Poetry, Anyone?

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  1. stripforensics

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    I've written a bunch of poetry lately because we had to do it for English, so I thought I'd share! If anyone else has poetry they've written or would like to talk about poems they like, then go right ahead!

    We were given 10 prompts; I've done 7 of them.

    Prompt 1: This was a marginal poem, which mean it had to stay inside the margins of our paper. My teacher had 9 random words. She'd pick a word and we'd have to write a line of our poem, then we'd get the next word, write the next line, etc. It was very interesting, lol. The bold words are the words we were given.

    "Marginal Poem"

    A pattern emerged as time went on
    Emotions repeated like a circle
    Something glimmering would soon be lost
    As one love leaves, towards another one he crawls
    He was forced to wade through conflicting thoughts
    It became too easy for strong feelings to scatter
    If he thought at last this one will shine, he soon found he was wrong
    He felt like a snake had made a coil around his heart
    He couldn't help but let love fall


    Everyone else in the class had such different ones for that. For example the girl behind me had a funny one. It went from a bunch of people looking at a painting in a museum to an explosion killing them all :eek:

    Prompt 4: We had to pick from a packet. There were 6 prompts in the packet: write a poem in response to "This Is A Poem To My Son Peter"/write a poem to a parent about a time you felt punished/write a poem to someone you wrongly hurt, write a poem about what you would do if you were in charge of the world, create a poem in which each line has a different worry about procrastinating over something, describe a sunrise, write a poem like "Jabberwocky" using nonsense words, or write an apology in the form of a poem. I chose the sunrise. This is one of my favorites that I've ever written!

    "Sunrise"

    Morning’s first light shyly peeks above the trees
    It wakes and stretches, feeling the soft, cool breeze
    A field of tulips blooms in the sky
    On brand new wings, a bird soars high
    The darkest corners are touched by fingers of gold
    Shadows are chased away, warmth replaces the cold
    The sweet smell of spring floats on the air
    New life grows with uninhibited flair
    The moon lost the battle, the stars are now gone
    A new day has broken with the arrival of dawn


    Prompt 5: This one had to use a sound device to enhance the poem's mood or reflect the poem's subject. I used alliteration and rhyming to make it sing-songy! I had a lot of fun doing this one!

    "The Ham"

    Sally Simpson said to Sam,
    “Will we work on Wednesday’s ham?”
    He replied, “I hope so, hun;
    Dinner dare not be badly done.”
    They toiled tremendously, side by side,
    Preparing the perfect pork they had eyed.
    Everything ended up easy and fine
    And soon all acquaintances had arrived at nine.
    Happily they took up ten table spots
    Waiting for dinner and Sally’s dress daubed with dots.
    She straightened her hair and smiled her best,
    Joyfully holding the ham and joining the rest.
    Promptly she tripped, she tumbled, she tipped!
    Shoes had sneakily out from under her slipped.
    Food was forgotten as friends had a laugh;
    Sally sat and sulked without as much as a half.


    Prompt 6: This was a cool one. We had to pick any word, then brainstorm a list of words that relate by sound, not meaning. Then we had to pick 6 or 7 of those from the list and use them in a poem with the original word in the title. The bold words are the words that came from the original word, ocean. I really like this one. The dots are in place of spaces. I made it look like water with line 1 being tabbed 1 space, line 2 tabbed 2 spaces, line 3 tabbed 1, line 4 tabbed 0, line 5 tabbed 1, etc. so it gave the effect of flowing water. But I can't do that here :(

    "Ocean Night"

    Open, vast, still, and black,
    .....It reflects a twinkling jewelbox.
    ..........Dark waters quietly lap the shores.
    .....White foam rushes in, pulls out
    In calm, never-ending motion, and
    .....One lone boat sways in the waves.
    ..........The little town sleeps in silence but
    .....Peaceful emotions are soon to end.
    The horizon is alight, burning
    .....With red fires that spell an omen.


    Prompt 8: We had to go to www.magpo.com. You know those boards with all the little words as magnets that you can make into stories? Well, it's that, but online. There are six "kits" with specific words for you to choose from. I picked the artist kit!

    "imagination"

    ink silhouette on the pad
    a woman captured in color
    the artist draws her with fiery passion
    an angel is coming alive
    paint strokes compose a vivid dream
    imagination creates beauty in his empty life


    Prompt 9: This was an acrostic, but not any normal acrostic! We had to pick any word, then use each letter to begin a word that had to do with the original poem. Then we had to write the poem using those words as is. My word was waterfall.

