Horror and Hope-CSI NY poem Smacked, pretty much G

MacsGirlMel

MacsGirlMel

Mac's Personal Assistant
I hope this is halfway decent, I do not know much about poetry writing or meter or any of that...most of it seems to match okay though. It's awfully hard finding good phrases for this style though. Enjoy. Feedback is loved and appreciated, flames will be used to...well something, I don't know yet lol.

Horror and Hope by Mel

I watch in horror
The towers burn
Smoke fills the sky
Everything is chaos

The earth shakes
The towers fall
They, and my life
Reduced to ruins


My heart breaks
She’s found alive
Hope fills me
I hold my vigil

She gets worse
She can’t go on
I know it’s time
I must let go

I hold her hand
Say goodbye
Her pain ends
Part of me dies

One more dead
Among so many
To me, much more
My whole world

I feel dead
I have nothing left
Feel so empty
I’m dead inside

Life goes on
I do my job
I just exist
I can’t let go

Stella’s there
Always helping
Becomes my rock
Guides me through

She gives hope
Fills my empty heart
I begin to heal
Learn to love again


I’ll never forget
Claire’s in my heart
But I look ahead
I’m starting over

So much to come
New dreams begin
No matter what
We’ll be together

I feel alive
My heart is full
I am content
I am complete
 
Waouh....I dont know what to say, the words you used are really deep and powerful, i think you are a brillant writer, a real complete writer, you are able to write stories, to play a character on a RP, to write poetry....That's just perfect, you are perfect


Sissi :)
 
sissi59100 said:
Waouh....I dont know what to say, the words you used are really deep and powerful, i think you are a brillant writer, a real complete writer, you are able to write stories, to play a character on a RP, to write poetry....That's just perfect, you are perfect


Sissi :)
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I really have to second Sissi on this one. You rule Mel!
 
That was really a fantasti poem ! :eek:

That was so romtantic, sad and marvelous ! :)

You are really a great writer ! My respect... ;)

Futher so !!!!!!!!!!
 
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