. I looked up to you, you can't say that you want to die.

    Speed: *lets go of Kayleigh's hand*

    Kayleigh: *stares at Speed*

    Speed: Kill me.

    Kayleigh: ...

    Speed: ...Please.

    Kayleigh: Why?

    Speed: What difference will it make if you already wanted to kill me?

    Kayleigh: ...You're my brother.

    Speed: *extends hand*

    Kayleigh: *hands over knife*

    Speed: Thank you. Now, what area was Louis trained?

    Kayleigh: He's the executioner. Whoever he has, doesn't have very long.

    Speed: *grabs kit, walks to door* Is there really a riot?

    Kayleigh: No.

    Speed: *nods*

    Door opens

    Guard: Oh man I'm sorry I had to take a leak. Everything went okay?

    Speed: Everything's fine. She's no threat to anyone by the way.

    Kayleigh: Hey.

    Speed: *turns around*

    Kayleigh: Did you really want me to kill you?

    Speed: *stares at Kayleigh*

    Kayleigh: *lifts brow*

    Speed: *leaves*

    Door closes

    TBC......................
     
  13. CSI_Trainee

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    Wow so much has happened since i was last on here.... I mean all this secrecy and all that sort of stuff.... its just all wow like for sure. Okay I am like really tired so I just can't form a sentece properly rate now
     
  14. saraholic

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    Wow....Poor Jess and Alena...Poor Kayleigh *shudder* and Poor Speed. :( *hugs Geni* ;) I gotta love what you did with this Geni. It all meshes together so well. I can't wait to see what you do next! :D

    Update super duper quadruper (yes, I made up a word just for you Geni. ;) :lol;) soon! :D
     
  15. cainesugar

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    Oh no Speed you didn't want to die! Speed, you have a pregnant wife, people who love you and a whole bunch of RT fans. Ya know, we're the most important.
    I can't wait to see what happens! Who will be the hero this time, Speed? Eric? Horatio? (*squee*) Wow the tension is building. You like to keep us on the edge of our seats, don't you Geni? Yeah you do.

    I know I love Lex! And Michael Rosenbaum. But he's out at the end of the 7th season (boohoo) Can't wait to watch the TiVod wedding! (I have to go OT to respond to you, sorry) :D

    Anyways, fantastic as always, and I can't wait for more! You really know how to satisfy us, don't know what I'd do without you! Thanks Geni! :D
     
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