    "Waterfall"

    Whitewater fills the deep pool, the
    Aqueous giver and sustainer of all. The
    Torrent twists, it turns, it snakes around rocks, as
    Ever-flowing as the river of life.
    Rushing and gushing, it’s a beautiful sight.
    Falling constantly, it can’t be stopped.
    Azure water is crystal clear as it storms from
    Lofty heights.
    Luxurious paradise lies in its mist.


    Prompt 10: For this one, we could write anything. This one was inspired by me reading too much about forensics/crime lately and by ancienttomb describing bones as "white as snow" over in the Have you ever dissected an animal? [like in biology class?] thread!

    "Snow-White"

    They lie forgotten
    Lost, exposed
    In the city life moves on
    As one life lies frozen in time
    Her screams faded years ago
    Her killer faded into time
    She disappeared one night
    But no one looked
    And no one found
    A red rose blooms
    Alone
    On the spot where her body fell
    Its petals dyed in the scarlet blood that was spilled
    The bones lie forgotten
    Lost, exposed
    Dirty, grimy
    Blackened
    But crimson glows amidst the gloom
    One day someone will find the rose
    One day someone will find the rose


    There are 3 prompts that I haven't done yet. 2 was to write a poem modeled after "Mother to Son." Give advice about something to someone who needs it; use an extended metaphor. Focus on free and creative choice and extension of the metaphor. 3 told us to use a central symbol to write a poem about a choice you've made or will make. And 7 said write a "portrait" poem about somebody, real or fictitious. Use words to enhance your tone towards that person. I mite do 7 about Greg ;)

    Sooo I'd like to hear what ya'll think about my poems! :D Also if anyone's written any of their own, feel free to post! And discussion of famous poems is welcome, too!
     
  2. Charisma

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    HOLY CRAP, JEFF...youre freaking talented!!! keep up the good work! ;)

    i`d share mine...but as therapy...my ex boyfriend thought it would be a good idea that i throw my emo poetry notebook away...haha :rolleyes:
     
  3. Nikka_what

    Nikka_what CSI Level Two

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    Jeff...can I just say I love you to death right now?! *fiddles with braid* If only you were less bi, and there was not the 10 (or 11?) year age split between us...*remembers she has a boyfriend* Crap. Oh well. It wouldn't work out anyway. :rolleyes: {Since a vague disclaimer is nobody's friend...no, I'm not hitting on you or flirting with you.:lol: }


    Here's some of Nikka's jibberish...

    December:
    Morning sun with whispers of winter light
    only leaves me wanting you--
    night brings the cold truth

    Our favorite house was always more than that, full of comfort beneath your words

    We could never make it to work on time

    But people change and rooms fall through

    Love keeps watch when every day risks rain


    Eh...I'll be leaving now. *runs to hide under bed*

    And yes, I like your stuff
     
  4. BittenByTheWolfe

    BittenByTheWolfe CSI Level Three

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    Well, I can analyze poetry six ways to Sunday but to be perfectly honest, I can't stand writing it, myself. Probably cause I'm really no good at it. :lol:

    However, I do have to say that I enjoy reading the occasional poem and Jeff, I particularly enjoyed "Ocean Night." Excellent use of imagery.

    Anyways, since there's no way in hell I'm gonna post my crappy, sometimes-alcohol-induced poetry, I'll share two of my all time favorite poems:

    William Shakespeare - Sonnet 29

    When, in disgrace with fortune and men's eyes,
    I all alone beweep my outcast state
    And trouble deaf heaven with my bootless cries
    And look upon myself and curse my fate,
    Wishing me like to one more rich in hope,
    Featured like him, like him with friends possess'd,
    Desiring this man's art and that man's scope,
    With what I most enjoy contented least;
    Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising,
    Haply I think on thee, and then my state,
    Like to the lark at break of day arising
    From sullen earth, sings hymns at heaven's gate;
    For thy sweet love remember'd such wealth brings
    That then I scorn to change my state with kings.


    Percy Bysshe Shelley - Music, When Soft Voices Die

    Music, when soft voices die,
    Vibrates in the memory;
    Odours, when sweet violets sicken,
    Live within the sense they quicken.

    Rose leaves, when the rose is dead,
    Are heap'd for the beloved's bed;
    And so thy thoughts, when thou art gone,
    Love itself shall slumber on.
     
  5. HollywoodVegasHottie

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    OMG Jeff, your poetry rocks! I love reading other people's poetry! I saw "the Outsiders" the other day on A&E and Robert Frost's "Nothing Gold Can Stay" was recited:

    Nature’s first green is gold,
    Her hardest hue to hold.
    Her early leaf’s a flower;
    But only so an hour.
    Then leaf subsides to leaf,
    So Eden sank to grief,
    So dawn goes down to day
    Nothing gold can stay.


    These are some of my friend's poems:

    Creativity
    Creativity
    To show who I am
    Through song
    Through music
    Through writing
    That lets me fly free

    Perseverance
    Keeps me from
    Throwing away
    What is destined
    For me

    Kindness
    Is to show
    How open I am
    To the world
    And rarely have it returned

    Remembrance
    Of the best times
    Of my life
    Help me live life
    To the very fullest

    Laughter
    Like colorful butterflies
    Soaring sky high
    In my spirit


    Ican't
    I can’t believe this is happening.
    I can’t do this to myself.
    I can’t.

    I know I shouldn’t think like this, but I do
    I don’t want to.
    I look at you, and then look away
    I’m so confused, yet I know it all.

    Thousands of thoughts race through my head.
    I never wish to dwell.
    I never wished to feel this way.
    I don’t know who to confide in.


    then there's more here
     
  6. Ducky

    Ducky Master of the Moos Moderator

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    Nice poems :)

    It's really not my thingy. Oh god I didn't hate anything more in Finnish classes than poetry analysis. It's just not my thing.
     
  7. Guest

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    I love Sonnet 29. Probably because I was brainwashed with it from High School and until now, in Literature. lol. And Percy Bysshe Shelley also has a wonderful poem, "To the West Wind".

    My favorite popular poem is from Robert Frost:

    "Stopping By Woods On A Snowy Evening"

    Whose woods these are I think I know.
    His house is in the village, though;
    He will not see me stopping here
    To watch his woods fill up with snow.

    My little horse must think it's queer
    To stop without a farmhouse near
    Between the woods and frozen lake
    The darkest evening of the year.

    He gives his harness bells a shake
    To ask if there's some mistake.
    The only other sound's the sweep
    Of easy wind and downy flake.

    The woods are lovely, dark, and deep,
    But I have promises to keep,
    And miles to go before I sleep,
    And miles to go before I sleep.



    And here is one of mine:

    "Bittersweet Symphony"


    Intertwining fingers beneath the sultry melody,
    ... I confuse fiction from reality.

    A strong slap of arguable cologne
    - reminds a feeling I should condemn-
    stirs awake from its shallow grave,
    dug out of a feeble fork and
    uncontrollable misty eyes.


    Exposed breaths tickling,
    Parting emotions over the crashing tidal wave...
    Who could you save?

    When the symphony's bittersweet tirade
    escapes the recesses of your thirsty
    bloodstream,
    and you drown in a pool of misty eyes and
    twining fingers...

    in a passion- that would, could never linger.
    Ever.



    Most of my poems are here, if anyone's interested. :)
     
  8. CSIri

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    Great poems, Jeff! :) I'm impressed!
     
  9. kazzy

    kazzy Head of the Swing Shift

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    Woah. :eek:

    Those poems are great! I like the Ocean Night and the Snow-White. I like reading poetry but not analysing it. It's just not my thing. It's very impressive, Jeff! :D
     
  10. stripforensics

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    All the other poems you all have posted are great!

    I WROTE ANOTHER ONE! Problem is, I don't know which prompt to use it for, cuz it matches with two of them...

    "The Wall"

    The Wall

    “Climb over the wall,” they told me
    “You’ve gotta stop staring at it,” they said,
    “Just go.”
    But the wall is high, so very high,
    And who knows what lies on the other side?
    I want to know
    Yet I am afraid.
    What I’ve been waiting for all my life could be
    Right in front of me,
    But the first step is the hardest.
    I know what they’re telling me is what I should do
    So why don’t I just go?
    I stand at the bottom,
    A lifetime rising above me.
    I’ve got to ignore all that’s in my head
    All the worries, all the fears,
    And go.


    YAY SYMBOLISM!!!
     
  11. KatieHeartsCSI

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    I found myself wandering
    Alone; I was in the cold
    I had no one to talk to
    Felt my life was on hold

    Through the pain and suffering
    I know I'll make it thorugh
    I wipe my tears from my face
    It was something I had to do

    I hide my face
    From the world
    For no one to see
    But I only know
    That I'm the one
    Who could set her free

    Lying, crying, slowly dying
    The pain the I am now defying
    The words I thought would never secrete
    From my lips, for now they speak

    For she has left
    It was for the best
    The clouds now disappear
    My mind, my heart, and now my soul
    Are now under my own control

    As for the sun
    Now It shines
    My heart's no longer cold
    Though she's gone
    I can go on
    And so the truth is told


    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
    This is more of a song. But here:

    I found myself wandering
    In a sea of emptyness
    I could not see
    I could not breathe
    I want to be free
    I look around
    To find a way out
    But the emptyness
    Is slowing me down
    It's choking me
    Every second that passes
    How could this be?
    I don't wanna lose my faith
    In me

    But it's getting tighter
    And it wont go
    I'm crying out
    I'm screaming no, no, no
    Everything's fading right before my eyes
    I'm giving up
    No, no, no

    It's getting tighter...

    The further it pulls
    The tighter it gets
    The harder I try
    But it's useless
    I wish it would stop
    In this emptyness
    Before I let go
    My life is such a mess
    But then I see a light
    A little ahead
    I swim towards it
    But it pulls back
    I'm fighting my own
    The light's getting close
    I feel so liberated
    Then the light disappears
    And I'm alone once more

    But it's getting tighter (x3)
    And it wont go
    I'm crying out
    I'm screaming no, no, no
    Everything's fading right before my eyes
    I'm giving up (x8)
    No, no, no

    It's getting tighter...


    I'll find more when I can. Tell me what you think!
    :D
     
  12. CSI3

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    Wonderful poetry people... this coming from a person who'd rather do anything but poetry... all these lovely poems have compelled me to share mine (forced from me for Gr.10 English).... ah well, enjoy, and feel free to comment

    Life

    Always flowing, moving
    starting lively and loud,
    propelled by your choices,
    constantly moving forward

    to a joyous staccato,
    jumpy and playful,
    lightly dancing over notes of happiness,
    tripping and falling through grace notes and glissandos.

    Slightly slowing to start studies,
    stumbling though standard scales,
    continuous, repetitive,
    increasingly difficult,

    speeding up,
    jumping joyously though keys,
    the time has come no more studies!
    Now the tone becomes more somber,

    Steady marcato marches play,
    stiff, unyielding time,
    dressed in dreary tone,
    never slowing, never speeding.

    Smoothly slowing to soft serenades,
    filled with happiness, joy, and love,
    floating, drifting, softening,
    into silent stillness.

    *****************************************

    Glorious It Is

    The water droplets falling down from the sky
    And beginning their wandering down
    The slippery slope
    Trickling they drip and drop,
    Landing with a sonorous plop!
    Glorious it is to see
    Great lakes in the south
    Spread amongst hills of green
    Glorious it is to see

    Glorious it is to see
    Every droplet cascading down
    Breaking into graceful flight
    Glorious to see them drop
    Over the cliff and into space
    To the river down below
    They fall with gleaming grace
    Glorious it is to see

    Glorious it is
    To see them flow
    In the valley far below
    They roil in rapid through the rocks
    Around which they gather in eddies
    Constantly flowing unto the sea
    Glorious it is to see

    Glorious it is
    To see the mists rising from the Earth
    Returning to the sky.
    Freely they rise into the sunlit sky
    When the sunlight hits them,
    They sparkle like tiny jewels
    Suspended in the sky.
    Glorious it is
    When a rainbow fills the sky

    *********************************

    Ode

    Riding the waves
    They suddenly dive,
    And slip beneath the turquoise sea,
    Down to the depths of darkness
    They plunge powerfully.
    Playfully chasing each other,
    And rising to the surface of the sea
    Jumping high from the water
    In leaps filled with joy
    Diving again,
    Hidden by glittering waves.


    *********************************


    Day

    I walk from the water,
    After a swim under the sun,
    Delighted for it was such fun.
    From my bag I pluck a book,
    To read while enjoying the music of the sea.

    I walk to home for dinner,
    And think to dessert,
    Which shall it be?
    Apple pie, or chocolate covered ice cream,
    For me?

    The sunset orange-red,
    Above the sea,
    Slides lower and lower,
    Beckoning the world
    To a silent sleep.
     
  13. tuesdaymorning

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    These poems were written over two years ago. I haven't been able to find any of my new.

    Light
    When I was sad, you were there to pick me up.
    When I tripped and fell right on my face, you came up guided me along.
    You showed me what is right and what is wrong.
    You told me two wrongs don't make a right yet I ignored and found out for myself.
    You made my cry
    You made me fell like I wanna die
    Yet
    Because you did this, I am stronger.
    You are my light.
    The darkness may come and hide my face but you will come and wipe it away and pull me free.
    I want to thank you.
    My light.
    ---
    My Vision Is Blurry
    Tears fill blue hues
    And fall towards the ground
    And when they fall I will become
    A distant memory
    No more will I be me
    Instead, I'll be a memory
    It all happens in slow motion
    The tear falls from my chin and races past my hand
    It's falling towards my feet
    "Stop!" I would yell
    But that is all behind
    The future and my vision
    Is blurry.
    --
    Clueless To Their Worlds
    I used to be happy
    I used to laugh
    I used to be everything you wanted
    Now
    Everything
    Is
    Gone
    I don't understand
    I'm so clueless
    So why don't you help me?
    Should I sit here and stare
    Pretending everything is okay?
    NO!
    I WILL NOT!
    It's just that I'm so damn clueless to their worlds
    Someone hold me
    And keep me there.
    --
    I Swim Through Your Veins
    I swim through your vains.
    Swim
    Swim
    Swim
    The waters inside of you aren't free
    They're locked and wont let me get to your heart
    I must know why you are hurt
    Swim
    Swim
    Swim
    I told you!
    I can't get in!
    Open up
    I'm not a disease
    I'm your medication
    I will heal your wounds
    Even if that means that will take forever
    I have time
    Do you?
    Yes!
    You do!
    Don't ever stop believing in yourself
    If you do
    Then I will have to do all the work
    I don't want to do that
    So
    Let me swim
    Swim
    Swim
    Swim
    Damnit
    I told you!
    Your heart is locked.
    Please
    These tears
    That fall from my eyes
    Aren't cause I'm happy that you are sad
    It's because I am sad
    I miss you.
    I miss the person I used to love.
    Do you know how many times I had wished for you to be happy?
    So please
    Let me swim and enter your heart.
    --
    Is Sorry Enough?
    Is Sorry Enough?
    Is it?
    Is sorry enough?
    I didn't mean to hurt you
    I swear!
    I just wanted to tell you the truth.
    WAIT!
    PLEASE JUST LISTEN!
    DON'T TURN AWAY!
    Too Late
    Damnit
    Please
    Save me from my own hell
    Just look at me one more time
    Look at me and see my red eyes
    See that my hands are cut and are bleeding
    I am desperate
    Don't think of me as a memory
    I am with you
    I want to be there
    I want to see
    I want to believe
    But...
    It's all gone
    Sorry isn't enough
    I wish sorry meant more
    Maybe more as in money or love
    But, I haven't gone none
    Instead I have fear
    Please take it and lock it up in a box.
    I don't want to see it anymore.
    Now I cry
    And these Rivers
    Are for you
    Don't waste them
    Swim and drink them
    For
    Sorry isn't enough
    --
     
  14. Nikka_what

    Nikka_what CSI Level Two

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    silly scribbles...these are so damn old...

    for my lover
    you lie as only you could
    tonguing the void with overly elaborate language

    always the one to leave when things get ugly

    for my lover, part 2
    i felt your knife rip me

    there beneath my skin hot iron
    a thousand times over

    you could not make me cry

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    My thoughts on all y'all's writing: <333
    Question for Charisma: what is your definition of "emo?" (Your notebook) Mine is along the lines of emo-bands, for example The Cure, Morrisey, more "modern" Death Cab, Bright Eyes, Ben Folds. Ehh...I am being random again. Hm...I will go away now. :rolleyes:
     
  15. araSgerG

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    I found this thread from like one year ago and decided my poems go here. Right?

    MUSIC
    Breathing
    A pulse
    Cut them off and it withers and dies
    Soul
    Rhythm
    Can't be born without them
    Knowledge
    Inspiration
    Smarter than smart, wiser than wise
    Feeds on your emotion
    Takes in your surroundings
    It becomes you
    Overpowers you
    Haydn
    Mozart
    Schubert
    Holst
    Bach
    Beethoven
    Brahms
    Handel
    Chopin
    They all couls see its soul
    Armstrong
    Basie
    Ellington
    Fitzgerald
    Gillespie
    Holiday
    Joplin
    They all could feel its flow
    Adagio
    Allegro
    Andante
    Decrescendo
    Maestoso
    Fortissimo
    Pianissimo
    Retardando
    Staccio
    Ways it moves
    It walks
    Runs
    Trots
    Flies
    The deaf can hear it
    The mute can make it speak
    Breathing with the mouths of flutes
    Its voice speaking with strings and reeds
    While inside it rings
    The bells of clarinets
    Trombones
    Horns
    Trumpets
    Tubas
    Recorders
    Oboes
    Sousaphones
    Cornets
    Bassoons
    Baritones
    And euphoniums
    Beats with the rhythmic pulse of glockenspiels
    Timpanis
    Bells
    Xylophones
    Bass drums
    Castanets
    Cymbals
    Gongs
    Snare drums
    Tambourines
    And triangles
    Part of everyone and everything
    Links the world with one strong chord
     

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